Lady with a Briefcase
A mysterious woman...32 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Amada.
This is a very interesting and curious story about the lady with the briefcase. Your description of her opens all the questions like, who is she, where is she from, what is she doing, and why is she here?
You created a verbal puzzle and allow the readers to put the pieces together. You created a good mystery.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Hello Amada.
This is a very interesting and curious story about the lady with the briefcase. Your description of her opens all the questions like, who is she, where is she from, what is she doing, and why is she here?
You created a verbal puzzle and allow the readers to put the pieces together. You created a good mystery.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Thank you for supporting my work, Robert.
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You're welcome, Amada.
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting story - yet not a complete story. I felt the need for a bit more. It seemed to finish too soon to satisfy me, and I didn't know whether that was intentional, to leave the reader hanging, or simply because there really was nothing more to say.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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An interesting story - yet not a complete story. I felt the need for a bit more. It seemed to finish too soon to satisfy me, and I didn't know whether that was intentional, to leave the reader hanging, or simply because there really was nothing more to say.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my work, Wendy G.
Comment from palmart
Nice story, full of mystery and with an open end. Readers should do their part to define who she was and if all the questions were in the right direction. You brought even to James Bond to the story and continue in "active mode" your "internal-questions" machine-gun... Picture adds a direction to readers' imagination... Great Job!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Nice story, full of mystery and with an open end. Readers should do their part to define who she was and if all the questions were in the right direction. You brought even to James Bond to the story and continue in "active mode" your "internal-questions" machine-gun... Picture adds a direction to readers' imagination... Great Job!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, palmart.
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You`re welcome, Amada!
Comment from karenina
Interesting! Funny how our minds slip back to a particular person who intersected our life and think "I wonder what he or she was really about? Where might they be now?"
This woman has remained an unsolved puzzle for you...
So many times in our lives of happens that way!
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Interesting! Funny how our minds slip back to a particular person who intersected our life and think "I wonder what he or she was really about? Where might they be now?"
This woman has remained an unsolved puzzle for you...
So many times in our lives of happens that way!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Hi Karenina...Thank you so much.
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Hi! You are so welcome! Hope you are well!-- Karenina
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Lady with a Briefcase
by amada
Great entry for the Share Your Story contest. I like the mystery of the story and trying to figure out what she was up to. Excellent story.
gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Lady with a Briefcase
by amada
Great entry for the Share Your Story contest. I like the mystery of the story and trying to figure out what she was up to. Excellent story.
gypsy hugs
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Gypsy hugs...
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Lady with a Briefcase I just fished reading about you and I am curious, and wondering what was in your briefcase.
Tell Amada that Gert sherwood, enjoyed reading your short story.
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Hello Lady with a Briefcase I just fished reading about you and I am curious, and wondering what was in your briefcase.
Tell Amada that Gert sherwood, enjoyed reading your short story.
Gert
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Ha, ha...just love your comments, mystery lady is off for the night now...
Comment from BethShelby
This is a well-written story and it can be said it is a mystery. An unsolved because we will really never know if this lady had secrets or not. Since you entered it in the your story contest you probably should have called it non-fiction because what made it your story is you watched her and came up with fantasies of what she might be, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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This is a well-written story and it can be said it is a mystery. An unsolved because we will really never know if this lady had secrets or not. Since you entered it in the your story contest you probably should have called it non-fiction because what made it your story is you watched her and came up with fantasies of what she might be, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your great comments. Yes, it should be in the nonfiction category. I will correct it. Thaank you for reading my work.
Comment from Susan Newell
This is an interesting memory of a mysterious woman. Somehow, I think there must be more to the story. Did she never shower or change clothes? Was the living room off limits once she arrived? You've given us a great tease, but somehow I need more. This contest doesn't have a word limit, so no restrictions there. I can imagine her keeping the books for an organized crime syndicate, or maybe she wasn't a bookkeeper at all. Perhaps her briefcase was where she kept changes of clothing. I would love to see a fleshed-out version of this. Everything you've written was written well. The stars don't reflect the writing skill; they reflect only the incompleteness of the story. It needs more, even if you have to make it up. After all, I don't know if this is just fiction or a true experience.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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This is an interesting memory of a mysterious woman. Somehow, I think there must be more to the story. Did she never shower or change clothes? Was the living room off limits once she arrived? You've given us a great tease, but somehow I need more. This contest doesn't have a word limit, so no restrictions there. I can imagine her keeping the books for an organized crime syndicate, or maybe she wasn't a bookkeeper at all. Perhaps her briefcase was where she kept changes of clothing. I would love to see a fleshed-out version of this. Everything you've written was written well. The stars don't reflect the writing skill; they reflect only the incompleteness of the story. It needs more, even if you have to make it up. After all, I don't know if this is just fiction or a true experience.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your great comments.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is an intriguing story. It makes me want to know more about this woman. I like that you shared details about her, but also created an air of mystery about her. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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This is an intriguing story. It makes me want to know more about this woman. I like that you shared details about her, but also created an air of mystery about her. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Thank you Carol.
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You're welcome.
Comment from royowen
I guess some people can strike us this way. For some reason they remain fascinating to us, way beyond what is natural to hold an interest. Beautifully written my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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I guess some people can strike us this way. For some reason they remain fascinating to us, way beyond what is natural to hold an interest. Beautifully written my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Roy.
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Bless you