Guided by Faith
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Well, George Elliot's son is never going to take responsibility for anything if Daddy is always running around paying for his mistakes. Rich people - geez! Let's take bets on whether Emma gets out of the bathtub by herself, and whether or not she's at work the next day, lol:-)
I know you hate correcting things, but I found a few you might want to look at.
Keith "walked from HIS office", not this office.
Emma pointed at a small aloe plant in A broken pot. Add "a" In the same paragraph, you have two sentences where they should be one, unless you start the second one "I was about halfway there" instead of "And was about halfway there."
"I'll to go back tomorrow." "I'll be able to go back tomorrow."
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Well, George Elliot's son is never going to take responsibility for anything if Daddy is always running around paying for his mistakes. Rich people - geez! Let's take bets on whether Emma gets out of the bathtub by herself, and whether or not she's at work the next day, lol:-)
I know you hate correcting things, but I found a few you might want to look at.
Keith "walked from HIS office", not this office.
Emma pointed at a small aloe plant in A broken pot. Add "a" In the same paragraph, you have two sentences where they should be one, unless you start the second one "I was about halfway there" instead of "And was about halfway there."
"I'll to go back tomorrow." "I'll be able to go back tomorrow."
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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I don't dislike making corrections, but I dislike is the fact that I made them in the first place. Everyone you pointed out were stupid mistakes on my part that I knew better than. It' frustrates me, but I'm happy you pointed them out because I want a good product.
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I know you do:-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a good chapter Barbara and the characters seem to be behaving in accordance with their personalities, Emma is protected and with insurance claims there is always an investigation before deciding whether a replacement car is given and it sounds like there will be a desirable outcome, much enjoyed Barbara, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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This is a good chapter Barbara and the characters seem to be behaving in accordance with their personalities, Emma is protected and with insurance claims there is always an investigation before deciding whether a replacement car is given and it sounds like there will be a desirable outcome, much enjoyed Barbara, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Elliot is not turning it into his insurance company because Marc has had too many accidents.
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Typical of guys, women are safer on the road Barbara, so you have that one spot on x xx
Comment from Ulla
Emma pointed at a small aloe plant in (a) broken pot.
Great, chapter again, Barbara.
Emma is a stubborn sort isn't she? Now we'll see how she gets out of the bath. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Emma pointed at a small aloe plant in (a) broken pot.
Great, chapter again, Barbara.
Emma is a stubborn sort isn't she? Now we'll see how she gets out of the bath. Ulla xx
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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I have made the correction. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
So, I have a big problem with this chapter. It has nothing to do with your superb writing. Maybe it me and a lack of understanding of the romance novel genre, but -
1). Emma is the victim in a car accident; she's given her statement to the police,
2) it appears Marc Elliot is the defendant, his father Lawyer George seems to believe he's guilty,
3) why would Emma's father (who is so protective),, or the police allow lawyer George to track down Emma and question her without her lawyer present?
Shouldn't a meeting have been set up even to hear lawyer George's offers?
Could it not be considered possibly a bribe?
Maybe it's me looking too much in depth? Am I off base?
Let me know.
John
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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So, I have a big problem with this chapter. It has nothing to do with your superb writing. Maybe it me and a lack of understanding of the romance novel genre, but -
1). Emma is the victim in a car accident; she's given her statement to the police,
2) it appears Marc Elliot is the defendant, his father Lawyer George seems to believe he's guilty,
3) why would Emma's father (who is so protective),, or the police allow lawyer George to track down Emma and question her without her lawyer present?
Shouldn't a meeting have been set up even to hear lawyer George's offers?
Could it not be considered possibly a bribe?
Maybe it's me looking too much in depth? Am I off base?
Let me know.
John
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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George isn't a lawyer. He's just a father who is trying to get his son off as easily as he can. Thank you for the kind review.
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Sorry, my bad. He?s city council, not a lawyer.
Comment from Jim Wile
It seems like George is doing the honorable thing, at least as far as Emma is concerned; however, it would do his son more good in the long-run not to cover for him but to let him suffer the consequences of his mistakes. He is enabling his son's irresponsibility.
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"I'll to go back tomorrow." - Perhaps add "need" following "I'll?"
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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It seems like George is doing the honorable thing, at least as far as Emma is concerned; however, it would do his son more good in the long-run not to cover for him but to let him suffer the consequences of his mistakes. He is enabling his son's irresponsibility.
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"I'll to go back tomorrow." - Perhaps add "need" following "I'll?"
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I fixed that sentence.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. It will be interesting to see what Emma decides. I think Marc should get what the legal system decides. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed nday.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. It will be interesting to see what Emma decides. I think Marc should get what the legal system decides. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed nday.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Sorry, Barbara, I used all of my sixes already. I think this chapter definitely deserves one though. That George Elliot is a piece of work. He had no right to go to her house. I think he crossed the line on that. And the fact that he won't put it through his insurance. You can see his character, the way he cleans up Marc's messes, and how he thought it was obvious that Emma's parents should do the same. This got me riled up. Keep em coming. Gretchen
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Sorry, Barbara, I used all of my sixes already. I think this chapter definitely deserves one though. That George Elliot is a piece of work. He had no right to go to her house. I think he crossed the line on that. And the fact that he won't put it through his insurance. You can see his character, the way he cleans up Marc's messes, and how he thought it was obvious that Emma's parents should do the same. This got me riled up. Keep em coming. Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Don't worry about the six, the thought counts.
Comment from royowen
I think being independent, or proud, is a huge fault, some things necessitate an easing of one's pride and accept help, sometimes life is like that. And the good thing in Australia, like England and many western democracies, nobody goes bankrupt on medical. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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I think being independent, or proud, is a huge fault, some things necessitate an easing of one's pride and accept help, sometimes life is like that. And the good thing in Australia, like England and many western democracies, nobody goes bankrupt on medical. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is a great chapter you have penned. I didn't see any errors or spag. I am so happy I had the six stars to give you. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Barbara, This is a great chapter you have penned. I didn't see any errors or spag. I am so happy I had the six stars to give you. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is good. The father's is protecting his son by not turning this in to the insurance company but he seem willing to make things right for right for Emma. It is smart for her not to let herself be obligated to him by letting him do too much. Both Seth and Emma refuse to acknowledge they are more than friends.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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This is good. The father's is protecting his son by not turning this in to the insurance company but he seem willing to make things right for right for Emma. It is smart for her not to let herself be obligated to him by letting him do too much. Both Seth and Emma refuse to acknowledge they are more than friends.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
