Here comes the moon
Japanese poetry club EKPHRASTIC POEM36 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Jessica.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery creates a vivid word picture of the scene.
-A very good opening line with "a veil of rippled light,"
followed by effective use of alliteration.
-Very good closing lines create a peaceful mood.
-Very well done; thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Jessica.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery creates a vivid word picture of the scene.
-A very good opening line with "a veil of rippled light,"
followed by effective use of alliteration.
-Very good closing lines create a peaceful mood.
-Very well done; thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Pam, thank you so much. :)
Xoxo
Jess
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You are very welcome, Jess.
Comment from John Ciarmello
I'm running out of things to say about your work, Jess. I mean that in a good way. I think I've used elegance, graciousness, and knowingly passion. They say a poet / (ess) gives away a slice of themselves with each writing piece. I believe that to be true, Jess.
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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I'm running out of things to say about your work, Jess. I mean that in a good way. I think I've used elegance, graciousness, and knowingly passion. They say a poet / (ess) gives away a slice of themselves with each writing piece. I believe that to be true, Jess.
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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John, you always bring a smile to my face!
Thank you, my friend!
Xo
Jess
Comment from rama devi
Delightful personification and what a lovely response to this gorgeous artwork too. The phonics are phenomenal with the consonance of L, P and alliteration of G and B plus assonance of A in lake and draped making it feel like a rhyme.
I love ekhrastic poetry. You've done it again! A six!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Delightful personification and what a lovely response to this gorgeous artwork too. The phonics are phenomenal with the consonance of L, P and alliteration of G and B plus assonance of A in lake and draped making it feel like a rhyme.
I love ekhrastic poetry. You've done it again! A six!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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You?ve made my whole day! lol thank you so much!!
xxoo
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Hurray! xxoo
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is beautifully a written poem. Photo is very nice as well. I love this line draped behind
the blushing moon. This is a nice club entry.
Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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This is beautifully a written poem. Photo is very nice as well. I love this line draped behind
the blushing moon. This is a nice club entry.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Joanne, thank you so much!
Xoxo
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
When I was living near the shores of lake Maggiore , I saw often the light of the moon shimmering on the lake.
A beautiful magical site.
I love the artwork, it enticed me to open your post and read your vivid poem.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Ciao!
When I was living near the shores of lake Maggiore , I saw often the light of the moon shimmering on the lake.
A beautiful magical site.
I love the artwork, it enticed me to open your post and read your vivid poem.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you kindly! Xo
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🙂 your are welcome!
Comment from Wendy G
That is such a very beautiful poem with splendid imagery, describing the image perfectly. The alliteration, subtly used is well done also. The poem certainly is an excellent response to the ekphrastic prompt.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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That is such a very beautiful poem with splendid imagery, describing the image perfectly. The alliteration, subtly used is well done also. The poem certainly is an excellent response to the ekphrastic prompt.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Wendy, thank you so much!
Xoxo
Comment from teafor2
jessica, How many people can look at the exact same image/picture, and see it totally differently; using simple straight forward words trying to describe the wonders of nature at any given moment...It's the wordsmith
who uses metaphors, personification and hyperbole in verbiage that will
knocked your socks off...As in this case! Thank you for sharing this with us here at fanstory. teafor2
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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jessica, How many people can look at the exact same image/picture, and see it totally differently; using simple straight forward words trying to describe the wonders of nature at any given moment...It's the wordsmith
who uses metaphors, personification and hyperbole in verbiage that will
knocked your socks off...As in this case! Thank you for sharing this with us here at fanstory. teafor2
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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I am honored, truly. Thank you, my friend!
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You are welcome.
Comment from June Sargent
I liked the romantic tone of your poem - creating an image of a blushing bride gliding across the lake into the arms of the eager groom. Great response to the club challenge.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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I liked the romantic tone of your poem - creating an image of a blushing bride gliding across the lake into the arms of the eager groom. Great response to the club challenge.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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June, thank you so much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Jessica,
Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club event. Great entry with a good word count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy-
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Jessica,
Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club event. Great entry with a good word count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy-
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Gypsy! Xoxo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely, flowing and evocative verse reflecting the beautiful scene in the painting. It skilfully exudes atmosphere whilst maintaining its very economic form. A great entry for the club. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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A lovely, flowing and evocative verse reflecting the beautiful scene in the painting. It skilfully exudes atmosphere whilst maintaining its very economic form. A great entry for the club. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Debbie, thank you so much. That means a lot!
Xoxo
Jess