Incident on a Lonely Highway
A woman on a lonely highway has a fender bender.43 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Hello Norma, it's a long time since I've had the pleasure of reading your writing. It always gave me inspiration and this one had me guessing. I'm a bit slow at the best of times, but I could never guess until the ending what was going on! I couldn't work out why he was so angry all the time. Then the ending and the penny dropped, Giddy : -)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Hello Norma, it's a long time since I've had the pleasure of reading your writing. It always gave me inspiration and this one had me guessing. I'm a bit slow at the best of times, but I could never guess until the ending what was going on! I couldn't work out why he was so angry all the time. Then the ending and the penny dropped, Giddy : -)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Hi, Giddy. Well, that ending fooled a lot of people, LOL. I had fun writing this one. Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Magpiemazy.
Nice lead-in to a fun conclusion. Especially got a kick out of "Hope you like Greek." It left me chuckling. Wasn't certain whether the man was following her for nefarious reasons or if it was just a long stretch of road that both had to travel to get to the next destination. Overall, enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Nice lead-in to a fun conclusion. Especially got a kick out of "Hope you like Greek." It left me chuckling. Wasn't certain whether the man was following her for nefarious reasons or if it was just a long stretch of road that both had to travel to get to the next destination. Overall, enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Glad you enjoyed it. I think the guy had his own nefarious plans once she took him to her house. We'll never know. Thanks for the review. Much appreciated.
Comment from blondie560
This one had me guessing for a long while. I didn't get the vampire vibe at all. When she said she could hold her own against a man, she had lots of practice, I figured she had been in some abusive relationships. Poor Don. He has no idea what is coming. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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This one had me guessing for a long while. I didn't get the vampire vibe at all. When she said she could hold her own against a man, she had lots of practice, I figured she had been in some abusive relationships. Poor Don. He has no idea what is coming. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Well, Don might have been going to attack her at her house... We'll never know. Thanks for the review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Cogitator
Very smooth transitions, meaningful dialogue, creativity could be improved. This is a solid effort. Will keep checking your portfolio for improvement/change...John
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Very smooth transitions, meaningful dialogue, creativity could be improved. This is a solid effort. Will keep checking your portfolio for improvement/change...John
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Thanks for liking it. Appreciate constructive criticisms.
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
Haha. Very creative clever ending! The story reads well. The character is consistently angry and sarcastic throughout. You missed a comma in this sentence: The jerk believes I'm going to disappear and leave him standing by his car with egg on his face but I have other plans - should be face, This was a very enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Haha. Very creative clever ending! The story reads well. The character is consistently angry and sarcastic throughout. You missed a comma in this sentence: The jerk believes I'm going to disappear and leave him standing by his car with egg on his face but I have other plans - should be face, This was a very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Hello again. Thanks for liking this bit. I had fun writing it.
Comment from Halfree
What a great story ... you had me going. Like the way you built the story ... very well done in a Orson Welds sort of way.The ending ... wham bang! Read the thing three times and enjoyed each read. This is good work, but you know that.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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What a great story ... you had me going. Like the way you built the story ... very well done in a Orson Welds sort of way.The ending ... wham bang! Read the thing three times and enjoyed each read. This is good work, but you know that.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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If you get two replies on this, it's because I wrote five reviews and paused to cook dinner... and then the site dumped me out and said I had to register or log in. Grrr!
The fact you enjoyed it enough to read it three times is great for my ego.
Comment from Tpa
A super story with a surprise ending. I liked your beginning and the intensity throughout the tale. The description of the night made the story even more enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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A super story with a surprise ending. I liked your beginning and the intensity throughout the tale. The description of the night made the story even more enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Well I do live in the area described (loosely) in the story, and I have smelled rain on the highway and on creosote bushes. Glad you liked the story. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from BethShelby
This is cool story with a very unexpected ending. I had no idea you were shopping for supper. Too bad you're planning to dine on this Greek God. You are an excellent story teller but I've not seen you on this site for quite some time. I hope you're back for a while,
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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This is cool story with a very unexpected ending. I had no idea you were shopping for supper. Too bad you're planning to dine on this Greek God. You are an excellent story teller but I've not seen you on this site for quite some time. I hope you're back for a while,
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Just getting old, Beth, and so I don't review much and write less. I am trying to get back in the groove. I'll be 87 in January. Hopefully, a new story will be posted in a few days or a week. Thanks for the great review.
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I'm getting older too. Aren't we all. I turned 84 last week. I think you have a lot left in you to shaire with us, and I look forward to reading the new story.
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I'll work on that story and get it out there. Thanks again, Beth.
Comment from pookietoo
You did a great job telling about the lady's fender bender. A wonderful story to read. I think the photo you used with your story is great too. I hope you have a nice day.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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You did a great job telling about the lady's fender bender. A wonderful story to read. I think the photo you used with your story is great too. I hope you have a nice day.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
I love the twisted ending! Fanged humor. The build up suggesting the young Greek was a shifty character and the woman a victim was vivid and engaging. Who was who and who was dinner was truly unexpected and without foreshadowing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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I love the twisted ending! Fanged humor. The build up suggesting the young Greek was a shifty character and the woman a victim was vivid and engaging. Who was who and who was dinner was truly unexpected and without foreshadowing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Thanks, Nancy. The Greek might have had his own agenda as well, who knows? Anyway, he didn't know what he was getting into.
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:-)