As Day Dawns
Faith poetry Amphibrach meter31 total reviews
Comment from damommy
We do think we need all the answers, when all we need is trusts in God. I was right along with you on your journey through the darkness to come out in the dawn. Things always look better in a new day.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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We do think we need all the answers, when all we need is trusts in God. I was right along with you on your journey through the darkness to come out in the dawn. Things always look better in a new day.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Your words are so true! Thank you for your lovely comments, Yvonne!!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
This is wonderfully written. Yes, the answer to all life's struggles lies in the words, "unless one comes as a small child, one cannot enter or see the kingdom of God" a rough paraphrase of what Jesus meant, just trust, though we don't understand, He has our number. A beautifully scribed poem Melissa, smooth, eloquent, with that feeling of lostness that we feel with understanding's lack, excellent job my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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This is wonderfully written. Yes, the answer to all life's struggles lies in the words, "unless one comes as a small child, one cannot enter or see the kingdom of God" a rough paraphrase of what Jesus meant, just trust, though we don't understand, He has our number. A beautifully scribed poem Melissa, smooth, eloquent, with that feeling of lostness that we feel with understanding's lack, excellent job my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Roy. Yes, your words are so true... the answers lie in the scriptures... Hugs!!
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is delightful, Melissa. What a refreshing change from all the so-called poems I read every day! The meter just moves along at a good pace and captures the story. Great Job, Dear. I love it and I wish I had saved a six. Good luck this should be a winner.(IMHO) Nancy:)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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This is delightful, Melissa. What a refreshing change from all the so-called poems I read every day! The meter just moves along at a good pace and captures the story. Great Job, Dear. I love it and I wish I had saved a six. Good luck this should be a winner.(IMHO) Nancy:)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hello sweet Nancy. Thank you for your lovely comments on this verse. Soooo glad to see your name in my box again. Hope you are feeling better!!!
Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is precisely why ignorance is bliss Melissa and your write reminds me that the more we learn the more unhappy we become and your poem remind me to stay in touch with nature and behold its beauty, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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This is precisely why ignorance is bliss Melissa and your write reminds me that the more we learn the more unhappy we become and your poem remind me to stay in touch with nature and behold its beauty, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much Dolly. So appreciate you!! Hey, I have a question... as I have been reviewing this morning, I have come across some regulars that have a 4 average on their poetry. I followed it back to a newbie that joined this morning. She has valid reviewing points, but it seems a 3 is her norm in reviewing work. I reviewed hers and she had six syllables in the first line of a 5 7 5. And I gave her a 5 with suggestions. Should I send her a message or just let her figure it out?
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She will no doubt learn the ropes for herself when everyone mutes her! Ha ha ha, I did check her out though, thank you for the heads up on this one, love Dolly x
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She will no doubt learn the ropes for herself when everyone mutes her! Ha ha ha, I did check her out though, thank you for the heads up on this one, love Dolly x
Comment from Susan Larson
I love this and these three lines are SO relatable for me: "find myself peering at shadows for clues." "Why must I insist that I have all the answers" "I'm one with the dawn as the daylight unfolds.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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I love this and these three lines are SO relatable for me: "find myself peering at shadows for clues." "Why must I insist that I have all the answers" "I'm one with the dawn as the daylight unfolds.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hello Susan. Thank you!! I am glad this poem resonates with you... it is a bit of myself in print... :)
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
Interesting use of the amphibrach metre in a fairly serious piece of poetry. The dactylic substitution in line 12 is well placed, acting as a 'heads up' for the message of the poem
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Interesting use of the amphibrach metre in a fairly serious piece of poetry. The dactylic substitution in line 12 is well placed, acting as a 'heads up' for the message of the poem
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you Jim. I like your comments that relate your views on the technical aspects of my poetry. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
I really enjoyed this poem. It sounds to me as though one would have been wrestling with something in their dreams. While searching for an answer they came upon the reality they must wait and trust in Him. This realization brings peace as they drift back into a peaceful restfulness and rise to the new dawn.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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I really enjoyed this poem. It sounds to me as though one would have been wrestling with something in their dreams. While searching for an answer they came upon the reality they must wait and trust in Him. This realization brings peace as they drift back into a peaceful restfulness and rise to the new dawn.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Kerry!! So glad you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
I'm apologize for lack of a six! Marvelous entry for the contest. I see your true self represented here and the walk of faith--which is to trust God once more.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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I'm apologize for lack of a six! Marvelous entry for the contest. I see your true self represented here and the walk of faith--which is to trust God once more.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hello Sweet Sal!!! Good morning and happy sunshiney day to you. Thanks for the upbeat encouragement for this piece. So helpful and uplifting!
Melissa
Comment from PENofFIRE
WOW!!! What a lovely picture you painted with your choice of words. It's like honey flowing over your thoughts. I am a lover of words and this poem was a feast to my soul. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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WOW!!! What a lovely picture you painted with your choice of words. It's like honey flowing over your thoughts. I am a lover of words and this poem was a feast to my soul. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hello PEN... hope you are having a lovely day. Thank you for your sweet response... as honey over my soul... so encouraging!!!
Melissa
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem for faith entry. Very nice flow and rhyme scheme. Your photo compliments your words well. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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This is a beautifully written poem for faith entry. Very nice flow and rhyme scheme. Your photo compliments your words well. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hi Joanne. So glad you liked it!!
Melissa