thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Smiling"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
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Comment from royowen
Yes, there is true optimism in a smile, which, of course, is an upside down frown, so if we find ourselves frowning, Stand on our heads, heh, heh, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Yes, there is true optimism in a smile, which, of course, is an upside down frown, so if we find ourselves frowning, Stand on our heads, heh, heh, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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thank you.
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Well done
Comment from Laurie Holding
This is so much fun, and I thank you for sharing! Your syllables are on point and I wish you luck in the contest. (But I think you might want an apostrophe in the word "someone's" before the judges get their hands on it.) Great fun!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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This is so much fun, and I thank you for sharing! Your syllables are on point and I wish you luck in the contest. (But I think you might want an apostrophe in the word "someone's" before the judges get their hands on it.) Great fun!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you. fixed it.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. It made me smile. Smiling does really help people feel better. Thank you for posting this. I like the picture. . It is very colorful. Very good job.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It made me smile. Smiling does really help people feel better. Thank you for posting this. I like the picture. . It is very colorful. Very good job.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Cedar
Your poem offers your readers some very good advice. It is true that a smile can go a very long way in perking up someones day.
I wish you good luck in the contest...Bill
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Your poem offers your readers some very good advice. It is true that a smile can go a very long way in perking up someones day.
I wish you good luck in the contest...Bill
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from teafor2
Unknown bard, so you already know that it takes more muscles, energy and effort to frown than it does to smile; throw a punch than a hand
shake; curse than a cordial greeting. These 22 syllables express a very logical reason for smiling, and remember it doesn't require much WORK,
and very very little practice:) Good luck with the contest:) teafor2
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Unknown bard, so you already know that it takes more muscles, energy and effort to frown than it does to smile; throw a punch than a hand
shake; curse than a cordial greeting. These 22 syllables express a very logical reason for smiling, and remember it doesn't require much WORK,
and very very little practice:) Good luck with the contest:) teafor2
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I really do appreciate it.
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You are welcome.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao ,
When someone yawns , those watching usually start yawning too .. it would be great if a smile was contagious too.
I like the theme and the message .
NB: the contest requires TWO 5-7-7 .
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Ciao ,
When someone yawns , those watching usually start yawning too .. it would be great if a smile was contagious too.
I like the theme and the message .
NB: the contest requires TWO 5-7-7 .
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you for pointing out that I needed two. I did go back and added another part.
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🙂you are welcome !
Best of luck!🍀
Comment from Julie Helms
Great topic! But you need two stanzas
Writing Prompt
Write a sedoka poem. A sedoka consists of TWO unrhymed three-line stanzas, each with a syllable count of 5 - 7 - 7.
Keep writing!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Great topic! But you need two stanzas
Writing Prompt
Write a sedoka poem. A sedoka consists of TWO unrhymed three-line stanzas, each with a syllable count of 5 - 7 - 7.
Keep writing!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Yes I went back and fixed it. Thank you.
Comment from XinaD
I love the sentiment here. Just a heads up, the sedoka has TWO stanzas, not one. I gave four stars but will change that once corrected. Will check back, I'd love to see this expanded on. :)
Edited: I updated my rating. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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I love the sentiment here. Just a heads up, the sedoka has TWO stanzas, not one. I gave four stars but will change that once corrected. Will check back, I'd love to see this expanded on. :)
Edited: I updated my rating. Excellent work!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you and I did go back and added another stanza to it.
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Fantastic. I updated my rating :)
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Thank you for your review and I corrected it.
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Thank you
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No problem! Excellent work!
Comment from RodG
It is true. Smile and usually you get one back. And yet too often we scowl for no known reason. I would definitely return the smile of those troubadours in your photo. Rod
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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It is true. Smile and usually you get one back. And yet too often we scowl for no known reason. I would definitely return the smile of those troubadours in your photo. Rod
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you and smiles to you.