Say YES to Success
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
"Our greatest glory is not in never failing but in rising every time we fail " (Confucious)
What a wealth of knowledge you have about these entrepreneurs and a great idea to incorporate them all in this very pleasing, readable rhyming verse which perfectly fulfils the prompt, both in its motivational quality and its suitability for kiddies. An excellent contender! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
"Our greatest glory is not in never failing but in rising every time we fail " (Confucious)
What a wealth of knowledge you have about these entrepreneurs and a great idea to incorporate them all in this very pleasing, readable rhyming verse which perfectly fulfils the prompt, both in its motivational quality and its suitability for kiddies. An excellent contender! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you. I still don't love the last line of the Dyson one. Do you have any suggestions?
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But one excelled and brought him fame? Just a tiny bit more fluent.
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Yessss! That's perfect. Thank you.
Comment from nancyjam
Your poem is certainly inspirational and a strongly motivational one for kids. Wonderful stories of some famous people should definitely inspire young people to not give up no matter what they try to do.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
Your poem is certainly inspirational and a strongly motivational one for kids. Wonderful stories of some famous people should definitely inspire young people to not give up no matter what they try to do.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thanks very much for this encouraging, supportive review. Very much appreciated.
Comment from Dr. Nad
This is an absolutely marvelous rhyming poem that truly can inspire kids, as it inspires their parents grandparents aunts uncles and cousins. LoL This is a winner for the contest, and I haven't even read the other entries. Thanks for digging into history and finding somebody that everyone of us could identify with and be encouraged to keep on keeping on.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
This is an absolutely marvelous rhyming poem that truly can inspire kids, as it inspires their parents grandparents aunts uncles and cousins. LoL This is a winner for the contest, and I haven't even read the other entries. Thanks for digging into history and finding somebody that everyone of us could identify with and be encouraged to keep on keeping on.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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It was actually so inspiring to write this. I'm a huge advocate for never giving up, so I really appreciate your encouraging feedback. Thanks, Dr. Nad.
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You are most welcome my friend. Embrace the love from above.
Comment from royowen
I remember the proverb, if at first you don't succeed, try, try, try again, I suppose it also depends what it is that one is trying to do. All these folk made life a little easier, but the ones that are my heroes, are those that work hard to help others, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
I remember the proverb, if at first you don't succeed, try, try, try again, I suppose it also depends what it is that one is trying to do. All these folk made life a little easier, but the ones that are my heroes, are those that work hard to help others, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Agreed! Thank you for these kind and supportive words.
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Welcome
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Kiddies Motivational poem writing prompt. If this doesn't motivate young people, I don't know what will. You used some great people as examples. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
An excellent entry for the Kiddies Motivational poem writing prompt. If this doesn't motivate young people, I don't know what will. You used some great people as examples. Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thanks. That was the trickiest part of the assignment - choosing people with whom they could identify. Thanks for noticing that. I appreciate it.
Comment from poetwatch
This is a well written and very informative poem, author. :) Children made know a few of those you mention in this poem and if intrigue they will find out about those other they do not know. This is a very good entry for the Kiddies motivational poem contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
This is a well written and very informative poem, author. :) Children made know a few of those you mention in this poem and if intrigue they will find out about those other they do not know. This is a very good entry for the Kiddies motivational poem contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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You're welcome, and thank you for such a lovely review!
Comment from pome lover
very good examples that determination, and not giving up can lead to success.
I think this would be good for older kids.
When you were little did you ever read or have read to you the famous children's book, "The Little Engine that Could"? Same idea, except a picture book.
Very nice post!
Katharine
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
very good examples that determination, and not giving up can lead to success.
I think this would be good for older kids.
When you were little did you ever read or have read to you the famous children's book, "The Little Engine that Could"? Same idea, except a picture book.
Very nice post!
Katharine
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Oh yesssss!! In fact, Captain Kangaroo used to read it, and I loved it! So you're right: theme and variation on that, for older kids.
Thanks for the really nice review!
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you're most welcome!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever and inspiring poem to encourage us all to keep trying to reach our goal and be successful, I love your epic uplifting poem and wish I had a six left for you, this is a winner for the contest, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
This is a clever and inspiring poem to encourage us all to keep trying to reach our goal and be successful, I love your epic uplifting poem and wish I had a six left for you, this is a winner for the contest, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I hope you're right!! Thanks very much, Dolly.