Driven
A free verse love poem33 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Driven, makes a strong case for the unnamed lovers prowess and tenacity while performing the acts that many of us have forgotten were so very important.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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This poem, Driven, makes a strong case for the unnamed lovers prowess and tenacity while performing the acts that many of us have forgotten were so very important.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Bill!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Sexy, and very, very hot -- will stand an excellent chance of winning the contest, if I know these judges.
"A vice that knows no limit,
beyond the reach of brakes
or reason." -- my fave. :) Best of luck!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Sexy, and very, very hot -- will stand an excellent chance of winning the contest, if I know these judges.
"A vice that knows no limit,
beyond the reach of brakes
or reason." -- my fave. :) Best of luck!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Dawn! This comment made my day!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed all the car, driving, and car mechanic references. I am not certain if all of it is metaphor or if the narrator is really in love with a car mechanic. A great way to show the effects of love. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Enjoyed all the car, driving, and car mechanic references. I am not certain if all of it is metaphor or if the narrator is really in love with a car mechanic. A great way to show the effects of love. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Helen!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Huh? Do you think it's a little warm over here on your side of the building? All of a sudden I am feeling over heated. Oh, maybe it's just your poem! So now you are going to hear a Minnesota response to your poem..... Oofta, that was such a hot dish and awesome free verse. Did I love it? You betcha! And no, we don't really talk like that but a lot of people think we do. Hahaha!
I am sure your husband enjoyed your poem. You did show it to him, right Jess? LOL. I loved it and it's the one thing I do not do enough because I just have a hard time letting go of my rhyming poems unless I do one of Gypsy's club events.
Anyway, thank you so much for sharing this and good luck in the contest. Looks like a winner to me. Take care, my sweet Jess! Love, Debi
reply by Debi Pick Marquette on 08-Jan-2024
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Huh? Do you think it's a little warm over here on your side of the building? All of a sudden I am feeling over heated. Oh, maybe it's just your poem! So now you are going to hear a Minnesota response to your poem..... Oofta, that was such a hot dish and awesome free verse. Did I love it? You betcha! And no, we don't really talk like that but a lot of people think we do. Hahaha!
I am sure your husband enjoyed your poem. You did show it to him, right Jess? LOL. I loved it and it's the one thing I do not do enough because I just have a hard time letting go of my rhyming poems unless I do one of Gypsy's club events.
Anyway, thank you so much for sharing this and good luck in the contest. Looks like a winner to me. Take care, my sweet Jess! Love, Debi
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by Debi Pick Marquette on 08-Jan-2024
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LOL, sorry I was being such a cornball when I wrote this, but for some reason I was in a screwy mood and your hot free verse just got to me. It was so sensual! I loved it!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, this will be a very memorable verse for the contest! An original and intriguing extended metaphor capturing this inexhaustible (sorry about that pun) love affair that leaves the reader feeling more than a bit envious:)) Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Well, this will be a very memorable verse for the contest! An original and intriguing extended metaphor capturing this inexhaustible (sorry about that pun) love affair that leaves the reader feeling more than a bit envious:)) Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Ha! Well, I?m thrilled that my poem could fuel a good pun! Thank you so much, Debbie!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well if that wasn't a super good poem I don't know what is I mean wow this is a piece of magic if I've ever read one I see no issues at all with this exceptional piece of work
Beyond the reach of brakes."
A very cool line I quite like very much to find submission I think it's a contender I wish you the best of luck and I think that it's a fine entry for the what is love poetry contest. I wish you only good things and that your evening is great thanks again!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Well if that wasn't a super good poem I don't know what is I mean wow this is a piece of magic if I've ever read one I see no issues at all with this exceptional piece of work
Beyond the reach of brakes."
A very cool line I quite like very much to find submission I think it's a contender I wish you the best of luck and I think that it's a fine entry for the what is love poetry contest. I wish you only good things and that your evening is great thanks again!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Lea! That means the world! Xo
Comment from Navada
The extended metaphor of the elite sports car is a great way to describe the drive and passion being evoked here. I like the way you incorporate different senses to enact the experience of this great love.
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The extended metaphor of the elite sports car is a great way to describe the drive and passion being evoked here. I like the way you incorporate different senses to enact the experience of this great love.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Navada! Xo
Comment from karenina
Oh, what a wonderful, sustained metaphor...sizzling sensual and with sweet kisses of alliteration that serve to idle that engine with a romantic "rev" that makes me stop, smile, and dip back in to read once again and enjoy!
"He is the driving force
that propels me forward,
and keeps me coming."
Nothing else needs to be said!
Karenina
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Oh, what a wonderful, sustained metaphor...sizzling sensual and with sweet kisses of alliteration that serve to idle that engine with a romantic "rev" that makes me stop, smile, and dip back in to read once again and enjoy!
"He is the driving force
that propels me forward,
and keeps me coming."
Nothing else needs to be said!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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This made my day, thank you, Karenina!! Xo
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You're a joy to read!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I really liked your picture and poem .the picture is so moving. It went well with the words. I also liked the sentence I am in love with tge way.... Very well written. Great job.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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I really liked your picture and poem .the picture is so moving. It went well with the words. I also liked the sentence I am in love with tge way.... Very well written. Great job.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Brenda!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is well-written with imagery and sensory details that bring a love alive. I thought it flowed very well. I very much liked the idea of what would happen in 'the shadow of his leaving.' The idea of not being able to sit still definitely is what a love connection will inspire, too. The car analogies were fun and possibly something a male reader will relate to as well.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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This is well-written with imagery and sensory details that bring a love alive. I thought it flowed very well. I very much liked the idea of what would happen in 'the shadow of his leaving.' The idea of not being able to sit still definitely is what a love connection will inspire, too. The car analogies were fun and possibly something a male reader will relate to as well.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, that means the world! Xoxo