Poems from a Pensive Poet
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
This is a contender for sure. You nailed the differences between enduring love and fleeting attraction. Excellent rhyme and fine flow. Stunning phrasing pounds home the points.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This is a contender for sure. You nailed the differences between enduring love and fleeting attraction. Excellent rhyme and fine flow. Stunning phrasing pounds home the points.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you Elizabeth. I appareciate the review. I have fun writing poetry occasionally but I don't count on it being a contender but it is nice to hear that.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Beth, this is such a lovely rhyming love poem. I so enjoyed reading it. Yes you're right, but it doesn't always last although all the love is there. I've been there twice. Two long marriages and full of love, until one day we had drifted apart. It does happen and it happened to me twice. Now I'm so happy being on my own and ended up being great friends with my exes and their wives. It's worked out wonderfully. We get together often.
I loved your poem and it's a great entry. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Awe, Beth, this is such a lovely rhyming love poem. I so enjoyed reading it. Yes you're right, but it doesn't always last although all the love is there. I've been there twice. Two long marriages and full of love, until one day we had drifted apart. It does happen and it happened to me twice. Now I'm so happy being on my own and ended up being great friends with my exes and their wives. It's worked out wonderfully. We get together often.
I loved your poem and it's a great entry. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for the review. Being happy is what matters and it is rare to stay close to the exes and especially thier wives. I'm not sure if that would be easy to do.
Beth
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Well, it works for us, and wonderfully so. We all keep and open mind. I think it's lovely it has worked out like that. It makes life so much easier. :)))
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this 'how to' understand true love. This poem flowed smoothly and I am sure it's because of the wonderful job you did with your rhyming scheme. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you for sharing this 'how to' understand true love. This poem flowed smoothly and I am sure it's because of the wonderful job you did with your rhyming scheme. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the review and the nice comments. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from SimianSavant
Nice work. Just a couple small suggestions:
*A look at what make love last.* I think you meant to write MAKES
*Love isn't easily explained* just my opinion here: this is ok as a first line, and the content is fine, it just feels to me like it could flow off the tongue a little better by demarcating *LOVE* with a pause or a consonant rather than flowing straight into a soft vowel falling on a heavily accented syllable. *Isn't* is a strange word, isn't it? You might try something like *Love: [a/the] thing [I/we] can't explain*, etc.
*life hurdles, or life's hurdles? I don't mind your former use; it's just less conventional
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Nice work. Just a couple small suggestions:
*A look at what make love last.* I think you meant to write MAKES
*Love isn't easily explained* just my opinion here: this is ok as a first line, and the content is fine, it just feels to me like it could flow off the tongue a little better by demarcating *LOVE* with a pause or a consonant rather than flowing straight into a soft vowel falling on a heavily accented syllable. *Isn't* is a strange word, isn't it? You might try something like *Love: [a/the] thing [I/we] can't explain*, etc.
*life hurdles, or life's hurdles? I don't mind your former use; it's just less conventional
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the review and the helpful suggestions. I changed the first couple of lines. Love defies a definition;
an endearing heart condition.
Beth
Comment from SHABAMO
This is a great entry for the rhyming contest! You capture key words in that like the melding of minds and and how that binds two together. A pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This is a great entry for the rhyming contest! You capture key words in that like the melding of minds and and how that binds two together. A pleasure to read.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice commenst.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
As I've said many times, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But your fine poem speaks truth and explanations that we all know as rhyming truth. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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As I've said many times, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But your fine poem speaks truth and explanations that we all know as rhyming truth. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Ric. I do appreciate the review and he nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
True love is not so much the dreamy feeling you have, as it is enduring commitment that you can give. I love this beautifully worded romantic poem. Words and rhymes flow smoothly. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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True love is not so much the dreamy feeling you have, as it is enduring commitment that you can give. I love this beautifully worded romantic poem. Words and rhymes flow smoothly. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you for an excellent review and comments.
Beth
Comment from royowen
A marriage on Earth is a covenant, only a shadow of the marriage of the Lamb to His beloved bride, the church, but an everlasting union, which the Lord states on Earth. "What God has joined together, let no man cast asunder." Beautifully written Beth, this is a superb post. Articulate, nicely articulate, smooth, rhymed sweetly in aabb, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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A marriage on Earth is a covenant, only a shadow of the marriage of the Lamb to His beloved bride, the church, but an everlasting union, which the Lord states on Earth. "What God has joined together, let no man cast asunder." Beautifully written Beth, this is a superb post. Articulate, nicely articulate, smooth, rhymed sweetly in aabb, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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You are right. An earthly marriage is only a shadow of the marriage of the Lamb but an earthly marriage that lasts makes life on this earth so much sweeter. Thank you for a agreat review.
Beth
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That?s right Brth