Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Opal,
This poem surely deserves the warning.
All the f alliteration works well to fan the flames that seem to be in the artwork and the blood of these lovers.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy the weekend.
Joan

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

powerful and erotically tinged poem expressing desire and lust all rolled into one powerful emotion that at times overwhelms all of us as we give into our carnal desires.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Very effective used of the 'f'. Good work.
I didn't see anything requiring your warning. In fact, her fluttering fervent fingers appeared quite innocent. (smiley face here)
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Well this is a fun and erotic free verse taking alliteration to a whole new level. The trouble is when you do this, the reader then becomes fixated on the two words that don't start with an 'f' rather than simply enjoying the sensation you're creating. Also, your alliterative title description is currently referring to climate instead of climax and should read 'climactic.' But this is a great entry for the contest and I wish you well. Thanks for sharing Debbie
PS I wonder whether this really needs all that warning before the post opens?

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Wow, weeeeee..wonderful...
When is this contest?
I do not think I saw it posted?
I was just in one The Love poetry Contest... I posted Tender...and won first place...
I wish you the best of luck for you HOT poem...
Lisa

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I would have given you a 6 had you not used the words unfurled and her. See my poem "Say Something". The tautogram is best explained by its Greek root words of "tauto" meaning "the same" and "gramma" meaning "letter." Basically, all words in the poem begin with the same letter. You could substitute"Feeling flesh feverishly" and"Fulfilling fondly famished fantasies". Karen

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is a saucy piece of poetry dear opal! I like the alliteration, It furthers your meaning. I wish i had six stars Lehto.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings with hugs!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from Michael Groover

Excellent

this poem is a masterful use of alliteration to convey emotion and action. The choice of words creates a vivid and dynamic image, drawing the reader into a whirlwind of movement and emotion. The poem's brevity is its strength, delivering a powerful impact in just a few lines.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

Wow, hot and juicy with lots of imagination thrown in for good measure. I love the last alliterative line the best, fulfilling famished fantasies. Every line is alliterative and extremely descriptive without really going there if you know what I mean.
Thanks for the thrill of a lifetime or at least today.
Jesse

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

Comment from tempeste

Excellent

Ciao!

Just looking at the sexy artwork gives us a good idea of what this lady's fantasies are all about. (wink)

I like the word: feverishly
and the second line is my favourite :
fluttering fervent fingers flourish,

I like the idea you used the same letter for the entire poem ( I did the same in my Etna's poem).

PS. A few issues concerning the presentation
I think you should make the letters bigger and center the poem
and what happened to the artwork on the inside page..it's missing.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023