The Path Not Taken
Sometimes reunions are beginnnings31 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
I could feel the anticipation as you walked ankle deep through Autumn's offerings toward the memory of a man who would now take you in his arms and kiss you. This is so romantic. I could envision the young inexperienced dreamer, twenty years prior, excited to follow a path not caring where it would lead, if anywhere. I love stories of years later. This is well written and well thought out. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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I could feel the anticipation as you walked ankle deep through Autumn's offerings toward the memory of a man who would now take you in his arms and kiss you. This is so romantic. I could envision the young inexperienced dreamer, twenty years prior, excited to follow a path not caring where it would lead, if anywhere. I love stories of years later. This is well written and well thought out. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Frances Jean
Love lost and found again, the thrill of forbidden love, always a draw card. We'll written with vivid imagery. I enjoyed reading your little story. Take care and stay safe Franky
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Love lost and found again, the thrill of forbidden love, always a draw card. We'll written with vivid imagery. I enjoyed reading your little story. Take care and stay safe Franky
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
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Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a beautiful little love story that many of us fantasize about as we get older, and wonder "what if". You've described the colours of autumn well, as well as the clothing meant for the season. I like the happy ending. Well done.
One suggestion: Try including other senses such as smell and sound into your imagery.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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This is a beautiful little love story that many of us fantasize about as we get older, and wonder "what if". You've described the colours of autumn well, as well as the clothing meant for the season. I like the happy ending. Well done.
One suggestion: Try including other senses such as smell and sound into your imagery.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Thank you, I will work on the additions
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a wonderful story that made me feel good after I finished reading it. You did a great job of describing the seasonal atmosphere both present and past and had just the right touch of anxiety to make it realistic, And of course, the ending was perfect. Just right for a autumn fantasy. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a wonderful story that made me feel good after I finished reading it. You did a great job of describing the seasonal atmosphere both present and past and had just the right touch of anxiety to make it realistic, And of course, the ending was perfect. Just right for a autumn fantasy. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment from Janetsue
I am a romantic at heart and enjoyed reading this story very much. The autumn of a personal life does not have to be colorless. The beauty of a restored relationship is something to dream about...and it is something that really can come true.
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I am a romantic at heart and enjoyed reading this story very much. The autumn of a personal life does not have to be colorless. The beauty of a restored relationship is something to dream about...and it is something that really can come true.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your kind words
Comment from estory
Nice colorful details in the writing made this scene, a very dream like surreal scene, come alive. I think you wove the autumn theme in here very well, and it lends this sense of the ephemeral nature of life, the transitory nature of it that pressures us to the make the most of our time in the sun. So nice job within the parameters of the contest. estory
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Nice colorful details in the writing made this scene, a very dream like surreal scene, come alive. I think you wove the autumn theme in here very well, and it lends this sense of the ephemeral nature of life, the transitory nature of it that pressures us to the make the most of our time in the sun. So nice job within the parameters of the contest. estory
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I loved this writing prompt entry. I wish I had a six left. This entry is six worthy and I hope and pray you received many. Thank you for sharing this with us. I really enjoyed reading. I am a sucker for romance and this entry was filled with it.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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I loved this writing prompt entry. I wish I had a six left. This entry is six worthy and I hope and pray you received many. Thank you for sharing this with us. I really enjoyed reading. I am a sucker for romance and this entry was filled with it.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
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Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
A very interesting response to this Autumn challenge. I like that time has gone by and these two are willing to try again - even if it's in her mind's eye. I like that they have both changed and not all for the better. (That's much more realistic.) *smile* And I like that the outside stuff doesn't matter in the end - their relationship was built - and still stands on what they have in their hearts. Nice. Good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
A very interesting response to this Autumn challenge. I like that time has gone by and these two are willing to try again - even if it's in her mind's eye. I like that they have both changed and not all for the better. (That's much more realistic.) *smile* And I like that the outside stuff doesn't matter in the end - their relationship was built - and still stands on what they have in their hearts. Nice. Good luck!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
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Comment from RodG
I really like how you SET THE SCENE in this "tunnel" of leaves and berries. We understand right from the start the narrator's anxiety of seeing her old boyfriend again after so many years. She's changed and so has he she discovers. Still, a happy ending. Rod
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I really like how you SET THE SCENE in this "tunnel" of leaves and berries. We understand right from the start the narrator's anxiety of seeing her old boyfriend again after so many years. She's changed and so has he she discovers. Still, a happy ending. Rod
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
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Comment from papa55mike
Now that's what I call a reunion! Please check this line: the fall breeze.the blue jeans, you need a space after the period. What a wonderfully written story.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Now that's what I call a reunion! Please check this line: the fall breeze.the blue jeans, you need a space after the period. What a wonderfully written story.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Thanks. I fixed it.
