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Help My Unbelief

Essence Poem

33 total reviews 
Comment from Patty Palmer
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You presented this very well. When there is some doubt, as we all have doubt at one time or another, it's our faith that doesn't let unbelief take you in its claws and keeps you. It helps you let that moment pass knowing that God is still there and He didn't leave you alone in your moment of doubt. And it's God's word that gives you that relief you need to hang on. Great going!
Patty

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Patty,

    Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments; they are greatly appreciated.

    I pray you are doing well and keeping safe.

    Hugs...Portia






Comment from Raul1
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A well crafted two line poem. It makes sense. It all makes sense of the key words faith and God. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing. Good luck!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Raul,

    Thanks again for another great review and very kind comments. I really appreciate your support.

    Blessings...Portia
reply by Raul1 on 01-Aug-2021
    You're welcome my friend!
Comment from Raul1
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A well crafted two line poem. It makes sense. It all makes sense of the key words faith and God. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing. Good luck!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Raul,

    Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes; they are greatly appreciated.

    Blessings...Portia
reply by Raul1 on 01-Aug-2021
    You're welcome my friend!
Comment from l.raven
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Hi Portia, I have always believed in God...
but as I started reading the bible...faith and my
belief became stronger...and there is nothing that could
happen to me in my life that would ever change that...

I love your poem my sweet friend...and picture...perfect...
very well written...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Hello Linda,

    I pray you are doing well.

    Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments; they are greatly appreciated.

    Lots of love and hugs...Portia
reply by l.raven on 02-Aug-2021
    your so welcome Portia...I pray you are doing well too...love and big hugs...xxoo
Comment from Gert sherwood
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pharp your essence poem Essence Poem
Help My Unbelief I agree with you, we need to have faith to get relief when you are in pain.
Take a look at your first line, and second both, needs an internal rhyme.
I could be wrong, I thought I should tell you.
Gert

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    Gert,

    Thanks so much for your review and kindness.

    This is my first try at this form; I thought the "word "your" in the first line and "more" in the second line were my internal rhymes.
    Ha! Ha! I am just confused. I thought I was going by the example given. I am sure I am missing something.

    Thanks so much for your kindness.

    Hugs...Portia
reply by Gert sherwood on 28-Jul-2021
    You are so welcome Portia
    I to got confused. The best to you in the contest
    Gert
Comment from mermaids
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You have created an excellent faith based poem that touches the reader. Your rhyming is smooth and adds to the strength of your words. I like your second line "God's word gives more relief". It is so true.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments; they are greatly appreciated.

    Blessings...Portia
Comment from tfawcus
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How true it is that people find strength in their belief in the word of God. Faith can offer great relief in times of uncertainty. It's always good to feel we have something stronger than ourselves to support us.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments; they are greatly appreciated.

    Blessings...Portia
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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I have a slight problem with this essence poem as I had understood that the cross rhymes should be at the same position on the two lines. This is not the case of your/more here. Maybe it's me being dense.

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Katherine,

    Thanks so much for your review and comments; they are greatly appreciated.

    Blessings...Portia
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Portia. The presentation is great-the color scheme sets off your words, the image is a great choice, and your end rhymes work. You give readers much to ponder.

I believe your are missing the internal rhyme required.
Maybe you could change the word 'gives' to 'for' to rhyme with your.

Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    Jan,

    Thanks for the great review and for letting me know I was missing the internal rhyme. I guess I am a bit confused, but would it work if I changed it to reflect the following:

    "Faith helps your unbelief
    God's word restores belief."

    Thanks for your kindness.

    Blessings...Portia
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 28-Jul-2021
    Your end rhyme in the original is great.
    You need a word in the first line
    then a word in the second line that rhymes with that word. (internal rhyme)
    😊
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    Jan,
    In my original first line, I used "your" as my internal rhyme and "more" in my second line. I always use rhyme zone for help when trying to find rhymes. Maybe I need a better rhyme.
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 28-Jul-2021
    rhymezone.com is great. Sorry I missed that. Maybe its my Texas drawl. Keep to the original.

    😊
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    That so much, my friend. I appreciate your kindness.

    Hugs
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    That so much, my friend. I appreciate your kindness.

    Hugs
Comment from Teri7
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Portia, This is a very good and well written from your heart two line poem you have penned. You used very good and so very true words, with great scripture to back it up. Thank you so much for sharing my friend. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Teri,

    I am sorry for the delay in responding.

    Thanks so much for the great review, six-star rating, and very kind comments. Your support and kindness are always appreciated.

    Hugs...Portia



    Hugs...Portia