Back from the Brink
For Nhia - a true inspiration31 total reviews
Comment from Cathy M
What a lovely tribute to someone who has experienced pain and suffering. Then to see the beauty of love and friendship and respect her fellow students have. Very well done.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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What a lovely tribute to someone who has experienced pain and suffering. Then to see the beauty of love and friendship and respect her fellow students have. Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Cathy - I appreciate your feedback!
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a very well-written poem for this contest. I think it could do well. The story of perseverance comes through loud and clear, and you offer it in the context of school through the vision of a fellow student. I think that is what makes it effective. Terry.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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This is a very well-written poem for this contest. I think it could do well. The story of perseverance comes through loud and clear, and you offer it in the context of school through the vision of a fellow student. I think that is what makes it effective. Terry.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Terry - I really appreciate your insight. xx
Comment from Jacob1395
This is is so horrific, for anyone, let alone a young person to go through, but like you I felt immensely proud of her as you explained how she did her very best to overcome her difficulties. She definitely sounds like a fighter. A well written piece.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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This is is so horrific, for anyone, let alone a young person to go through, but like you I felt immensely proud of her as you explained how she did her very best to overcome her difficulties. She definitely sounds like a fighter. A well written piece.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Moral to the story: NEVER underestimate a redhead!!
This had to be so bittersweet an experience. These are the times when it's so painful to be a teacher, because the "good ones," --and there's no doubt in my mind that you are high up on the list in that category-- don't just have "students," they have "loved ones."
This is a gorgeous, heartwarming story/poem. You have done an outstanding job. (Are you still in touch enough with her to share this?)
Yours is the last entry on the list, which means they "saved the best for last." Definitely gets my vote. xoxo
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Moral to the story: NEVER underestimate a redhead!!
This had to be so bittersweet an experience. These are the times when it's so painful to be a teacher, because the "good ones," --and there's no doubt in my mind that you are high up on the list in that category-- don't just have "students," they have "loved ones."
This is a gorgeous, heartwarming story/poem. You have done an outstanding job. (Are you still in touch enough with her to share this?)
Yours is the last entry on the list, which means they "saved the best for last." Definitely gets my vote. xoxo
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so very much! Alas, it's been some years since I've seen her, but I'd like to think she wouldn't have an issue with me sharing this.
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Oh, gosh, no! She'd be THRILLED at this memory you have...and the pride and love that accompanies it. What student wouldn't feel cherished by that?!!
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow what a truly wonderful story! I am so glad that this girl is slowly improving and I can understand why you are so proud of her. Your story warmed my heart. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Wow what a truly wonderful story! I am so glad that this girl is slowly improving and I can understand why you are so proud of her. Your story warmed my heart. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Wendyanne!
Comment from Ben Colder
Good one. I can see this unfolding into a terrific story if you decide. When respect abounds, love is near. No pity but real. Thanks for sharing your story poem.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Good one. I can see this unfolding into a terrific story if you decide. When respect abounds, love is near. No pity but real. Thanks for sharing your story poem.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much - I really appreciate your feedback and the generous six stars!
Comment from Sally Law
Oh my goodness ! This made me cry, gasp and cheer. Thank you for sharing this, mystery poet. A stellar offering for the prompt.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming vote.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Oh my goodness ! This made me cry, gasp and cheer. Thank you for sharing this, mystery poet. A stellar offering for the prompt.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming vote.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Sally! xx
Comment from RodG
You set the scene very well, describing the newcomer to your class. The story takes off immediately when she is hit on the road and spends months recovering. What a powerful and poignant ending when she returns to the classroom. This story poem is terrific and should be a strong contender for the red ribbon. Rod
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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You set the scene very well, describing the newcomer to your class. The story takes off immediately when she is hit on the road and spends months recovering. What a powerful and poignant ending when she returns to the classroom. This story poem is terrific and should be a strong contender for the red ribbon. Rod
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Rod!
Comment from JSD
What an amazing story and you tell it beautifully with your blank triplets. Your choice of vocabulary and the circle the pome goes on is engaging and heartwarming. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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What an amazing story and you tell it beautifully with your blank triplets. Your choice of vocabulary and the circle the pome goes on is engaging and heartwarming. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much - I really appreciate your feedback!
Comment from royowen
It takes a very brave person to come back from a nasty accident such as this, and carry on determinedly as this brave girl did in your poem, she is certainly an inspiration, this is beautifully written, my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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It takes a very brave person to come back from a nasty accident such as this, and carry on determinedly as this brave girl did in your poem, she is certainly an inspiration, this is beautifully written, my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Roy! xx
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Most welcome