Football - A Novel
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Comment from BethShelby
Now, I'm concerned about Jordon. This was another worry Katherine didn't need. I liked what Gabriel did by putting on that dance and I'm glad you included the vidio. I don't remember ever seeing that dance but I did watch American Bandstand back then. I always look forward to reading the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Now, I'm concerned about Jordon. This was another worry Katherine didn't need. I liked what Gabriel did by putting on that dance and I'm glad you included the vidio. I don't remember ever seeing that dance but I did watch American Bandstand back then. I always look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This chapter has a bit of a twist, Barbara. I like the image of the boys taking the girls for a "stroll". The chapter ends on a sad note though. I hope Jordan isn't too badly injured. Good writing.
One thing: I think you meant this to be all one sentence?
"Now, as you heard in Wednesday's morning announcements(,) (my)My linemen were..."
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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This chapter has a bit of a twist, Barbara. I like the image of the boys taking the girls for a "stroll". The chapter ends on a sad note though. I hope Jordan isn't too badly injured. Good writing.
One thing: I think you meant this to be all one sentence?
"Now, as you heard in Wednesday's morning announcements(,) (my)My linemen were..."
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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I did. Thank you for the catch. I am off to fix it, before I forget. That's one of the areas, I fixed as I posted.
Comment from Sanku
Thank you very much for the video. After the fun and dance came the fall. I hope he will be alright. This would be a severe test on their relationship. I am waiting for the next.
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for the video. After the fun and dance came the fall. I hope he will be alright. This would be a severe test on their relationship. I am waiting for the next.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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It is. Will this relationship last? Tune in next week. Thank you for the kind review.