Simple DIY Guide to Hypochondria
How to Care For and Feed Your Hypochondriac38 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
i am wary of correcting writing style where US writers are concerned because there are considerable differences between US rules and the UK rules with which I am more familiar but the conversation paragraph with Roseana caught my eye because it was written as a single paragraph. I expected a layout more along these lines,
"Did you get your vaccination yet, Sweet?"
"Just got back."
"How you feeling?"
"Hungry. I only had a fig bar before I left."
"Well, you be careful."
"Why? How?"
"Watch for the aftereffects. The second one's supposed to be a doozie! You're not dizzy or anything?"
If this was deliberate for some reason I would love to know the thinking behind it. I could not find anything worthy of adverse comment. You obviously have a host of well-meaning friends who have your well-being at heart.
I am due my second jab towards the end of next month, so I read this with interest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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i am wary of correcting writing style where US writers are concerned because there are considerable differences between US rules and the UK rules with which I am more familiar but the conversation paragraph with Roseana caught my eye because it was written as a single paragraph. I expected a layout more along these lines,
"Did you get your vaccination yet, Sweet?"
"Just got back."
"How you feeling?"
"Hungry. I only had a fig bar before I left."
"Well, you be careful."
"Why? How?"
"Watch for the aftereffects. The second one's supposed to be a doozie! You're not dizzy or anything?"
If this was deliberate for some reason I would love to know the thinking behind it. I could not find anything worthy of adverse comment. You obviously have a host of well-meaning friends who have your well-being at heart.
I am due my second jab towards the end of next month, so I read this with interest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I was trying to be experimentally different with the "bunched dialogue." I've seen it used effectively before by, I believe, Virginia Woolf, and some of the Beat Generation writers. So it was deliberate. Thanks, Jim, for reading it and voicing your comment. Glad you are getting your 2nd one soon.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Thank you for sharing another creatively written, humorous message about the need for the Covid vaccine. I always enjoy your writing and look forward to your artistic use of simile and metaphor, as well as your understanding and descriptions of human nature, feelings, and emotion. I have had my first Pfizer vaccination and am looking forward to the second by the end of this month. Thanks for your encouraging message.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you for sharing another creatively written, humorous message about the need for the Covid vaccine. I always enjoy your writing and look forward to your artistic use of simile and metaphor, as well as your understanding and descriptions of human nature, feelings, and emotion. I have had my first Pfizer vaccination and am looking forward to the second by the end of this month. Thanks for your encouraging message.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I am so happy you are getting your second one and doing your part toward herd immunity. Your compliments make me smile, I guess because it makes me happy. Thank you so much.
Comment from muffinmama
I love your writing style! Very no-nonsense, direct, honest, and definitely not faux intellectual.
You're not a real hypochondriac; otherwise you'd have told your family about the choking rehearsal. You also would have complained about the insomnia and the stomach cramps, etc. LOL
I laughed at the texting conversation with your son; it reminded me of the ones I sometimes have with my daughters. How did we manage to reach old age without their advice when we were younger?
One tiny typo: "Now's not time to pick nits..." missing article after 'not'
Great read. Thanks!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I love your writing style! Very no-nonsense, direct, honest, and definitely not faux intellectual.
You're not a real hypochondriac; otherwise you'd have told your family about the choking rehearsal. You also would have complained about the insomnia and the stomach cramps, etc. LOL
I laughed at the texting conversation with your son; it reminded me of the ones I sometimes have with my daughters. How did we manage to reach old age without their advice when we were younger?
One tiny typo: "Now's not time to pick nits..." missing article after 'not'
Great read. Thanks!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Hey, Ryma, thanks for your usual kind words and lovely encouragement. Also for the missing article near the end. I fixed it, thank you.
And still you gave me a six! You're da bomb !
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What's a missing article when you have a story that is so worth reading! LOL
Comment from blondie560
I loved reading this. Your tongue in cheek descriptions all through your essay made me chuckle. You're sharp as a tack. Most of my immediate family have gotten both doses for various criteria and both Moderna and Pfizer have been used, and thankfully no one has had any side effects other than sore arms. I will be getting my first dose of the Pfizer one. Thanks for sharing your story!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I loved reading this. Your tongue in cheek descriptions all through your essay made me chuckle. You're sharp as a tack. Most of my immediate family have gotten both doses for various criteria and both Moderna and Pfizer have been used, and thankfully no one has had any side effects other than sore arms. I will be getting my first dose of the Pfizer one. Thanks for sharing your story!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I'm so happy you are getting your first dose. Soon your whole family will get to share a group hug. How lovely it's going to be. you are so thoughtful to award this a six star rating. I appreciate it soooo much.
Comment from Mastery
Hi Jay. LOL Loved this line: "But at three or four in the morning, these stories became as toothless as nursery Rhyme."
Ah yes, how I remember pulling guard duty in the Marines, especially out in the desert at Twenty-nine palms, California. It gets colder than a witches tit out there at night.
This entire essay is very well written and you kept it interesting so it flew by.
I agree with this part, Jay: " Did the pandemic act as a catalyst to bring to the surface a craziness that was already bubbling below."
Thanks for sharing this great write, my friend. BTW. Corporal of the guard wasn't too bad. LOL Bob
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Hi Jay. LOL Loved this line: "But at three or four in the morning, these stories became as toothless as nursery Rhyme."
Ah yes, how I remember pulling guard duty in the Marines, especially out in the desert at Twenty-nine palms, California. It gets colder than a witches tit out there at night.
This entire essay is very well written and you kept it interesting so it flew by.
I agree with this part, Jay: " Did the pandemic act as a catalyst to bring to the surface a craziness that was already bubbling below."
Thanks for sharing this great write, my friend. BTW. Corporal of the guard wasn't too bad. LOL Bob
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the blazing sixer, Bob, and for your kind words. I'm still reeling over your crime-scene description. Something to think about at 3:30 in the morning.
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Night night. LOL Bob
Comment from Judy Lawless
Your writing style is amazing, taking us along on your journey with in-depth descriptions. You've turned a relatively simple thing - a vaccination - into a well-told tale.
One little thing: "by secret agreement with the rest of the family has, I'm sure, has been assigned as the old man's watchdog." - "has" used too many times.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Your writing style is amazing, taking us along on your journey with in-depth descriptions. You've turned a relatively simple thing - a vaccination - into a well-told tale.
One little thing: "by secret agreement with the rest of the family has, I'm sure, has been assigned as the old man's watchdog." - "has" used too many times.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you, thank you, thank you for catching that vagrant "has". I didn't know where to most effectively place it, so I guess I decided to leave them in both positions. Seriously, thanks, Judy!
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You are welcome!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have had my first shot but can't have my second until the 31st. I am NOT looking forward to it, but have heard the worst side effects seem to be especially in younger people so this time it might be good to be old. LOL Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I have had my first shot but can't have my second until the 31st. I am NOT looking forward to it, but have heard the worst side effects seem to be especially in younger people so this time it might be good to be old. LOL Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Oh, Barbara, I will be livid if this post discourages anyone from getting a vaccination--especially the second! So please keep that appointment. FanStory needs us older writers.
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I am getting it but here in Texas they don't schedule the second appointment like they do in other states. As of right now, I have no clue where I am getting the shot from. I have 3 places, possible but they are out to the vaccine. They have 10 days to get a new shipment in.
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That's a shame! But please do keep pressing, my friend. Take care of yourself. Texas' premature opening up is going to bring about an unbelievable spike in infections. Become as much a hermit as you can until you get the second shot.
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I only go to work and no place else.
Comment from RGstar
Well said old friend, absolutely well said.
I wondered how your last work did, about the dog? That was just exceptional writing, of the best I have seen here. I hope it does not get lost among.
AS I read here, you can write anything, any day, any hour.
That is a complete writer.
Well done.
You are ranked high in my esteem, and my judgement.
My best.
Have a great Sunday.
RG
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Well said old friend, absolutely well said.
I wondered how your last work did, about the dog? That was just exceptional writing, of the best I have seen here. I hope it does not get lost among.
AS I read here, you can write anything, any day, any hour.
That is a complete writer.
Well done.
You are ranked high in my esteem, and my judgement.
My best.
Have a great Sunday.
RG
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Bless you, kind Sir! Yes, "Rudy" and his plight ranked number 2 for March, which was only outranked by "What the Hell's a Jay Squires" which was #1 in February. I'm stoked that you enjoyed it. This one looks like it's gonna be a marathon and I don't think I'll have much kick toward the finish. But it was written for a purpose. I hope if you haven't already, that you will get your vaccination/s when you qualify for it/them. Meanwhile, your support for my writing is so, so, so appreciated!
Comment from Leann DS
I love reading your stuff, with its humorous and self deprecating feel. So much truth to your writing, which is exactly what makes it so fun. Thank you for sharing this essay, and I'm glad you did not have any bad reactions to the vaccination. Hugs and blessings.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I love reading your stuff, with its humorous and self deprecating feel. So much truth to your writing, which is exactly what makes it so fun. Thank you for sharing this essay, and I'm glad you did not have any bad reactions to the vaccination. Hugs and blessings.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Your words mean so much to me, Leann. Self-deprecation can be a hollow victory if no one else sees it as such. I so appreciate you!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this was an interesting look into Jay Squires. A nice chance for you fans to peek into you mind and ride along with you. I look a this as more of a conversation with the readers. If is was just a story, I would say you could've trimmed off a few hundred words, but you wanted us to know you. Thank you.
Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Hmm, this was an interesting look into Jay Squires. A nice chance for you fans to peek into you mind and ride along with you. I look a this as more of a conversation with the readers. If is was just a story, I would say you could've trimmed off a few hundred words, but you wanted us to know you. Thank you.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Glad you enjoyed, Lance. My nemesis. I can always trim away a few hundred words. I leave them there so people can get up and refill their coffee cups, then come back to the real stuff. Not! Thank you friend for your candor.