Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I actually prefer the way you have bent the rules slightly in your version of the form in the second stanza but they will probably disqualify you all the same.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023

How did I bend the rules? I'm not in a contest, so no worries. I appreciate you taking a look at this.

reply by Pantygynt on 25-Jun-2023

A slight discrepancy over one of the triple repeats is all.

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Oh a rhyming wave poem... I never knew there was such a thing????
I am very into Sonnets so iambics are super important plus, ofcourse ones poetic voice...
Looks like you followed the rules very well...
And, I do love the image you chose to go with your delightful poem.
Lisasview, new to this site

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 Comment Written 25-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023

Thank you for a great review.

reply by Lisasview on 25-Jun-2023

You are most welcome

reply by Lisasview on 25-Jun-2023

You are most welcome,
Lisa

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A clever write with a peaceful theme throughout here Yvonne and this reminds me of a poem by Alfred Lord Tennyson called Break, break, break. (In a different metre though) Much enjoyed, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 25-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023

Thank you so much. It's a fun form.