The Return
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
A startling departure--never would have guessed you had it in you! I'll be back tomorrow!
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And she was sure she knew him in a sexual, intimate way, yet, not like those fleeting moments which was totally impossible because she was still a virgin.
And she was sure she knew him in a sexual, intimate way--yet, not like those fleeting moments--which was totally impossible because she was still a virgin.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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A startling departure--never would have guessed you had it in you! I'll be back tomorrow!
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And she was sure she knew him in a sexual, intimate way, yet, not like those fleeting moments which was totally impossible because she was still a virgin.
And she was sure she knew him in a sexual, intimate way--yet, not like those fleeting moments--which was totally impossible because she was still a virgin.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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It was nerve-wracking posting this, Liz, lol. I thought I'd lose all my friends and be blocked. It is a big change, but I intend to keep on with it because I want to see if I can write something totally different. Thank you for those excellent suggestions, I've made the changes.
Thank you so much, my friend, your encouraging words have spurred me on! Happy New Year, may it be a good one. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, well that was enlightening...what a great way
to start the new year off...
it's a good thing she woke up...because if she was waiting for the grand finale...takes more than a dream...I mean from my experiences...hmmmmm....
truly it's a great story told...can't wait to see where it goes from here...if there is ever a final finale...and who he is...this is like a Ghost and Mrs. Muir...but more romance...
I love your story told my amazing friend...can't wait to read the mystery behind the dreams...love you to the moon...
the one your always jumping over...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Hi Sandra, well that was enlightening...what a great way
to start the new year off...
it's a good thing she woke up...because if she was waiting for the grand finale...takes more than a dream...I mean from my experiences...hmmmmm....
truly it's a great story told...can't wait to see where it goes from here...if there is ever a final finale...and who he is...this is like a Ghost and Mrs. Muir...but more romance...
I love your story told my amazing friend...can't wait to read the mystery behind the dreams...love you to the moon...
the one your always jumping over...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Hmm, perhaps you wouldn't mind sharing your experiences with me, Linda, being the innocent that I am, this is all guesswork..... Lol.
Yes, this is totally out of my normal zone, from tiny tots stories, to teens, and the rest. This is really different. But, it does have a strong story so I hope everyone will like it. I have to admit, I was really, really nervous posting this on here. But, so far, so good. I hope it continues that way!!
Thank you dear friend, for this lovely review, I'm glad you are still my friend!!!!!! Love you right back over my moon! Happy New Year, I hope it will be amazing. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Sandra xxx
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LOL...I would love to share my experiences with you sweet girl...do you have five minutes...
I know you Sandra...if it weren't a good story told...you wouldn't put it out there...
it will just be a bit different...but look on the bright side beautiful you...if you need
help/advice...I'm sure Graham would love to jump right in there for you...
so far...it's off to a great start...
and if you still need help...I'm right there...LOL...when it comes to writing stories...were like a Pearl and a rock...me being the rock...it will be an awesome book...I know you...Hap-Hap-Happy New Year...
FRIENDS FOREVER...and your more than welcome...and all the love Santa can fit on his sled...Linda xxoo
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You know just how to boost a girls confidence, my sweet friend. I really wish I could come and visit, but it's too far, and too expensive to get there. But it's so nice to chat to you on hear. Perhaps we can skype or something one day. Then you can see this old wrinkly lady in the flesh! Hmm perhaps not, you'll have nightmares!! Lol!! Love you my forever friend. xxxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
How frustrating that would be! Imagine having him disappear just as things really get steamy. He must be real in some way, or there's no story. Wonder who he is. I'm waiting impatiently for Sunday to find out more.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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How frustrating that would be! Imagine having him disappear just as things really get steamy. He must be real in some way, or there's no story. Wonder who he is. I'm waiting impatiently for Sunday to find out more.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Cindy, for reading my prologue. :)) I'm so glad you want to discover the who, what, and why of all this. It's quite a different plot to my usual ones, actually, saying that, most of them are quite different!!! Lol. Happy New Year, my friend, I hope it will be a brilliant one. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Tad more than mild! That's hot enough for an intimate romance. Hope you are headed toward that. You have skills, Lady! Nerve endings is probably two words. Best of luck with this. Have a blessed new year.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Tad more than mild! That's hot enough for an intimate romance. Hope you are headed toward that. You have skills, Lady! Nerve endings is probably two words. Best of luck with this. Have a blessed new year.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Yes, there is romance, Carol, I think you will like it. :)) Thank you so much for your really nice review, and for the correction. I've made the change and, nerve ends, is now two words. Thanks so much for that. Chapter one begins on Sunday, a lot tamer than the prologue.
Have the best New Year, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra. xxx
Comment from Jay Squires
Sandra, couldn't you have waited one more day before posting this? Until I had a fresh supply of sixes? This was a heated teaser you wrote. It makes me wonder if it his going to have shades of the paranormal mixed in with her sexual fantasies. Can't wait until Sunday.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Sandra, couldn't you have waited one more day before posting this? Until I had a fresh supply of sixes? This was a heated teaser you wrote. It makes me wonder if it his going to have shades of the paranormal mixed in with her sexual fantasies. Can't wait until Sunday.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Jay, for giving me such a lovely review. I wanted to get the prologue out first to see the reaction, (as this is way out of my comfort zone,) and I wanted to branch out and see what I could do. So I do sincerely hope you will stick with me, and pick me up when I make stupid mistakes! Chapter one will come out on Sunday. Thank you, my friend. Love and hugs, and a Happy New Year! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Great that you are returning with another book, Sandra. I look forward to reading it. Your prologue gives readers good information and is a 'tease' of what's to come later. Your words are well thought out and descriptive.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Great that you are returning with another book, Sandra. I look forward to reading it. Your prologue gives readers good information and is a 'tease' of what's to come later. Your words are well thought out and descriptive.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Jan. I'm so pleased you thought the prologue was good, and that it's a 'tease' to what's to come. Chapter one will be posted on Sunday. Warm hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from JessicaAshley
Great job with description, it definitely wrapped me in. I was not expecting it to turn out how it did... that she was really alone and he was not with her. I'm intrigued to see where this goes!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Great job with description, it definitely wrapped me in. I was not expecting it to turn out how it did... that she was really alone and he was not with her. I'm intrigued to see where this goes!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Jessica, for your lovely comments on my prologue. I'm so very pleased you had a surprise at the end. I'll be posting part 1 on Sunday, so stay tuned! Have a really Happy New Year, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You could call this "The Case of the Phantom Lover!"
-Interesting premise with a mystery in the Prologue.
-There's got to be a clue in the "startling red hair."
-Maybe that's why he appears to her.
-It will be interesting to see where this goes,
and what or who is returning.
-Happy New Year to you and Graham. I guess
we'll see the Wheel in pictures of New Year's eve
around the world!
-Here's to a good 2022.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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-You could call this "The Case of the Phantom Lover!"
-Interesting premise with a mystery in the Prologue.
-There's got to be a clue in the "startling red hair."
-Maybe that's why he appears to her.
-It will be interesting to see where this goes,
and what or who is returning.
-Happy New Year to you and Graham. I guess
we'll see the Wheel in pictures of New Year's eve
around the world!
-Here's to a good 2022.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Hi Pam, Happy New Year! I have been so worried about posting this part, but it seems to be going down well. Everyone wants to know the what, who, and why of it. Lol. The story begins on Sunday, but the prologue was vital for what will take place soon. I hope you have a wonderful, healthy, happy New Year, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
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You are welcome for the review, Sandra. I don't know if you ever watched the show "Perry Mason" back in the day, but that is where I got the first phrase from. The title of the show was always "The Case of...... Happy New Year!
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I remember Perry Mason! That was years ago. Now you've mentioned it, yes I do remember that was how each story began. I really enoyed watching it. That was long before we had all the different channels we have now. :)) Did you stay up to see the New Year in? I was fast asleep in bed by 11pm! Lol. HNY to you both, too! xxx
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Yes, it was years ago, but it was a good show cause Perry always won!! We usually stay up to midnight so we watched a PBS special from 9-10:30. We relax after that, and we watched the ball drop at midnight. Happy New Year to you, as well.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra.
My, my, my, haven't you changed tunes. Startling red hair. Hmmm.
Sounds like someone we know, from long ago. Time will tell.
This should certainly hook your readers into the rest of the novel.
Well done.
Sorry I'm out of sixes.
Happy New Year, which starts pretty soon in the UK.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Hello Sandra.
My, my, my, haven't you changed tunes. Startling red hair. Hmmm.
Sounds like someone we know, from long ago. Time will tell.
This should certainly hook your readers into the rest of the novel.
Well done.
Sorry I'm out of sixes.
Happy New Year, which starts pretty soon in the UK.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Hello Robert, it's not going to last! Lol. I was so nervous posting this prologue, but it's been really well received. You will discover what it's all about after a few chapters, that's when she discovers what's happening, too!! Lol. Thank you for reading my prologue, my friend. I'm glad you thought it was a good hook. Happy New Year, I hope you have a good one! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
Mmmh I know you wouldn't post this if it wasn't necessary Sandra, this is a good descriptive prologue, and an intriguing visitation of a phantom lover Sandra, well done, an excellent post, HNY, my friend. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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Mmmh I know you wouldn't post this if it wasn't necessary Sandra, this is a good descriptive prologue, and an intriguing visitation of a phantom lover Sandra, well done, an excellent post, HNY, my friend. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021
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No, I wouldn't, but this will become clear in a few chapters time. Thank you so much for reading my prologue, Roy, I was really nervous posting it! Have a wonderful New Year, too, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
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Bless you Sandra, I know you wouldn?t. HNY