Sex Brulee
Addictions and Beautiful Desserts31 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
Short, sharp, exactly to the point. My only question is why would ten cinnamon sticks be inserted into a creme brulee? Just seems a tad odd. I enjoyed your story. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. JT
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Short, sharp, exactly to the point. My only question is why would ten cinnamon sticks be inserted into a creme brulee? Just seems a tad odd. I enjoyed your story. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. JT
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Tenth anniversary, as indicated in the line below. I am very happy you enjoyed it, JT.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is excellent and so readable in this shorter form. Your story is well constructed, wastes no words and moves the story on compellingly. Your descriptive detail with the creme brulee is so vivid, proving that your skill at writing covers all subjects and genres. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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This is excellent and so readable in this shorter form. Your story is well constructed, wastes no words and moves the story on compellingly. Your descriptive detail with the creme brulee is so vivid, proving that your skill at writing covers all subjects and genres. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Means a lot coming from the first person who commented on my work, Debbie. Sending my love.
Comment from Sanku
The horrible suspicious wife! That was what I thought first .Then my thought was 'horrible fellow' .The end was a bit confusing .will he wake up or the internal bleeding has taken his life?
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The horrible suspicious wife! That was what I thought first .Then my thought was 'horrible fellow' .The end was a bit confusing .will he wake up or the internal bleeding has taken his life?
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
Comment from jmdg1954
Sex Brûlée... an interesting short read with a tragic ending (tragic in the sense of death). He got what he deserved and his brain was still thinking of the next book.
Well written my friend and best of luck .
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Sex Brûlée... an interesting short read with a tragic ending (tragic in the sense of death). He got what he deserved and his brain was still thinking of the next book.
Well written my friend and best of luck .
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Thank you kindly.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
After reading this story I feel like nothing goes to waste, and everything can be used as an excuse for the next best seller. I like the smoothness of the story and the unexpected twist.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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After reading this story I feel like nothing goes to waste, and everything can be used as an excuse for the next best seller. I like the smoothness of the story and the unexpected twist.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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I'm very you glad you liked it, Iza. Thank you for taking the time to read, sharing and an exceptional rating.
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You are welcome, and you do have a style that is shocking sometimes:)
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent story. I have read another entry for this contest as well, and I wishe you success with yours which is well written and fulfils the requirements of the contest perfectly!! Drama and an interesting twist keep the reader fully engaged. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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An excellent story. I have read another entry for this contest as well, and I wishe you success with yours which is well written and fulfils the requirements of the contest perfectly!! Drama and an interesting twist keep the reader fully engaged. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Thsnk you dearly for taking the time and sharing you thoughts, Wendy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
thank you for sharing this entry with us. I hope it does we;; in the Australian contest.
"Please tell me this is some kind of a messed-up thing for your new book." She said in despair, two black holes around her teary eyes. (book" she said)
n thoughts. -- "The man felt as if he stood in the middle of the labyrinth, failing to find the way out of the predicament he found (No clue why the quotation marks are here. It's not speech.)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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thank you for sharing this entry with us. I hope it does we;; in the Australian contest.
"Please tell me this is some kind of a messed-up thing for your new book." She said in despair, two black holes around her teary eyes. (book" she said)
n thoughts. -- "The man felt as if he stood in the middle of the labyrinth, failing to find the way out of the predicament he found (No clue why the quotation marks are here. It's not speech.)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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You are not correct in stating that it is not a speech. It is. Whether in his mind, said under his nose or straight to his wife?s face. The aim here was to keep the readers guessing - just for those brief three seconds until response from his wife clarified the matter.
This was the single thing I allowed myself to experiment with. I have a lot of rules to learn, a lot of SPAG to comprehend, but whether it?s correct or not, I wanted to place this little unruly thing just so that I knew - when I look at it later on in my life - know it was mine.
Barbara, thank you dearly for taking the time to read and pointing out this passage. You always find something - and that is what I am looking for while sharing my work.
Sending my love, as always.
Comment from pome lover
you mean the brain thing was present before she hit him with the plate? If so, sad, but still, he's a total jerk for his record of unfaithfulness. And he probably did have a one track mind, though split in importance between women and his writing, except I think your point is that he had a "brain thing", so he was faultless? hmmm
Katharine
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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you mean the brain thing was present before she hit him with the plate? If so, sad, but still, he's a total jerk for his record of unfaithfulness. And he probably did have a one track mind, though split in importance between women and his writing, except I think your point is that he had a "brain thing", so he was faultless? hmmm
Katharine
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Creating the character that you don't feel sorry for when his wife causes his brain to drawn in its blood was the most fun I had in my very short time as a writer. My fiancee absolutely hated him. Me too. It felt good killing the guy. People died from more stupid reasons than receiving a frisbee-like throw to the temple, but I am still happy with the result I got. I apologise for being vein, but I had lots of fun drafting this story. I hope this answers your question, but than again, I didn't want to serve the reader with the whole creme brulee on the platter because as a reader I always liked being included in the cooking process.
Thanks for taking the time to read the piece. Sending my love.
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No brain thing, just a good throw with tragic consequences.
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oh. shame on her.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Sex Brulee, is an intriguing story as we begin to wonder if the waitress, who is a former "trystress", is a surprise on the scene or part of the author's modus operandi for conjuring drama from a staged scene. The events here seem to indicate a first and final draft is in the works.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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This story, Sex Brulee, is an intriguing story as we begin to wonder if the waitress, who is a former "trystress", is a surprise on the scene or part of the author's modus operandi for conjuring drama from a staged scene. The events here seem to indicate a first and final draft is in the works.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Thank you dearly, Bill. Appreciate the time you took to both read and let me know your thoughts. I sincerely hope you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I love it! So much more imagery here - "two black holes around teary eyes". The description of the dessert. The labyrinth being a predicament he needed to find a way out of.
And a great, surprise ending. I think I like this best of everything I've read so far. Perhaps being reigned in to 500 words inside a restaurant helped you to keep it tight.
My story went an entirely different direction; read it if you get a chance.
I'm glad you participated. Did you sign up to be notified automatically each month?
Great job, Bruce.
Pam
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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I love it! So much more imagery here - "two black holes around teary eyes". The description of the dessert. The labyrinth being a predicament he needed to find a way out of.
And a great, surprise ending. I think I like this best of everything I've read so far. Perhaps being reigned in to 500 words inside a restaurant helped you to keep it tight.
My story went an entirely different direction; read it if you get a chance.
I'm glad you participated. Did you sign up to be notified automatically each month?
Great job, Bruce.
Pam
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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I needed to make up after the last one, so I'm thankful for those words, Pam. Huge learning-curve with this one thanks to the limit put on word count. Eternally grateful for your heads-up on the contest. Subscribed for the newsletter since the moment you sent me the tip!