A Peck on the Cheek
Contest entry38 total reviews
Comment from eliz100
You have met the criteria for this contest. Two characters in love in an imaginative environment. The grade school setting brings back memories. There is no room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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You have met the criteria for this contest. Two characters in love in an imaginative environment. The grade school setting brings back memories. There is no room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Elizabeth. Thank you for the wonderful words in your review.
John
Comment from Mary Shifman
I liked this little story. The "what if" concept haunts most of us but trying to follow up can have disastrous results. Your story is beautiful and innocent but also a little sad as are most such tales of regret. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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I liked this little story. The "what if" concept haunts most of us but trying to follow up can have disastrous results. Your story is beautiful and innocent but also a little sad as are most such tales of regret. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for reading this one as well and sharing.
John
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You are welcome.
Comment from jessizero
This romance was so sweet and almost innocent. I hate to think that it is wrong. You did a great job describing the emotions. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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This romance was so sweet and almost innocent. I hate to think that it is wrong. You did a great job describing the emotions. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Jessi.
John
Comment from lyenochka
It's sad that they could not share their problems with their own spouses. I guess there's something about their own relationships that needed the friendship that only they found in each other. You told this story well. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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It's sad that they could not share their problems with their own spouses. I guess there's something about their own relationships that needed the friendship that only they found in each other. You told this story well. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Helen. A wonderful review.
John
Comment from BethShelby
It is easy to see this happening. It often does between co-workers and the sad thing is the guilt they likely both feel and the fear of being found out. The spouses have to suspect they aren't the only one anymore so I can't see this kind of love working out in the end. You have done what the contest required and the story is easy to read and but then it also easy to feel sympathy for two spouses and wonder how you would see this if you were one of them.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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It is easy to see this happening. It often does between co-workers and the sad thing is the guilt they likely both feel and the fear of being found out. The spouses have to suspect they aren't the only one anymore so I can't see this kind of love working out in the end. You have done what the contest required and the story is easy to read and but then it also easy to feel sympathy for two spouses and wonder how you would see this if you were one of them.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Good insight for a continuation to the story.
John
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This was terribly romantic, and not out of the realm of possibility at all! The prompt asks for a "fictional world" for them to be in love in, so I guess carrying on their romance at their school (now abandoned) is that fictional world. Having them share this relationship without giving up their families is also realistic; you even mention that they swap stories about their children.
I think this will do well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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This was terribly romantic, and not out of the realm of possibility at all! The prompt asks for a "fictional world" for them to be in love in, so I guess carrying on their romance at their school (now abandoned) is that fictional world. Having them share this relationship without giving up their families is also realistic; you even mention that they swap stories about their children.
I think this will do well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you , Pam for a great review and well wishes.
John
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Sounds like unconditional love gone astray. Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. It gives a new meaning to love. I am wondering how long something like this can go undetected.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Sounds like unconditional love gone astray. Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. It gives a new meaning to love. I am wondering how long something like this can go undetected.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Probably not long before someone makes a mistake.
Thanks for reading.
John
Comment from evilynne
that was an engrossing love story of two people who did love each other in a special way. It sounds like two schoolteachers involved in clandestine meetings, or perhaps their ghosts. Anyway it is a well written tale. Evi
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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that was an engrossing love story of two people who did love each other in a special way. It sounds like two schoolteachers involved in clandestine meetings, or perhaps their ghosts. Anyway it is a well written tale. Evi
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Evi. Thank you for this great review and six stars?
John
Comment from Jesse James Doty
So, a peck on the cheek turned into a hidden romance. I got lost in the story and was rooting for them to leave their families and get together once and for all. But, alas, they were happy with their current spouses and could not hurt their children so they kept it to themselves and that is how the story ends.
I suppose this contest only asks for romance and doesn't need it to conclude with the end of the perfect romance. Oh well, it was fun while it lasted.
Jesse
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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So, a peck on the cheek turned into a hidden romance. I got lost in the story and was rooting for them to leave their families and get together once and for all. But, alas, they were happy with their current spouses and could not hurt their children so they kept it to themselves and that is how the story ends.
I suppose this contest only asks for romance and doesn't need it to conclude with the end of the perfect romance. Oh well, it was fun while it lasted.
Jesse
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Jesse.
Comment from Jim Wile
It's only Wednesday, and I've run out of 6s, otherwise I'd give this one, John. I loved it. Such a neat story. Makes you wonder if a man and a woman can ever be just friends without a component of love in the mix. Now I wonder about Abby and E.J. Could they possibly have had such a love that they kept hidden?
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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It's only Wednesday, and I've run out of 6s, otherwise I'd give this one, John. I loved it. Such a neat story. Makes you wonder if a man and a woman can ever be just friends without a component of love in the mix. Now I wonder about Abby and E.J. Could they possibly have had such a love that they kept hidden?
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Jim. Wow. Virtual six stars? I?ll take it.
Have a great day. Misty and cold here in NJ.
John