You are the One
A Morning Sonnet32 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is truly beautiful, Janet! Your well-crafted sonnet skilfully reflects that eye-catching scene and rejoices in the glorious love you share. It evolves just like the morning sun, building up to your superb summation in the rhyming couplet which is utterly delightful. The only suggestion I'd make is to be careful about all the full stops which have the effect of obstructing an otherwise good flow. Better to leave out than overdo (I'm afraid I'm a guilty party myself). Foe example, the following could go: end of line 1, end of line 3, end of line 5, end of line 7, end of line 11, comma at the end of line 13. But well done, Janet! A strong entry. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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This is truly beautiful, Janet! Your well-crafted sonnet skilfully reflects that eye-catching scene and rejoices in the glorious love you share. It evolves just like the morning sun, building up to your superb summation in the rhyming couplet which is utterly delightful. The only suggestion I'd make is to be careful about all the full stops which have the effect of obstructing an otherwise good flow. Better to leave out than overdo (I'm afraid I'm a guilty party myself). Foe example, the following could go: end of line 1, end of line 3, end of line 5, end of line 7, end of line 11, comma at the end of line 13. But well done, Janet! A strong entry. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you Debbie for your thoughtful review and excellent suggestions. I do get bogged down in the punctuation and tend to overdo it. Your kind suggestions were most welcome.
Blessings
Janet
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You're welcome, Janet. A pleasure.
Comment from Mark Jackson
That is very good a perfectly pleasant read. The rhyming all works (one and sun will sound better in accents other than mine). It looks to me that you have 10 syllables in each line although I sometimes struggle with this myself. Great 5 stars thanks for brightening up a dull.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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That is very good a perfectly pleasant read. The rhyming all works (one and sun will sound better in accents other than mine). It looks to me that you have 10 syllables in each line although I sometimes struggle with this myself. Great 5 stars thanks for brightening up a dull.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you mark for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine sonnet Janet and I adored the sentiment as this love has deep and meaningful connotations, we appreciate our memories that transcend time itself, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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A fine sonnet Janet and I adored the sentiment as this love has deep and meaningful connotations, we appreciate our memories that transcend time itself, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Thank you Dolly for the encouraging review and extra special stars. It's always mt pleasure to hear from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Awww, what a sweet poem, Janet. You warmed the corners of my soul. This well crafted poem sings of beauty and love. Both morning and setting sun. That pretty much covers all the time between. Such a special love as this comes rarely.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Awww, what a sweet poem, Janet. You warmed the corners of my soul. This well crafted poem sings of beauty and love. Both morning and setting sun. That pretty much covers all the time between. Such a special love as this comes rarely.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Thank you Rhonda for the encouraging review and kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Such a pretty poem. I enjoyed reading it. It is uplifting and positive. The poem is well written. The picture matches your words well. Very nice job
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Such a pretty poem. I enjoyed reading it. It is uplifting and positive. The poem is well written. The picture matches your words well. Very nice job
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Thank you Brenda for the encouraging review and kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
Janet, this is a lovely, well-written sonnet. I enjoyed every line, but that third quatrain blew me away. It speaks to the profound impact of love, making those fleeting moments feel eternal. You capture it so beautifully, using the day's cycle as a metaphor. Thank you for sharing!
Xo
Jess
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Janet, this is a lovely, well-written sonnet. I enjoyed every line, but that third quatrain blew me away. It speaks to the profound impact of love, making those fleeting moments feel eternal. You capture it so beautifully, using the day's cycle as a metaphor. Thank you for sharing!
Xo
Jess
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Thank you Jessica for the encouraging review and special stars. I'm so pleased that this one resonated with you. It's always a pleasure to hear from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Julie Helms
I appreciate your beautiful description of the morning sunrise. As a night owl, I never see it! This sonnet is a very-well done metaphor for the love of another. Your picture words were perfect to describe it.
Thank you for sharing such a joyous and warm piece of your heart. Julie.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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I appreciate your beautiful description of the morning sunrise. As a night owl, I never see it! This sonnet is a very-well done metaphor for the love of another. Your picture words were perfect to describe it.
Thank you for sharing such a joyous and warm piece of your heart. Julie.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Thank you Julie for the encouraging review and kind comments. My daughter is a night owl as well. But...you all see the night sky while I'm sound asleep. (smiling)
Blessings
Janet
Comment from RodG
Love sonnets never get old for me. The Speaker here rejoices at seeing his lover near when the sun arises. He assures her she is "the one" in the morning and at dusk. Your iambic pentameter is flawless. Nicely done. Rod
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Love sonnets never get old for me. The Speaker here rejoices at seeing his lover near when the sun arises. He assures her she is "the one" in the morning and at dusk. Your iambic pentameter is flawless. Nicely done. Rod
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you Rod for this encouraging an thoughtful review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully worded sonnet, and it is presented very beautifully. It flows very well when it is read aloud and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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This is a beautifully worded sonnet, and it is presented very beautifully. It flows very well when it is read aloud and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written sonnet as an entry in this contest, we written in the chassis way of the Shakespearean sonnet. It all seems to be perfect in its delivery, the subject, the meaningful language, the rhyming and the flow, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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A beautifully written sonnet as an entry in this contest, we written in the chassis way of the Shakespearean sonnet. It all seems to be perfect in its delivery, the subject, the meaningful language, the rhyming and the flow, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you Roy for this stellar review and kind comments.
Bay
Janet
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