My Dad's Shocking Discovery
I will always remember this amazing time with my dad48 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a beautiful story about your father and your family. You introduced the story with a brief history of your grandparents and the reason your father entered the military at such an early age. This is a 'feel good' story where a veteran is acknowledged for acts of bravery and heroism, and his family is privy to a celebration in his honor. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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This is a beautiful story about your father and your family. You introduced the story with a brief history of your grandparents and the reason your father entered the military at such an early age. This is a 'feel good' story where a veteran is acknowledged for acts of bravery and heroism, and his family is privy to a celebration in his honor. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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You are a sweetheart and I thank you so very much!
This was an amazing time for us to watch him so proudly show what everything was for on the ship, like it had been the day before!
He was proud that their ship was a National Monument, but he felt the representation of it was for all who served and not just those from the ship..
He actually was humbled by it all! Thank you from the bottom of my heart, my dear friend for the kind review and lovely words
Comment from nomi338
What a wonderful story. I am fascinated by stories like this and great heroes like your dad. I have found tat many veterans who have had to kill an enemy soldier from close range are reluctant to talk about their experiences because watching someone die at your hands does something to you internally. I know te situation with your dad was somewhat different, but it is also a reluctance to seem to be bragging that prevents some men from discussing their military experiences.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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What a wonderful story. I am fascinated by stories like this and great heroes like your dad. I have found tat many veterans who have had to kill an enemy soldier from close range are reluctant to talk about their experiences because watching someone die at your hands does something to you internally. I know te situation with your dad was somewhat different, but it is also a reluctance to seem to be bragging that prevents some men from discussing their military experiences.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Nomi, You are a sweetheart and I thank you so very much!
This was an amazing time for us to watch him so proudly show what everything was for on the ship, like it had been the day before!
He was proud that their ship was a National Monument, but he felt the representation of it was for all who served and not just those from the ship..
He actually was humbled by it all! Thank you from the bottom of my heart, my dear friend for the kind review and lovely words
Comment from Lilly Flowers
This was an amazing story. Your writing is fantastic and you held my interest from beginning to end. I'm always interested in the WWII era. I look back on all those brave young men and am amazed. That was probably the last war worth fighting.
Your father's story is particularly poignant because of his age. Men have a hard time expressing their emotions and I completely understand why he didn't talk about all he had gone through. Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This was an amazing story. Your writing is fantastic and you held my interest from beginning to end. I'm always interested in the WWII era. I look back on all those brave young men and am amazed. That was probably the last war worth fighting.
Your father's story is particularly poignant because of his age. Men have a hard time expressing their emotions and I completely understand why he didn't talk about all he had gone through. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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You are so very sweet Lily. I appreciate your kind words for my father as well as my family. I can't thank you enough for your generous six stars, which I they feel even more special than normal because they honor my dad in honor of Father's Day. Your appreciation for the service and the men makes me even prouder to be your friend! I still get the chills and tears when I stand for the National Anthem, and I agree about the wars, as being a girlfriend of a Vietnam guy who never came home, I have always felt it was a senseless war. However I have so much respect for every person, no matter where they served. As I can tell you feel the same way. I thank you my very dear friend for the loveliest review yet and kind words!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Oh my gosh. How many stories like this must there be out there? War does so much harm to our boys and yet they continue to volunteer and fight for America.
A few suggestions:
Para 1, 4th sentence: Remove extra spaces between "support" and "and"
Para 9, 2nd sentence: Add comma after "So"
Para 10, 1st sentence: Change "it's" to "its"
Para 10, 1st sentence: Add comma after "young"
Para 10, 2nd sentence: Add paragraph space after "attack."
Para 12, 2nd sentence: Add paragraph space after "dying."
Para 15, 1st sentence: Either add a paragraph space after "shipmates." or remove spaces until the second half of that paragraph is inclusive.
Para 15, 5th sentence: Remove comma after "businessman"
Para 16, 3rd sentence: Remove comma after "members"
Very last sentence: add comma after "also"
A great story well told. It makes me proud to think of your dad's sacrifice. Good job.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Oh my gosh. How many stories like this must there be out there? War does so much harm to our boys and yet they continue to volunteer and fight for America.
A few suggestions:
Para 1, 4th sentence: Remove extra spaces between "support" and "and"
Para 9, 2nd sentence: Add comma after "So"
Para 10, 1st sentence: Change "it's" to "its"
Para 10, 1st sentence: Add comma after "young"
Para 10, 2nd sentence: Add paragraph space after "attack."
Para 12, 2nd sentence: Add paragraph space after "dying."
Para 15, 1st sentence: Either add a paragraph space after "shipmates." or remove spaces until the second half of that paragraph is inclusive.
Para 15, 5th sentence: Remove comma after "businessman"
Para 16, 3rd sentence: Remove comma after "members"
Very last sentence: add comma after "also"
A great story well told. It makes me proud to think of your dad's sacrifice. Good job.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you Gary for your kind review and feedback. I truly appreciate it my dear friend!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your dad the hero that join the navy just to ensure that you have bread on your table and that you grow up with everything that you needed. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Your dad the hero that join the navy just to ensure that you have bread on your table and that you grow up with everything that you needed. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you Iza, as I do truly appreciate it, but it was for his mother and siblings. But your right, he was a hero and I am so thankful that I got to see him have his moment before he died. Thank you my lovely friend!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This moved me to tears. What a beautiful story of a true hero; I'm so sorry he lived with that guilt for so many years. But I'm glad that you were able to have such a wonderful week with your family, and that you finally learned of his war years.
You've written a very intimate tribute to your dad. Congratulations - good work.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This moved me to tears. What a beautiful story of a true hero; I'm so sorry he lived with that guilt for so many years. But I'm glad that you were able to have such a wonderful week with your family, and that you finally learned of his war years.
You've written a very intimate tribute to your dad. Congratulations - good work.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Oh thank you so very much Pam. I appreciate your lovely review and words more than I can say. This was a delight to share this story for the first time and do it with my friends. I will feel closer to him this year on Father's Day because of all the kind words, and I thank you again my friend.
Comment from Annmuma
What a wonderful story and opportunity for your father's family to learn so much more about who he really was. Great contest entry. No spag that I saw and I appreciate the opportunity read the story. ann
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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What a wonderful story and opportunity for your father's family to learn so much more about who he really was. Great contest entry. No spag that I saw and I appreciate the opportunity read the story. ann
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Oh thank you so very much Ann! I appreciate your lovely review and words more than I can say. This was a delight to share this story for the first time and do it with my friends. I will feel closer to him this year on Father's Day because of all the kind words, and I thank you again my friend.
Comment from Terry Broxson
A powerful story. It is well-written from the heart with pathos and love. I have one suggestion. The fifth paragraph: My Dad called our congressman, Congressmen are elected to a district not assigned. Exceptional work. Terry.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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A powerful story. It is well-written from the heart with pathos and love. I have one suggestion. The fifth paragraph: My Dad called our congressman, Congressmen are elected to a district not assigned. Exceptional work. Terry.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Wow, thank you Terry! I appreciate your wonderful review and kind words, but surely never expected the generous six stars from a pro story writer like yourself. Thank you so very much! It was time for me to come out of my comfort zone of poetry, as I felt my dad deserved it. I have taken all the kind feedback serious and corrected the silly little errors, so am glad that it reads better today. I was so nervous about it. I already went back and edited your great suggestion, as it never felt right, but I just wrote, Congressman Minge, from our district. I hope that sounds ok. Thank you so very much for always being so helpful to everyone. I do wonder about the title of the Naval title that I used that couldn't contact my dad, since I was going on memory of 25 years ago. So being so fluent in the Navy, being a limey yourself, maybe you know if that was the right name? (not sure if limey is still a word used and l apologize if it's insulting)
Thanks again my friend. You are Awesome!
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Sorry can't help you with Navy thing, my buddy Carl was in the Navy, not me. Maybe try an internet search and see what you can find or ask Tom Hornzy a member of FanStory, Tom was Navy.
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Why did I think you worked with something with the navy? Anyway I am sorry
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I have a story posted right now about my Carl and his experience as a Navy Doctor.
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I think I just read that one. Wasn't that the one that I only said three things.
Ouch, way to go Mrs M and you have to be my husband's brother???
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LOL, Yep
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A very interesting and fascinating story of your father who became a man at age 15. He certainly was a hero both as a veteran and a dad.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
Mary
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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A very interesting and fascinating story of your father who became a man at age 15. He certainly was a hero both as a veteran and a dad.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
Mary
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Oh thank you so very much Mary! I appreciate your lovely review and words more than I can say. This was a delight to share this story for the first time and do it with my friends. I will feel closer to him this year on Father's Day because of all the kind words, and I thank you again my friend.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was an amazing story, and one you must treasure. I can understand your father not wanting to lie to his friends parents, and how that must have hurt him over the years. Our dads went through a lot in the first and second world wars and many never wanted to talk about it. Well done, this is a wonderful contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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That was an amazing story, and one you must treasure. I can understand your father not wanting to lie to his friends parents, and how that must have hurt him over the years. Our dads went through a lot in the first and second world wars and many never wanted to talk about it. Well done, this is a wonderful contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Oh thank you so very much Sandra!. I appreciate your lovely review and words more than I can say. This was a delight to share this story for the first time and do it with my friends. I will feel closer to him this year on Father's Day because of all the kind words, and I thank you again my friend.