That Special Time Awaits
Will join father in Heaven.37 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Sadly, life is littered with a lot of tales such as your one.
I think you have a lot of unresolved issues here but hoping for a reconciliation in Heaven may be pushing things a little. I'm not sure that's how things work, but I hope you're right.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hi there,
Sadly, life is littered with a lot of tales such as your one.
I think you have a lot of unresolved issues here but hoping for a reconciliation in Heaven may be pushing things a little. I'm not sure that's how things work, but I hope you're right.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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That thought and hope gets me through the day. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Jay Squires
You wrote a moving and loving account of life without a father's love. Still ... I wonder if others experienced what I did in reading this: the complete absence of mentioning your mother -- yet she must have been with you from age two to age eight, at which time you went to live with her mother, your grandmother. Doubtless, she was the true mother figure to you.
I mention the above from the composition standpoint: I think unresolved questions in your readers' minds, which tends to muddy comprehension ... can be removed with just a sentence or two about those six years with your mother. It lends balance and credibility to the overall scenario and might even explain why you have been so driven to unite with your father when the reader would find it hard to imagine how you could have any actual memories of him at two.
You have been very courageous in offering this snippet of your entire life and yet I'm left with the feeling that an important part of it still remains untold. The part I read was, indeed, fascinating and a tribute to the mystery of paternal love.
I hope my suggestions don't appear unfeeling, or even cruel; that's not my intent. From the critiquing standpoint, I'm doing my best to help you draw out hidden depths in your story. But if I can't help you, I most certainly don't want to hurt you.
Keep writing. You have a marvelous gift.
Jay Squires
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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You wrote a moving and loving account of life without a father's love. Still ... I wonder if others experienced what I did in reading this: the complete absence of mentioning your mother -- yet she must have been with you from age two to age eight, at which time you went to live with her mother, your grandmother. Doubtless, she was the true mother figure to you.
I mention the above from the composition standpoint: I think unresolved questions in your readers' minds, which tends to muddy comprehension ... can be removed with just a sentence or two about those six years with your mother. It lends balance and credibility to the overall scenario and might even explain why you have been so driven to unite with your father when the reader would find it hard to imagine how you could have any actual memories of him at two.
You have been very courageous in offering this snippet of your entire life and yet I'm left with the feeling that an important part of it still remains untold. The part I read was, indeed, fascinating and a tribute to the mystery of paternal love.
I hope my suggestions don't appear unfeeling, or even cruel; that's not my intent. From the critiquing standpoint, I'm doing my best to help you draw out hidden depths in your story. But if I can't help you, I most certainly don't want to hurt you.
Keep writing. You have a marvelous gift.
Jay Squires
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Jay, this story has nothing to do with my mother and totally to do with my father and my need to be accepted by him. Thanks for reading.
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I'm sorry.
Comment from karenina
"He was a whole needful pretend father."
That line slayed me. What we do not have, as children, we fill in with dreams, wishes and imagination...
Who knows what drove him to remain apart from you! So many absentee parents truly believe their presence would be detrimental...
I am glad you met with his daughter and your nephew. Somehow, I think that would make your dad smile.
Even if your time with her was short, and jealousy seems odd coming from her...perhaps she felt "less than" knowing you were first?
I agree... There will be a reunion past this life.
Endings can also be new beginnings!
So glad you shared this story!
You speak for many of us!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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"He was a whole needful pretend father."
That line slayed me. What we do not have, as children, we fill in with dreams, wishes and imagination...
Who knows what drove him to remain apart from you! So many absentee parents truly believe their presence would be detrimental...
I am glad you met with his daughter and your nephew. Somehow, I think that would make your dad smile.
Even if your time with her was short, and jealousy seems odd coming from her...perhaps she felt "less than" knowing you were first?
I agree... There will be a reunion past this life.
Endings can also be new beginnings!
So glad you shared this story!
You speak for many of us!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your response.
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You are most welcome...
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very interesting story. It is strange that your father never tried to contact you. And it is stranger still that your half-sister cut off your relationship. Perhaps your father's mother was kinder to you than to her? It would be a good idea to try once more to befriend her if you have children. I tried very hard to find out who might be my 4 grandchildren's fathers and warned them of the potential of meeting half siblings. Unbelievably one of the boys tried to pick up a cute girl in a bar and she is his half-sister. They are good friends now and his father has acknowledged him.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This is a very interesting story. It is strange that your father never tried to contact you. And it is stranger still that your half-sister cut off your relationship. Perhaps your father's mother was kinder to you than to her? It would be a good idea to try once more to befriend her if you have children. I tried very hard to find out who might be my 4 grandchildren's fathers and warned them of the potential of meeting half siblings. Unbelievably one of the boys tried to pick up a cute girl in a bar and she is his half-sister. They are good friends now and his father has acknowledged him.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from LisaMay
You've written this so well - there is such heartbreak and emotion contained in your story. Having an imaginary father is no substitute. Those good grandmothers were important in your life. How perplexing that Debbie's attitude changed and she withdrew from you. Heaven will sort things out.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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You've written this so well - there is such heartbreak and emotion contained in your story. Having an imaginary father is no substitute. Those good grandmothers were important in your life. How perplexing that Debbie's attitude changed and she withdrew from you. Heaven will sort things out.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Those grandmothers were NOT good. They are the ones responsible for keeping my father and I apart.
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Yes, they did that, but at least they were in your life and cared about bringing you up and keeping in contact. They could've disappeared out of your life. I can see they did you a major disservice though, so I apologise for sticking up for them. Older people judge things by a different perspective to younger people.
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is a heart wrenching piece, and something I can't directly relate to. However, you write extremely articulately, so I feel as though I understand at least a bit of the emotion involved. Beautifully written.
Mike
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This is a heart wrenching piece, and something I can't directly relate to. However, you write extremely articulately, so I feel as though I understand at least a bit of the emotion involved. Beautifully written.
Mike
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Mike.
Comment from Shirley McLain
You did a great job with your story. I am sorry the relationship with your sister didn't work out, but at least you met her face to face. I'm sure you will have a glorious meeting with your father when the time arrives. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
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You did a great job with your story. I am sorry the relationship with your sister didn't work out, but at least you met her face to face. I'm sure you will have a glorious meeting with your father when the time arrives. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
So heartbreaking and sad; I wonder what happened with your sister. Human interactions have so many opportunities for misunderstanding. I'm sorry that you never got a chance to know your father. I have a good dad, but he was a bit distant and cold when I was young. I am just getting to know him as a person now.
I 'm sure that you were always part of your father's heart and he thought he was doing what was best for you.
This is a good and interesting memoire, and thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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So heartbreaking and sad; I wonder what happened with your sister. Human interactions have so many opportunities for misunderstanding. I'm sorry that you never got a chance to know your father. I have a good dad, but he was a bit distant and cold when I was young. I am just getting to know him as a person now.
I 'm sure that you were always part of your father's heart and he thought he was doing what was best for you.
This is a good and interesting memoire, and thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great poem for the contest. A heartwarming and hopeful post filled with faith and assurance that you will meet your father again. Very nice tribute to him. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Great poem for the contest. A heartwarming and hopeful post filled with faith and assurance that you will meet your father again. Very nice tribute to him. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Not a poem Theodore, but a story. Thank you for reading.
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Sorry for calling the post a poem. My bad.
Comment from Terry Broxson
You have written a very compelling story. As I read it I thought was wrong with that man, and then what was wrong with your half-sister. Your grandmother seemed okay, but what happened to these folks. Good luck in the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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You have written a very compelling story. As I read it I thought was wrong with that man, and then what was wrong with your half-sister. Your grandmother seemed okay, but what happened to these folks. Good luck in the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Terry: my grandmothers were both horrible, too. They both knew where my father resided but wouldn't tell me and let me go my entire life without him.
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Dang, what a group of people.
