Murphy P.I.
Murphy goes into his detective mode25 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
You have a few typos that need to be edited, but you also have a good story. It's imaginative, and flows smoothly. Your descriptions allow the reader to easily envision each scene, like the tights under Amanda's bed. Your dialogue is realistic and the ending is satisfying.
Everything was in placed. (place)
he return to the family room (returned)
rab threw the opened kitchen door ato find Rex. (through) (to find)
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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You have a few typos that need to be edited, but you also have a good story. It's imaginative, and flows smoothly. Your descriptions allow the reader to easily envision each scene, like the tights under Amanda's bed. Your dialogue is realistic and the ending is satisfying.
Everything was in placed. (place)
he return to the family room (returned)
rab threw the opened kitchen door ato find Rex. (through) (to find)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Comment from Douglas Goff
What a cute story! I love it when writers give voice to pets. Very fun.
Couple of fixes:
chimpmonk
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Murphy licked Jessie head again and ran threw the opened kitchen door ato find Rex.
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Small stuff. Great story!
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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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What a cute story! I love it when writers give voice to pets. Very fun.
Couple of fixes:
chimpmonk
(Spelling?)
Also
Murphy licked Jessie head again and ran threw the opened kitchen door ato find Rex.
(Spelling)
Small stuff. Great story!
D
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you!
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One team!
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a very good story. Good details of the character's adventure to get the cotton mouth. This would make a very good children's book. The story was very captivating from beginning to end. Nice job.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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This is a very good story. Good details of the character's adventure to get the cotton mouth. This would make a very good children's book. The story was very captivating from beginning to end. Nice job.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Great job. You wrote such an engaging and heartwarming tale. Your ability to bring Murphy to life on the page is truly remarkable. I found myself captivated by his courage and resourcefulness as he sought to protect his family from the threat of the snake in the yard. The writing is terrific with great use of viewpoint.
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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Great job. You wrote such an engaging and heartwarming tale. Your ability to bring Murphy to life on the page is truly remarkable. I found myself captivated by his courage and resourcefulness as he sought to protect his family from the threat of the snake in the yard. The writing is terrific with great use of viewpoint.
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
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Comment from royowen
What very brave cats whomtook care of the cottonmouth snake, and disposed of it, it had hurt Rec, and potentially could have hurt the female Hunan girl Amanda, If Murphy and Jessie have anything to do with it, great writing, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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What very brave cats whomtook care of the cottonmouth snake, and disposed of it, it had hurt Rec, and potentially could have hurt the female Hunan girl Amanda, If Murphy and Jessie have anything to do with it, great writing, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : And we a(re) small
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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