Comment from Theodore McDowell

Exceptional

is the Matahari Terbenam the same as the golden hour or different? Nice brush stroke within a formal structure. Good luck in the contest. well done, Senyai

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Tim,

Not sure, if the golden hour refers to twilight, but just found this,

Twilights

?Twilights are the time intervals happening between night and day, before sunrise and after sunset. The sun is below the horizon, but its light is visible because it illuminates the upper layers of the atmosphere.

In more mathematical terms, we say that we are in twilight phase when the center of the sun is between -18° (18 degrees below the horizon) and 0° of elevation.?

Forgive my copy and paste info :-)

I will write a review on the Boxer, Billy Rivers except I thought your wife is Mariam, not Tracey ? so confused. Are you comparing your brain injury from your car wreck to being a boxer in your youth or were you actually a boxer with the boxing name of Billy Rivers? Or is this the beginning of a novel?

Thanks so much for the little sixer gift :-)

Always,
Senyai

reply by Theodore McDowell on 08-Jul-2021

This is the beginning of a fictional novel with a lose tie to autobiographical material as it progresses

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Ah, now I see. All the tie-ins make sense now. Thanks so much for the clarification on this. I will review first thing when I wake up and am more clear headed. :-)

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Exceptional

You're poem is really awesome! 5-7-5 poems are a challenge, but you manage to elicit nice, dreamy images of twilight in just a few words.
Excellent work!
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Cindy,

Thank you for your kind words and thoughts on my poem? your time is appreciated and of course the gift of six is always welcome! I am so very honored :-))

Always,
Senyai

reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 08-Jul-2021

You?re welcome, Senya. Good luck at the polls.

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Thank you again, Cindy!

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Beautiful for sure! The photo's pretty great too! (smile)--

Seriously. Softly melodic line, enough to summon a wish to visit Bali.

Tranquility emanates!

Karenina

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Karenina,

I?m honored by your lovely review and thoughts. I really love twilight, the close of day, the coming home to roost time of day.

I always enjoy your eloquent words :-) Thank you.

Take care,
Senyai

reply by karenina on 08-Jul-2021

So glad I am an official fan! Now I don't miss your fine writing!
--Karenina

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Thanks, Karenina!

reply by karenina on 08-Jul-2021

:-)

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Clever title--thanks for notes--most people just repeat words of the poem. This poem is elegant and vivid. Sugg: left justify the middle line--a lune is preferably rendered as a crescent (moon).

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Elizabeth,

Oh, I really wasn?t aware a Lune poem should be written in the shape of a crescent moon.

My first Lune (if you can?t tell). Thanks for the info. I really appreciate your outstanding review and detailed assessment.

I will see if I can make the poem take a crescent shape :-) Thank you.

Take care,
Senyai

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 08-Jul-2021

I never wrote a lune--or any real poetry--someone told me that the crescent shape is a hallmark of the lune-- though it isn't a requirement.

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Oh I see, Elizabeth. Thank you much for the update :-)

Comment from Sharon Davis

Excellent

This Lune poem provides a powerful description of twilight.
The image captures the essence of the poem very effectively.

Nicely composed and presented.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Sharon,

Thank you for a lovely review and thoughts on my Lune poem. I truly appreciate your time to assess my work :-)

Take care,
Senyai

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I love those words: "twilight falls with grace". that moment each morning and evening when the cusp of change occurs in the light and dark, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Dolly,

I appreciate your super review and sweet words and thoughts. I just found out I?m supposed to write a Lune poem in the shape of a crescent ?

My first Lune, so I didn?t know.

Thanks again, Dolly.

Take care,
Senyai

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 08-Jul-2021

I am not an expert in this form x x x

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Me either, Dolly. It's my first Lune to write. I'm always grateful for your thoughts :-)

Senyai

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

The photo is stunning, and the Lune is beautiful with its soft and gentle words - a picture in words of serenity. I like the thought that both the dimension of time and that of space are touched by the twilight colours. Best wishes for your entry.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Wendy,

Thank you for such a wonderful review and eloquently stated thoughts. My first Lune and I just found out, I am supposed to write it in a crescent moon shape. Even if it isn?t about the moon?

I appreciate your time to read and comment in my work and value your expertise :-)

Always,
Senyai

reply by Wendy G on 08-Jul-2021

Yes, because Lune (French) means moon, and so that is the shape, even if it is not about the moon. The short middle line gives it the shape if you align it to the left. For a first Lune, you did a wonderful job!!

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Ok, gotcha, Wendy.

I am having trouble seeing my words to edit, as they are written in white font on a black background. Lol,
I?ll wrestle with an edit tomorrow if I can?t get it right tonight. I appreciate your help. Thanks!

reply by Wendy G on 08-Jul-2021

Turn your font temporarily back to black, then you'll be able to see it again, then when you have adjusted your writing, highlight all of the Lune again, and turn it back to white. All the best.

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Yes, thanks Wendy ?

I think I did it now. You have been so much help. Thanks!
:-)

reply by Wendy G on 08-Jul-2021

reply by Wendy G on 08-Jul-2021

That?s good. Glad to be able to help.

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Thank you :-))

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Excellent

There are so many different sunsets, with majestic colouring and no two days the same. Your presentation with words is indeed lovely and presents the example of the different colours.

Ralf

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Ralf,

I am happy my poem spoke to you. Yes, every sunset is unique and the ensuing twilight differs from all the rest, in deep hues of blues, purples and scarlets.

Thank you. Your review was awesome!

Take care,
Senyai

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

A most remarkable entry into the Lune Contest. And thank you for the definition of Matahari Terbenam.

The photograph is just how a most serene sunset shows itself.

Wishing you all the best with the Committee. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Gloria,

I love your Desert Collage. It is beautiful.

Thank you much for your thoughts on my Lune poem. I am indebted to you for your kind words and well wishes :-)

Take care,
Senyai

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Hi Gloria,

I love your Desert Collage. It is beautiful.

Thank you much for your thoughts on my Lune poem. I am indebted to you for your kind words and well wishes :-)

Take care,
Senyai

Comment from zanya

Exceptional

Beautiful, spellbinding words to capture the essence of that precious moment of twilight radiant with exotic hues -- Lune not required to be centred so they resemble a Croissant or crescent moon?

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021

Hi Zanya,

What a super review with such kind words on my little Lune poem. Thank you, Zanya. Your words are better than my poem, lol :-). Thank you thank you for the gift of six stars! You made my day ❤️

I appreciate your time to read and assess my work. Take care.

Have a great week!
Senyai

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021

Hi Zanya,

What a super review with such kind words on my little Lune poem. Thank you, Zanya. Your words are better than my poem, lol :-). Thank you thank you for the gift of six stars! You made my day ❤️

I appreciate your time to read and assess my work. Take care.

Have a great week!
Senyai