In order to grow
Independence32 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Delightful message about a happy and healthy way to grow in life. Love that picture, too! I also like how you simplified the complexity of the essence poem by making into four three-syllable rhymed phrases! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Delightful message about a happy and healthy way to grow in life. Love that picture, too! I also like how you simplified the complexity of the essence poem by making into four three-syllable rhymed phrases! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you Helen! Yes, these essence poem rules are quite restrictive! Ian so glad you enjoyed this one.
Wendy
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a wonderful piece, Wendy. I'm wondering if the little girl in the photo is a relation. You have said it all with your poem and notes! Beautifully done! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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This is a wonderful piece, Wendy. I'm wondering if the little girl in the photo is a relation. You have said it all with your poem and notes! Beautifully done! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you John. Such a lovely review. (Yes, grandchild number 4, aged six.
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This essence poem, In Order to Grow, has the proper formatting and allows that kids need a bit of latitude in order to become courageous enough to attempt new things. Nice.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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This essence poem, In Order to Grow, has the proper formatting and allows that kids need a bit of latitude in order to become courageous enough to attempt new things. Nice.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much Bill for your thoughtful review.
Wendy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have always felt the worst part of parenting is you don't know how you did until the children become adults and then it's almost too late. LOL Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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I have always felt the worst part of parenting is you don't know how you did until the children become adults and then it's almost too late. LOL Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much Barbara! You are right! We have to let them go, hoping we have taught responsibility and resilience sufficiently well. Its?s very hard to let them go- and let our fears go.
Wendy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is a perfect two line poem, Wendy. It sums up what you say in your author's notes in just two short lines - and they rhyme! Love the font on this, as it reminds me of a child's writing as they begin to write in cursive for the first time.
Good luck with the contest.
Pam
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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This is a perfect two line poem, Wendy. It sums up what you say in your author's notes in just two short lines - and they rhyme! Love the font on this, as it reminds me of a child's writing as they begin to write in cursive for the first time.
Good luck with the contest.
Pam
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you Pam! Lovely review. (Yes, this two line type of poem must have an internal rhyme as well as an end rhyme, and only six syllables per line! Not very easy! Lol.)
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
That is a great two-line poem and should do well in the contest. Your notes really added a great deal to this piece. When we let go of our two sons, I was really worried about one of them. Thank God both turned out okay.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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That is a great two-line poem and should do well in the contest. Your notes really added a great deal to this piece. When we let go of our two sons, I was really worried about one of them. Thank God both turned out okay.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review, Paul. Letting of our kids, and also of our fears and regrets about other things is very hard.
Wendy
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Wendy.
-Your notes and thoughts are appreciated.
-You wrote a very good poem with
effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like you contrast the two lines
to show how someone can change
by "letting go" and then "joy to see."
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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-Nice image and presentation, Wendy.
-Your notes and thoughts are appreciated.
-You wrote a very good poem with
effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like you contrast the two lines
to show how someone can change
by "letting go" and then "joy to see."
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you Pam for your detailed and thoughtful review. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks too for the good wishes.
Wendy
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You are very welcome, Wendy.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice poem for the contest. It definitely fits the stylistic requirements of the contest. It conveys a positive, glowing message that is accentuated by the great photo accompanying the post. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Nice poem for the contest. It definitely fits the stylistic requirements of the contest. It conveys a positive, glowing message that is accentuated by the great photo accompanying the post. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. It?s hard for all of us to let go, whether it be of our children, our past, or our fears ?.
Wendy
Comment from Karyn2
Yes! I love your notes which reflect your poem. The picture is perfect. Letting go of safety, the comfort of what's familiar and that beaming smile says it all. "I can do this. I can be independent ". Pure joy from taking a leap. Well devised.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Yes! I love your notes which reflect your poem. The picture is perfect. Letting go of safety, the comfort of what's familiar and that beaming smile says it all. "I can do this. I can be independent ". Pure joy from taking a leap. Well devised.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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What a lovely review. You understood perfectly. It?s hard for all of us to let go of our security and face unknowns. And to let go of our kids hoping we have done enough to teach responsibility and resilience. Thanks again.
Wendy
Comment from Mrs. KT
So very true, Wendy!
I can relate to your well-crafted two line poem daughter, mother, and gandmother!
Taking flight into independence is, indeed, often very joyful - even if there are bumps and bruises along the way!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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So very true, Wendy!
I can relate to your well-crafted two line poem daughter, mother, and gandmother!
Taking flight into independence is, indeed, often very joyful - even if there are bumps and bruises along the way!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you Diane. Yes, the words apply equally to all of us, and it sometimes is not easy or smooth. I am glad you enjoyed this one.
Wendy