Behind The Fall
A free verse poem32 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica
This is a good literal and metaphoric poem about a waterfall, The beginning seems to describe a genuine waterfall. But then it is evident
that the waterfall is tears. These tears are hidden so people think the speaker is happy. It sounds like a good picture of depression.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on winning the contest.
Happy New Year.
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Hi Jessica
This is a good literal and metaphoric poem about a waterfall, The beginning seems to describe a genuine waterfall. But then it is evident
that the waterfall is tears. These tears are hidden so people think the speaker is happy. It sounds like a good picture of depression.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on winning the contest.
Happy New Year.
Joan
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Joan!
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Don?t mention it, Jessica:
Joan
Comment from Jim Wile
Jess, your poetry is often so beautifully metaphorical. Here you portray a bastion of beauty and strength to all around her, yet hiding within her soul and unseen by others is a deep sadness that she would just as soon keep secret. It is a worthy goal, but difficult to keep up the facade and at what cost?
You have really mastered the art of free verse as well as that of rhyming poetry. They both sound so, well, poetic, whereas some free verse sounds just like prose with arbitrary line breaks. There's a big difference, and you have discovered it. - Jim
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Jess, your poetry is often so beautifully metaphorical. Here you portray a bastion of beauty and strength to all around her, yet hiding within her soul and unseen by others is a deep sadness that she would just as soon keep secret. It is a worthy goal, but difficult to keep up the facade and at what cost?
You have really mastered the art of free verse as well as that of rhyming poetry. They both sound so, well, poetic, whereas some free verse sounds just like prose with arbitrary line breaks. There's a big difference, and you have discovered it. - Jim
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Jim, how did I miss this! That means the world, truly. Thank you, my friend!
Xo
Jess
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You're so welcome, Jess.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Your second to last stanza is my favorite and speaks to me on a very personal level absolutely no what a beautiful poem a wonderful reality check on what is and The masks we wear. A really good job grammatically perfect is only one thing to be done about that! I hope you had an amazing Christmas your New year's was Grand and I hope to get everything you wish for in 2024!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Your second to last stanza is my favorite and speaks to me on a very personal level absolutely no what a beautiful poem a wonderful reality check on what is and The masks we wear. A really good job grammatically perfect is only one thing to be done about that! I hope you had an amazing Christmas your New year's was Grand and I hope to get everything you wish for in 2024!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, This means a lot to me!!!
Comment from Sally Law
How lovely they are indeed! My Georgia and New York home has the most beautiful and magnificent, I think. Niagara Falls is without compare. I've been underneath the Canadian Fall, Horseshoe Falls it's called, and to hear and feel the water rush overhead is indescribable. Marvelous poem from your talented hand. A virtual six and compliments. Send you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
Happy New Year!
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How lovely they are indeed! My Georgia and New York home has the most beautiful and magnificent, I think. Niagara Falls is without compare. I've been underneath the Canadian Fall, Horseshoe Falls it's called, and to hear and feel the water rush overhead is indescribable. Marvelous poem from your talented hand. A virtual six and compliments. Send you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
Happy New Year!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have seen small or medium sized waterfalls, but I've never had the pleasure of seeing a large one. I can only imagine the power, guessing from the smaller ones. I hope someday I get the pleasure of seeing one. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The artwork you chose is perfect and the poetic entry left me wanting to feel the powerful waterfall. Good luck with the contest.
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I have seen small or medium sized waterfalls, but I've never had the pleasure of seeing a large one. I can only imagine the power, guessing from the smaller ones. I hope someday I get the pleasure of seeing one. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The artwork you chose is perfect and the poetic entry left me wanting to feel the powerful waterfall. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely fluent free verse capturing the magic of the waterfall in its sunlit mist. Yet cloaked beneath, a darker presence of pain and sorrow never to be seen and always masked by the facade of a smile. A beautifully crafted extended metaphor, once again using your favourite theme of water. Well done and good luck, Jess! Debbie
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A lovely fluent free verse capturing the magic of the waterfall in its sunlit mist. Yet cloaked beneath, a darker presence of pain and sorrow never to be seen and always masked by the facade of a smile. A beautifully crafted extended metaphor, once again using your favourite theme of water. Well done and good luck, Jess! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from Mintybee
Your poem about the difference between what is seen and what is felt was beautifully written. The imagery was lovely. The personification was well done. I would have liked more of the story of this sad waterfall, but I think the point is that no one gets to know. It's private. And I respect that.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Your poem about the difference between what is seen and what is felt was beautifully written. The imagery was lovely. The personification was well done. I would have liked more of the story of this sad waterfall, but I think the point is that no one gets to know. It's private. And I respect that.
Mintybee
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Mintybee xoxo
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Behind the Fall, pieces together several inspired observations to help the readers feel the importance of all the tiny yet important events experienced.
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This free verse, Behind the Fall, pieces together several inspired observations to help the readers feel the importance of all the tiny yet important events experienced.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautiful poem that you have written. I'd like the sale that you've used H stands are pretty much standalone as a sentence, and that was good and then you made enough separation so that the next stand stands out as well, and as I was reading down through the poem. I could see that waterfall as the water Fell into the pool below. I wish you a happy new year and may God bless you richly. Patricia.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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This is a beautiful poem that you have written. I'd like the sale that you've used H stands are pretty much standalone as a sentence, and that was good and then you made enough separation so that the next stand stands out as well, and as I was reading down through the poem. I could see that waterfall as the water Fell into the pool below. I wish you a happy new year and may God bless you richly. Patricia.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Patricia!
Comment from Jacob1395
This is an excellent piece of poetry Jessica. I loved the way how you put this together and I could really picture the water rushing in my mind. An excellent piece of writing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent piece of poetry Jessica. I loved the way how you put this together and I could really picture the water rushing in my mind. An excellent piece of writing.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Jacob, thank you so much for this wonderful review. It means a lot!