...But...You Could Have
(The Last Laugh)24 total reviews
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
A marvelous laugh. I have always said it is more tragic to regret what you didn't do than to regret what you did (this doesn't include hurting people). I really loved the stinger at the end. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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A marvelous laugh. I have always said it is more tragic to regret what you didn't do than to regret what you did (this doesn't include hurting people). I really loved the stinger at the end. Brilliant!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for the great review! I must apologize for not thanking you sooner, but was away for the weekend and just returned. So happy you enjoyed that fun twist at the end! Thanks again and have a wonderful week!
Comment from royowen
Hah hah, how wonderful is this story in a poem, it had everything, a great storyline, a great progression, and answered that stuffed shirt manager perfectly, if the can give you a bill that included all the amenities and you did not use, why not use a counter bill, with the guest's invitation to sleep with the guest, what is to her if one didn't avail oneself, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Hah hah, how wonderful is this story in a poem, it had everything, a great storyline, a great progression, and answered that stuffed shirt manager perfectly, if the can give you a bill that included all the amenities and you did not use, why not use a counter bill, with the guest's invitation to sleep with the guest, what is to her if one didn't avail oneself, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Please forgive my tardiness in thanking you for the wonderful review (I was away for the weekend and just returned). I am so happy you enjoyed and that it gave you a good laugh! Have a grand week!
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Way to go lady! That's the ticket! Great poem! It reminds me of a couple of sick jokes I know! Yes, it made me how good laughter hard to come by these days. So I very much appreciate it. Got to grab them when they come!
I see, no issues with esthetics, spelling grammar, sentence structure, or subject matter. It's a fine and strong entry for this contest, good job!
Best of luck and hope you have a great day!
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Way to go lady! That's the ticket! Great poem! It reminds me of a couple of sick jokes I know! Yes, it made me how good laughter hard to come by these days. So I very much appreciate it. Got to grab them when they come!
I see, no issues with esthetics, spelling grammar, sentence structure, or subject matter. It's a fine and strong entry for this contest, good job!
Best of luck and hope you have a great day!
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Lea... Please forgive my delay in responding to the lovely review for "...But...You Could Have" poem. I was away at a conference and just returned. Thank you so very much for the wonderful review - I'm so happy that you enjoyed and it gave you a good laugh! Thank you again and have a grand week!
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Well deserved and any time!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
oh, LOL! This is excellent and funny writing for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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oh, LOL! This is excellent and funny writing for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Hi, Alexandra! Thanks so much for the great review! It was a lot of fun writing and I'm so happy it gave you a good laugh! Thanks again and have a wonderful weekend!