Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Debi,
This poem goes through her whole life easily. It shows she is multi-talented and a good mother. Wow, she sings, acts and writes.
Have a great weekend.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Hi Joan, Thanks for this awesome review and lovely comments for shari and her poem. I know she will enjoy reading all the kind comments and wishes for her birthday

reply by dragonpoet on 26-Jun-2023

You're welcome on all accounts, Debi.
Joan

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

I like the picture. It is cute.

I-like the poem too. It is very nice of you to write about spitfire. ..

She has a son and two grand kids. She moved a lot. Unfortunately her husband passed away.

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Hi Chan,Thanks for this awesome review and lovely comments for shari and her poem. I know she will enjoy reading all the kind comments and wishes for her birthday

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

I just hate hate hate losing my work... So I am on a Mac and I use pages... I used to use Word... For sure you need to back up your words...
This one is really great and what a lovely Birthday wish it is...
Love the kitty....
I just posted two new ones...you might like them... Just check my portfolio..
Lisa

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Hey sweet Lisa,,Thanks for this awesome review and lovely comments for shari and her poem. I know she will enjoy reading all the kind comments and wishes for her birthday. Yes, I use word too, but was laying in my bed and , thought I would try. I must have bumped something but did once and never again. Btw, when is your birthday? I will check yours tonight or tomorrow!
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reply by Lisasview on 26-Jun-2023

Feb. 6th....I will be 76!!! Yikes...
Yes, please check out my work..
Oh I see you are up!
6:30am here

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

- Wow so there is our time difference . It is 11:38 pm

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Is that cool or what?

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Thanks for your birthday, I will record and go to bed, see you when I check yours out! L

reply by Lisasview on 26-Jun-2023

Good might sweetie...
Lisa

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

😘

reply by Lisasview on 26-Jun-2023

sweet dreams or better yet creative dreams

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

You are sweet

Comment from karenina

Excellent

I hear you on writing directly to Advanced Editor... I suppose some have it down, but every single time I think I'll give it a go, I lose my work. Period.
(So yes, I always write in WORD and cut and paste it --which brings me those little "evil eddy gremlins" that take the place of punctuation I've typed.

Okay! Mini-rant over! Don't give away your trade secrets...but I'm so curious! Do you have a mini-interview session with each member whose birthday you celebrate? It's amazing how much I learn from every one of your celebratory poems!

Spitfire (Shari) is a wonderful woman. Her writing is terrific and her kind heart shows in every review she gives. I wish her well as she celebrates her fortieth birthday...

(WHAT?-- It's not her fortieth?) LOL -- I just keep having forty-year-old birthdays every year...

Young at heart! THAT'S the ticket!

Bravo to you for your heart and your delicious trademark Merry~go~Rhyme!

(Guess I don't have to ask how those eyes are doing...you're a regular poetic visionary! -- heh, heh--see what I did there?)

Karenina

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023

Hey my dear Special K. I am so glad I am not the only one crazy enough to try to write on here. This is the only time and I was doing it from my bed and I kept dozing off. So I maybe bumped something. Anyway, I do mine from notes or word too, but I never have any problems with the evil eddies. But that might be because I have Smart Punctuation turned off and that is supposed to keep those buggers away. Anyway, in answer to your other question. Yes, I have a questionnaire that I paste on their private messages. It gives them a little guide to give me some info.

So thanks sweetie for the very kind review and your comments. It is such a good feeling to put a smile on the face of so many that have been loyal reviewers and therefore friends. And those are the ones that I try to do.
And you my sweets will be one of mine again on December 5 or is it the 4th?
You are my so special friend and partner in crime. Maybe your next one will be a humdinger! Love you sweet friend. I am so thankful for your friendship.

reply by karenina on 26-Jun-2023

It's December 4th... But it will be the big "70" so (yikes) no celebrating allowed! Great idea to send a questionnaire! Every on of your celebratory poems is so personalized it's super special!

Comment from Paul Manton

Excellent

Hello again Debi. I know I'm going to enjoy reviewing whatever you write, so I'm putting off my next cup of tea until I finish.
I've reviewed several of spitfire's pieces and really enjoyed them - so here is the next birthday tribute - quite a long one.
The visual is lovely and fits her onsite photograph - and the colors you have chosen for background and font are just perfect.
I'm going to be blunt and tell you what I would do if I were revising it. Then I will hide behind the sofa in the hope I haven't lost a good friend!
LINE 2: that she's someone we admire 'all' ruptures the flow
LINES 7/8 taught English twenty-five years/then decided to retire
LINE 10 needs one extra syllable, but I can't think of a fix right now!
LINES 13/14 are I think in American idiomatic English, so I won't suggest anything there
LINES 17/18 are a bit lumpy - so you need a different place for the stresses: They both have glittering careers/DOing what MAKES them so GOOD - so you have a bit of rapping to do there, Debi. (anapaestic!)
Lines up to 21, really great
LINE 21 the phrase 'would pass away' could be improved, but I think it is another American usage, so no change.
The triplet at the end is great and the overall effect is a lovely tribute to your friend.
Now where is that sofa?
Paul

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023

Hi Paul, I appreciate so much what you are saying and maybe should have done this, but was too dang tired...lol... This birthday poem in particular was so terribly difficult. I know it looks like a simpleton did it, but my notes were wiped out and by the information that is given sometimes, the facts have to be more important than the meter. So I was going to make note of that, because these recipients care more about their info than that. The way it is, I had to cut so much out because it just didn't make sense when trying to stay with meter, rhyme and the facts that they want in their poem.
Did you happen to notice that all of the text in red was all rhymed in the word 'fire'?
That is part of the MgR and it doesn't have to make sense to anyone else, but it is in the fun factor. I will get a copy of the rules and it may help make some sense to you.
And believe me, I did try over and over to the point it just didn't make sense. So stress is left to the wayside on these Merry go rhymes. That is written in the rules, in fact I usually post the rules and didn't on this but they say that the facts and rhymes have to be first and meter doesn't count in these.
But with that being said, I sometimes work on a line for an hour trying to get it to work, but if it disrupts the notes that the birthday person gives me, then I ruined the reason I am doing it. Does that make any sense to you? Like I said, I absolutely understand and appreciate your help and when I rest my eyes just a bit, I will look at your suggestions and see if they can work.
But I agree with you as I am the first to say that the whole thing is bumpy and is why I never went to bed yet.
And dear friend, get out behind that couch right now!! Hahaha!
I do need to tell you the weirdest thing that happened, but I think the reason it became such a problem was because her interests were ghosts, spirits, astrology etc.... and of course I don't believe in therm and I tried to put it in but it just got wiped out each time, but I believe because my writing is led by God most of the time, I wasn't allowed to write it. Twice when I reluctantly did it, they disappeared somehow. Anyway, I do thank you and sorry for being so long winded, but never ever stop giving me feedback. Or you might have to find that couch again. LOL...

Thought you might like to see this.
Merry go~Rhyme
Rules:
1~must rhyme
2~must be fun
3~normal line stanzas
with a fun line or 2 between each stanza
(for the up and down carousel effect)
Usually done in just one rhyming word
4~ does not have to follow a meter
5~ what matters most after rhyming is
Information to get out there in small patches.

reply by Paul Manton on 24-Jun-2023

Oh Debi, I really sympathize - but I'm with you on the supernatural stuff: I certainly believe in angels and demons - but anything bogus (including Halowe'en) doesn't get through my door. Sorry to be such a muttonhead - I didn't spot the red writing rhymed with 'fire'. I think your friend gave you a poisoned chalice with all those rules. It would have taken me a year to make the first draft! PS Charlie says, 'Miaow!' in sympathy.

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023

Thanks for understanding but they are the rules of the merry go rhymes and I made them when I made the type of poem long ago, so that information to honor someone with love and fun had to come first..... however she did give me what I wanted, but had a hard time putting it in words this time. That usually isn't a problem. But she is a lovely woman and like I said, I always treasure your feedback. Even on these when I am using the MgR, I try my best w meter, but it just isn't always possible. Take care dear friend and you can come get me tomorrow as I have a story and a poem to write. Trying to give my ranking a little extra boost as I don't know if I will be able to write soon after another eye surgery on this coming Wed.

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023

Oh Paul, I forgot to say that if you like cats, check out the silly ones with this poem underneath the notes

reply by Paul Manton on 24-Jun-2023

I'll try to find it.
Love from Paul and Charlie

reply by Paul Manton on 24-Jun-2023

Prayers for your eye surgery. I hope that is completely successful. Right now on the BBC, I am watching a young man called Jacob Collier headlining at Glastonbury. He is the most original musical genius I have seen - and plays dozens of instruments. His mum was a professor of violin and the whole family attended the last church where I assisted, in Finchley Central, North London. A few years before I joined, Cliff Richard was a Youth leader there. We both sang at the Billy Graham Crusades (but he was a bit more famous than me!)
Catch up with you tomorrow.
Paul

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Thank you, Debi dear! I'm just getting to know the red-headed Spitfire. Shari's a lot of fun and so talented. Thank you for showing her in a beautiful light and in Merry-go-rhyme poetry form, of which I am fond.

Shari, Happy Birthday, and many more good years to come!

Love and blessings to you both across the miles,
Sal XOs!!

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Hi Sally, Thanks for this awesome review and lovely comments for shari and her poem. I know she will enjoy reading all the kind comments and wishes for her birthday. I know Shari will enjoy reading are the comments & wishes

reply by Sally Law on 27-Jun-2023

Most welcome, dear one! My pleasure as always. Sal Xoxo

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

No more sixes left. Sigh. But I love what you did from memory and glad you mentioned my love of singing and acting and my husband now passed. Funny you should mention a flight to California. I may do that sometime soon.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Hey sweetie, I finally got to you! Just wanted you to know that I have a habit of changing poems for a day or so until I get them right, we have had a lot of lovely reviews..' so I hope you have been reading them..
Also Hon, did you realize that the red text was for all the lines that's rhymed with spitfire.. You were and are, so loved and an awesome spitfire! Thanks Sheri! Hope you had a great birthday


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reply by Spitfire on 26-Jun-2023

I went back to the poem and now see the link between red text and fire. I also noted the darling video. Did I mention my love for cats--oh, I told you about Rosie, I think. I read all the reviews and that bolstered my ego. LOL. I had a wonderful birthday. My son and his family took me to lunch. Then my best friend Jonathan took me to one of his aunt's house where some of his family greeted me with hugs. And talk about a small world. His aunt and I started talking and discovered we both gradated from the same college in Albany, NY!

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Oh Shari, I am so happy you had a great birthday. And I was happy to be a part of it in a small way. I didn't know what a spitfire was until I started researching it and found that they initially were British airplane fighters. The picture with the red hair that I used for your picture was an animated Spitfire flyer. Dang, I should have added that to your notes. Maybe I still will. Have you showed the poem to your kids? I will do that right now.

reply by Spitfire on 26-Jun-2023

Sure I shared the poem with my son and daughter, both of whom thought it was great. Thank you again, sweet Debi.

reply by Spitfire on 26-Jun-2023

I forgot to add Spitfire was my nickname in fourth grade because I always said what I thought. Not always a good thing. Smile.

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

🤗😘

Comment from Yardier

Excellent

I love your style of expression. The natural beat and meter compliment the rhyme to underscore a very light but personal subject. The artwork is a blast to view and reminds me of 'Speed Racer' art from the sixties.

Very nicely done.
Yard.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Hi Yardier! Thanks for this awesome review and lovely comments for shari and her poem. I know she will enjoy reading all the kind comments and wishes for her birthday

Comment from nomi338

Exceptional

I think that it is about time we declare you the official birthday writer. Maybe you should turn professional birthday writer. I know you would not want to abandon your other types of writing, so I will forget about my earlier suggestion. It was just a thought. Another slam dunk by someone who has become a master. SHAQ ain't got nothin on you baby sis.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023

I just love you for being the sweetest big brother ever! My life has seen the raising of the kids while I did the work thing for too many years. Not am thankful that God allows me to try to be a blessing in return to those who blessed me with their review while I wasn't able to review much back. The people I was able to be blessed to call my great friend.. Don't you just love how God works? And I got an Awesome big brother at the same time!
Thank you for being that guy and your sweet comments! 😘🤗
......,and the shiny Six stars too!!!

reply by nomi338 on 24-Jun-2023

The pleasure was mine. Not to deny you your measure of pleasure. Nevertheless, the pleasure was mostly mine.

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023

Humongous Smile!

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was another great birthday poem. I feel like I learn about writers I've yet to read. I will check out her profile. I have fanned about five people because of your poetry. You're quite the marketing genius. This was a fun poem and read very smoothly. Gretchen

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 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023

Hi Gretchen, Thanks for this awesome review and lovely comments for shari and her poem. I know she will enjoy reading all the kind comments and wishes for her birthday