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Comment from Wendy G
It certainly is a horror story and I can understand your pen just keeping the words of pain and distress flowing. I hope that in some way it has been cathartic to write it. How dreadful that your mother was so disinterested to stand by and let these things happen, and how awful that even the teachers would not support you. You are very brave to share with such honesty and openness. Best wishes for the story in the contest. It may be too long and get disqualified but you might be able to enter it into another contest for longer writes. Best wishes.
Wendy
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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It certainly is a horror story and I can understand your pen just keeping the words of pain and distress flowing. I hope that in some way it has been cathartic to write it. How dreadful that your mother was so disinterested to stand by and let these things happen, and how awful that even the teachers would not support you. You are very brave to share with such honesty and openness. Best wishes for the story in the contest. It may be too long and get disqualified but you might be able to enter it into another contest for longer writes. Best wishes.
Wendy
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Wendy, your support and your kind words mean a lot to me. I write to take some of the power away. I write to one another's. I write to share my experience and hope someone gets something good from it. Lemonade from lemons as they say! Thank you so much again for your kind words and your insight. I hope you have the best day!
Comment from JSD
I've read this in the wrong order, but still find it so difficult to read about the trauma you have lived through. Once again I just pray that you are ok now and that writing these memories down is therapeutic for you. My heart cries out to you and to all those who suffer in a similar way. You take care of yourself! Love, John x
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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I've read this in the wrong order, but still find it so difficult to read about the trauma you have lived through. Once again I just pray that you are ok now and that writing these memories down is therapeutic for you. My heart cries out to you and to all those who suffer in a similar way. You take care of yourself! Love, John x
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you, John, for your kind words and prayer support. Very much appreciated by me more than you know. It is hard to read and hard to write. But I think it's something that has to be done both for myself and for those who would read it and learn something from it. Thank you again!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a horrifying story filled with heartfelt emotion. No children should have to experience the things you talked about. Your mother wouldn't help, and school teachers looked away.
I had good parents, but could identify with your story because when I was ten, my two younger sisters were eight and six. Even at such a young age, you feel responsible for younger siblings.
This story may not qualify for this contest, but your continuation of this story would qualify for the "Share Your Story" contest coming up next, with a much larger word count. This site has many true story contests. If one contest is too short, enter a contest with 1000 to 3000 words. But most important...Get your story out.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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This is a horrifying story filled with heartfelt emotion. No children should have to experience the things you talked about. Your mother wouldn't help, and school teachers looked away.
I had good parents, but could identify with your story because when I was ten, my two younger sisters were eight and six. Even at such a young age, you feel responsible for younger siblings.
This story may not qualify for this contest, but your continuation of this story would qualify for the "Share Your Story" contest coming up next, with a much larger word count. This site has many true story contests. If one contest is too short, enter a contest with 1000 to 3000 words. But most important...Get your story out.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review. I also thank you for the tips and for sharing a bit of yourself with me, I'm grateful and appreciate your insight and your kind comments!
I will continue to write as this is part of an auGhost, but I'm working on this would be a rechapter 5. Although there are plenty more chapters a little. But that will be rectified when I put it all together. Thank you again, and thank you for stopping by and reading! I hope your evening is grand!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I appreciate your bravery. And I deplore your stepfather and mother. Children should never have to deal with that. Well, no one should. Hell has a special place for those that hurt children, and those that let children get hurt. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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I appreciate your bravery. And I deplore your stepfather and mother. Children should never have to deal with that. Well, no one should. Hell has a special place for those that hurt children, and those that let children get hurt. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Karen, for your kind words, your insight, and for your review. It is a hard subject to read but one that is relevant today.and I agree there is a place for people like that! Thank you again!
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U R Brave. Karen
Comment from Paul Manton
I'm aware that this can't be in the contest, but it does deserve to be reviewed. It is a very tragic tale - and sadly far from unique. Both parents would be imprisoned in the UK and presumably in the USA too - but so often families, even in civilized countries, simply slip through the net, as in this story. Were there no authorities like the police who would have taken action?
And the answer is, probably not. This is well told, Lea. Your attempts to protect your siblings were heroic. I have read of children who grew desperate enough to kill their father - equally some who committed suicide. Were there no caring neighbors or other family members? - the whole thing is surreal.
I am just so glad that you have survived - so much! I pray that God will reward you with peace and love. And no more pain.
Paul
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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I'm aware that this can't be in the contest, but it does deserve to be reviewed. It is a very tragic tale - and sadly far from unique. Both parents would be imprisoned in the UK and presumably in the USA too - but so often families, even in civilized countries, simply slip through the net, as in this story. Were there no authorities like the police who would have taken action?
And the answer is, probably not. This is well told, Lea. Your attempts to protect your siblings were heroic. I have read of children who grew desperate enough to kill their father - equally some who committed suicide. Were there no caring neighbors or other family members? - the whole thing is surreal.
I am just so glad that you have survived - so much! I pray that God will reward you with peace and love. And no more pain.
Paul
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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The island in which I lived in a small town called Burkeville Isolated from the other islands around. Unless you chose to get away. I certainly did have neighbors who knew, all the family knew. Something did happen definitely that is it will be described in a later chapter of my auto bio called "Ghost". Thank you for your thoughtful review and for your comments as always, I appreciate it and take to heart all the things you have to say. I appreciate your thoughts on your insight. And then I hope your day is the best!
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Keep safe Lea. You are very precious.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with. No child should ever live like this. You did a good job telling this story. I can't say I enjoyed reading, but it's because of the subject matter. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with. No child should ever live like this. You did a good job telling this story. I can't say I enjoyed reading, but it's because of the subject matter. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Barbara, for your kind comments and for your insight I appreciate it very much. Thank you also for stopping in for a read on a difficult subject which is prevalent even today.
Thank you again I hope you have a great day!
Comment from irishauthorme
Read your bio, unusually honest!
Hope your story was not from your real life, terrible! (But very well written!)
Agree with your view that trauma does stimulate talent and resources, but also think the really tough things we experience in life influence our imaginations and light that creative spark that fuels our works.
Lastly, believe we write not only to express ourselves but also because writing is our effort to interpret our world.
Is that us, talking to ourselves, or is that our secret Muse?
Hmmm.
irish
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Read your bio, unusually honest!
Hope your story was not from your real life, terrible! (But very well written!)
Agree with your view that trauma does stimulate talent and resources, but also think the really tough things we experience in life influence our imaginations and light that creative spark that fuels our works.
Lastly, believe we write not only to express ourselves but also because writing is our effort to interpret our world.
Is that us, talking to ourselves, or is that our secret Muse?
Hmmm.
irish
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you Irish, I appreciate your comments and for stopping by for a read and for your fine review.
Unfortunately, it's a non fiction post. This is a chapter of my life which is in a book called "Ghost" which I am currently working on. Thank you again I appreciate your thoughtful review have a great day!
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Hey, sorry to hear that was N/F. That guy should have been locked up where the sun never shines.
See your scars, but also see that you have become your own person, rising above the degradation.
I will be reading your efforts!
irish
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Thank you irish I appreciate your uplifting words I appreciate it very much!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, such a nightmare, and one lived out regularly throughout the world by children who can't escape their abusers. The story I posted this month is about fictional abuse that was taken partially from real events, but it doesn't compare with the graphic reality of your story. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Wow, such a nightmare, and one lived out regularly throughout the world by children who can't escape their abusers. The story I posted this month is about fictional abuse that was taken partially from real events, but it doesn't compare with the graphic reality of your story. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Ric for stopping by for a read for offering your thoughts and comments. And for your fine review, I am most appreciative! If anything I've said helps someone out there, I've accomplished my goal. Thank you so much again. I hope you have a great day.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhh, sweet Leah. I was just thinking yesterday that I hadn't seen any new notices about your work come into my Messages. I see it's not because you weren't hard at work, however!!
What a post this is! I'm just so sorry that this is what you had to endure. I'd give anything to have had three wonderful children like you and your sisters added to my family. (I have a daughter named Leah too!) I'd have doted on each of you and made your lives full of joyous memories. You were such a brave, amazing child who has turned into an incredible writer.
And now it becomes obvious why your writing touches me so...because it is steeped in the kind of ferocious heart that makes a good writer stand out. A lesser person would have surrendered to the pain, but you've used it as a vehicle here. You've turned your lemons into THE most perfect source of lemonade. I admire you SO very much, Miss Capable.
I don't know what in the hell was wrong with all those adults at your school. You did everything right; they did everything wrong. But you can learn as much from a good example as you can a bad one. So you be the kind of adult for the children in your life that you needed when you were small. That's how the world begins to heal.
I have no doubt but that I will be voting for this incredible post in the contest. You are so talented, Leah. You went through horrible things, but you've used them to make your life --and anyone who reads your work-- FAR better. I find you absolutely amazing. xoxoxo
How are your sisters faring?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Ohhh, sweet Leah. I was just thinking yesterday that I hadn't seen any new notices about your work come into my Messages. I see it's not because you weren't hard at work, however!!
What a post this is! I'm just so sorry that this is what you had to endure. I'd give anything to have had three wonderful children like you and your sisters added to my family. (I have a daughter named Leah too!) I'd have doted on each of you and made your lives full of joyous memories. You were such a brave, amazing child who has turned into an incredible writer.
And now it becomes obvious why your writing touches me so...because it is steeped in the kind of ferocious heart that makes a good writer stand out. A lesser person would have surrendered to the pain, but you've used it as a vehicle here. You've turned your lemons into THE most perfect source of lemonade. I admire you SO very much, Miss Capable.
I don't know what in the hell was wrong with all those adults at your school. You did everything right; they did everything wrong. But you can learn as much from a good example as you can a bad one. So you be the kind of adult for the children in your life that you needed when you were small. That's how the world begins to heal.
I have no doubt but that I will be voting for this incredible post in the contest. You are so talented, Leah. You went through horrible things, but you've used them to make your life --and anyone who reads your work-- FAR better. I find you absolutely amazing. xoxoxo
How are your sisters faring?
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Such a wonderful, amazing response. I am truly humbled really and truly. I wasn't sure that my writing would be of interest until I joined the site and met people like you.
I have 2 amazing grown sons, one is a high security intelligence officer within the army often stationed in the Middle East hes not allowed to tell me particulars of his work but I do go through security checks every odd year, my other son works the mines in the interior BC he's a heavy duty mechanic, they're both successful and happy young men for which I am truly proud to be their mother.
If my writing helps or touches one person as it has with you, then what I set up to do is accomplished. This very incredible review you gave answers si much for me. There are no words but thank you!
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I'm so glad to read this and see that the sadness stopped with you. It takes an incredible person to accomplish that, and that is absolutely what I find you to be. xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is so very sad Lea and I am sorry that you and your sisters suffered like this and we never forget our childhood, I cannot forget mine, but I never speak about it publicly.
You have a missing word here:
(if (we) could I watch my favourite show)
Love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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This is so very sad Lea and I am sorry that you and your sisters suffered like this and we never forget our childhood, I cannot forget mine, but I never speak about it publicly.
You have a missing word here:
(if (we) could I watch my favourite show)
Love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you Dolly definitely corrected thank you for catching that!
I always appreciate your reviews and your comments. You have good insight for me telling my story is like taking the power away and if it helps someone who reads it then I accomplished what I set out to do. Thanks again!