Guided by Faith
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Comment from jmdg1954
These two are going to drive me insane, but you knew that as pressure. Z relationship touched with romance seems yo he beginning. She still has to grow up and the parents stop treating her as an eight year old,
Good chapter , continuing yi move along.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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These two are going to drive me insane, but you knew that as pressure. Z relationship touched with romance seems yo he beginning. She still has to grow up and the parents stop treating her as an eight year old,
Good chapter , continuing yi move along.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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You are correct. Emma needs to mature, before anything can happen. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Seth thinks that Emma is breaking down his defences, and, of course, she is, the age gap bothers him, and he realises that perhaps what he longs can't happen, but I don't think that's the way Emma thinks, I think it will work out, somehow, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Seth thinks that Emma is breaking down his defences, and, of course, she is, the age gap bothers him, and he realises that perhaps what he longs can't happen, but I don't think that's the way Emma thinks, I think it will work out, somehow, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Emma isn't worried about the age gap, only Seth.
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I thought so
Comment from judiverse
Seems to me if Emma's having a hard time making ends meet she could have been looking for a job in keeping with her newly-earned college degree. She seems to love teaching. She's being treated like a fragile doll by her parents and Seth. She surely knows when to take her medicine. If she truly wants to be independent, others seem to be preventing it. I hope she tells them to back off. I know you're developing the romance between Seth and Emma, but there is the age difference. If she found a younger guy, he wouldn't be so likely to try to dominate her but let her be independent. End of my advice column for the day! You are doing an excellent job with character development and maintaining suspense. judi
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Seems to me if Emma's having a hard time making ends meet she could have been looking for a job in keeping with her newly-earned college degree. She seems to love teaching. She's being treated like a fragile doll by her parents and Seth. She surely knows when to take her medicine. If she truly wants to be independent, others seem to be preventing it. I hope she tells them to back off. I know you're developing the romance between Seth and Emma, but there is the age difference. If she found a younger guy, he wouldn't be so likely to try to dominate her but let her be independent. End of my advice column for the day! You are doing an excellent job with character development and maintaining suspense. judi
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Teaching will happen. She didn't want to teach in a large city. She discussed that with Seth earlier. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
Your talking about not wanting to make further changes, I certainly understand. My stuff never feels exactly right. But trust me that your chapter flows nicely. I had a residual feeling that Seth and Emma's relationship is growing organically, as it should. That is, as a reader, I don't feel any inner-urging that its pace should be increased.
I only had some problems with the email that Seth opened with the pictures of Peggy and George Eliot after what must have been a romantic interlude. I had some difficulty telling what was narrative about the email contents, what was Seth's actual thought process about it, or what was the written commentary of the email.
After Seth spoke with his office, he said, "Somebody to get them and bring them by." ["... Somebody WILL (?) get them and bring them by."]
As he studied her deciding what to do, he remember the hug they shared. [ ... he rememberED the hug ...]
Both the above are just slip ups we all have. Only the email contents gave me real pause. I enjoyed reading this chapter a great deal!
Jay
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Your talking about not wanting to make further changes, I certainly understand. My stuff never feels exactly right. But trust me that your chapter flows nicely. I had a residual feeling that Seth and Emma's relationship is growing organically, as it should. That is, as a reader, I don't feel any inner-urging that its pace should be increased.
I only had some problems with the email that Seth opened with the pictures of Peggy and George Eliot after what must have been a romantic interlude. I had some difficulty telling what was narrative about the email contents, what was Seth's actual thought process about it, or what was the written commentary of the email.
After Seth spoke with his office, he said, "Somebody to get them and bring them by." ["... Somebody WILL (?) get them and bring them by."]
As he studied her deciding what to do, he remember the hug they shared. [ ... he rememberED the hug ...]
Both the above are just slip ups we all have. Only the email contents gave me real pause. I enjoyed reading this chapter a great deal!
Jay
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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I changed both of those sentences as I posted. I will check out the narrative and make sure it flows. Thank you for the kind review and the help.
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Always my pleasure. You are such a fine storyteller and worthy six-star gatherer.
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thank you.
Comment from estory
Emma's stubborn independent streak seems to bend a bit at the end of this chapter when she is alone with Seth. Maybe she is starting to melt. The dialogue is crisp and lively as ever, chocked full of personality, very realistic. Seth's determination to look after Emma comes through here too. estory
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Emma's stubborn independent streak seems to bend a bit at the end of this chapter when she is alone with Seth. Maybe she is starting to melt. The dialogue is crisp and lively as ever, chocked full of personality, very realistic. Seth's determination to look after Emma comes through here too. estory
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and the help.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I loved the ending of this. Her no I don't need you and his knowing grin was adorable. My next question is Who Is Going To Make The First Move? I see why Emma is so innocent. Her parents are very involved with her. It's going to take a while before she is fully independent. Great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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I loved the ending of this. Her no I don't need you and his knowing grin was adorable. My next question is Who Is Going To Make The First Move? I see why Emma is so innocent. Her parents are very involved with her. It's going to take a while before she is fully independent. Great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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The first move is coming very soon. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
It is very difficult to help some people as they stubbornly refuse help in the belief they do not need any help. We all benefit from help sometimes, and it can be frustrating and hurtful to have the efforts of someone who truly care rebuffed as if their concerns do not matter. I hope that Emma will come to accept that Seth cares deeply for her and only wants to help her, as he already is starting to be in love with her.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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It is very difficult to help some people as they stubbornly refuse help in the belief they do not need any help. We all benefit from help sometimes, and it can be frustrating and hurtful to have the efforts of someone who truly care rebuffed as if their concerns do not matter. I hope that Emma will come to accept that Seth cares deeply for her and only wants to help her, as he already is starting to be in love with her.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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She will eventually, but it takes time. She needs to mature some. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Seems as if things are getting closer to the inevitable. That police chief is in for a lifetime of experiences. it seems. Good one Barb. Thanks for sharing your talent as always. Enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Seems as if things are getting closer to the inevitable. That police chief is in for a lifetime of experiences. it seems. Good one Barb. Thanks for sharing your talent as always. Enjoyed it.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Good one.
Comment from Paul McFarland
This was a nice post. Things are moving along quite nicely, but this accident is probably going to slow down the relationship between Seth and Emma.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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This was a nice post. Things are moving along quite nicely, but this accident is probably going to slow down the relationship between Seth and Emma.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. We'll see.
Comment from damommy
These two need to quit denying how they feel about each other. Eight years is nothing. My son is twelve years older than his wife, and they get along like a house afire. Emma's lucky not to be hurt worse. I hope they nail the kid that did this. Sounds like he might have some string to pull to keep him from going to jail.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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These two need to quit denying how they feel about each other. Eight years is nothing. My son is twelve years older than his wife, and they get along like a house afire. Emma's lucky not to be hurt worse. I hope they nail the kid that did this. Sounds like he might have some string to pull to keep him from going to jail.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Seth is concerned because he helped raise his younger sister, same age as Emma. He needs to work through this. Thank you for the kind review.