Horror is Personal
Not the typical horror story, but a horror for me.27 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Sometimes the stomach gives away to a sudden eruption and you cannot help what happens. It would be embarrassing but what are you going to do other than find the nearest toilet?
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Sometimes the stomach gives away to a sudden eruption and you cannot help what happens. It would be embarrassing but what are you going to do other than find the nearest toilet?
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you Rosemary. There wasn't anything I could do. I guess it would have been worse if it had happened in the car. If it had, I might never have gotten out in the condition I was in.
Comment from Wendy G
Very humorous, but I do feel for you. I agree - horror is very personal , and I think the realism of your story makes the reader relate to your embarrassment. You deserve to win the contest because of your courage and honesty, and I send my best wishes!
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Very humorous, but I do feel for you. I agree - horror is very personal , and I think the realism of your story makes the reader relate to your embarrassment. You deserve to win the contest because of your courage and honesty, and I send my best wishes!
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you Wendy. I appreciate the review. I like the fact that people are finding it humorous rather than disgusting. I've been embarrassed before but never this bad.
Beth
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I think we would all feel that this experience was one of horror, something we would all relate to but greatly fear happening to us, and it's much more real than any fantasy story.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am sorry, sweetie pie, but I did laugh my ass off ( oh no, it's still there). I have had restroom problems all my life, so I know pretty much all the things that can happen and always am prepared with wipes, a change of clothes, immodium, etc. Horror in embarrassment is common. I am sending you much love your way as recompense for laughing.:-)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I am sorry, sweetie pie, but I did laugh my ass off ( oh no, it's still there). I have had restroom problems all my life, so I know pretty much all the things that can happen and always am prepared with wipes, a change of clothes, immodium, etc. Horror in embarrassment is common. I am sending you much love your way as recompense for laughing.:-)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I forgive you. If you know me at all, you know I was hoping everyone would laugh. I don't know how to write scary horror but I do have a sense of humor. I would much rather they find it funny than disgusting.
Beth
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You wrote about it in a very funny way, I mean you almost had me on the floor. Thanks so much. it is good to laugh out loud. :-)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was excellent. I like how you share that an embarrassing moment is in itself a horror. Very true but I never thought of it that way. The first part of your story talks about peeing yourself. That would be an excellent place to show your story. Don't just tell us about it. Share it with dialogue and share the moment so we can feel that horror through your storytelling. Outside of that thought - this was very real and powerful. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I thought this was excellent. I like how you share that an embarrassing moment is in itself a horror. Very true but I never thought of it that way. The first part of your story talks about peeing yourself. That would be an excellent place to show your story. Don't just tell us about it. Share it with dialogue and share the moment so we can feel that horror through your storytelling. Outside of that thought - this was very real and powerful. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you Michael. I did have quite a bit more there at the beginning but I took it out, because it was longer that I usually like to post. Maybe I'll put it back if you think it needs it. I teally appreciate your comments.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh trust me, it happens! And your system was just too pure to deal with all that Korean food. I weasn't disgusted reading it although it was very vividly expressed (well done f or that!). In fact I thoroughly enjoyed your story which is well structured with plenty of pace and tongue-in-cheek humour! I think those sadists are not only not horrified, they're actually turned on by their actions (probably better to say this). There are also some edits: If it('s) part of a well-crafted story..; that('s) fine; did go a long way toward(s) letting me know (no need for commas either end); I'll just smile (and) let my caregiver; (To) me this was horror at its worst; leaving who know(s) what in my wake; stripped from the (waist) down; (In) the middle of all this. I think the embarrassment of telling this hilarious story, Beth, got the better of you with the errors:)) Well done though and good luck! Debbie
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Oh trust me, it happens! And your system was just too pure to deal with all that Korean food. I weasn't disgusted reading it although it was very vividly expressed (well done f or that!). In fact I thoroughly enjoyed your story which is well structured with plenty of pace and tongue-in-cheek humour! I think those sadists are not only not horrified, they're actually turned on by their actions (probably better to say this). There are also some edits: If it('s) part of a well-crafted story..; that('s) fine; did go a long way toward(s) letting me know (no need for commas either end); I'll just smile (and) let my caregiver; (To) me this was horror at its worst; leaving who know(s) what in my wake; stripped from the (waist) down; (In) the middle of all this. I think the embarrassment of telling this hilarious story, Beth, got the better of you with the errors:)) Well done though and good luck! Debbie
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you Debbie. You found three errors that the first two poeple who read it didn't find. I think one of the reason was I saw the time was about to expire, and I had a cat that I had to keep tossing off my keyboard. I think anyone turned on by torture, is a sick human being.
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I thought that you might be rushing for the contest deadline and still don't understand why they give us such little time. Stressful!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Oh my, you poor dear!
What a horrible story. You deserve the six... and a vote!
If it part of a well crafted story, - oops (it's)
ago, did go a long way toward letting me know, it is possible - You don't need either comma.
I'll just smile at let my caregiver- (and) let my caregiver
Did everyone recover?
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Oh my, you poor dear!
What a horrible story. You deserve the six... and a vote!
If it part of a well crafted story, - oops (it's)
ago, did go a long way toward letting me know, it is possible - You don't need either comma.
I'll just smile at let my caregiver- (and) let my caregiver
Did everyone recover?
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Wow! Thank you for the six stars. That make me feel I didn't do the wrong thing by posting this. I made your correction. Thanks for pointing them out. I was afraid of making it too long. Until we got to a place where I could take a bath and change clothes the day was a nightmare. I felt terrible about those who had to be in the car with me, particularly my grandson who was sitting on the seat with me. At least, it was my car and everyone tried to be nice and pretend it didn't happen. My son said I should write it because he thought there would be those who could identify.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Oh, Beth, if I had a six or even more I would give it to you. I related to almost everything you wrote...Personal horror and especially the things you mentioned are indeed the worse.
Hugs, Carol
If it (is) part of a well crafted story
I'll just smile at let my caregiver (and)
new Toyoda (Toyota)
who know what, in my wake. (knows)
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Oh, Beth, if I had a six or even more I would give it to you. I related to almost everything you wrote...Personal horror and especially the things you mentioned are indeed the worse.
Hugs, Carol
If it (is) part of a well crafted story
I'll just smile at let my caregiver (and)
new Toyoda (Toyota)
who know what, in my wake. (knows)
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you Carol. I really appreciate you pointing ou my spags. My son said I should write about it because he thought people could relate.
Beth
