Betrayal
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Sandra this chapter's descriptive narrative is top-notch. Your well-described scenes are very vivid with imagery and the introduction to Grant's estate is very eloquent. Tania should be able to luxuriate into these posh surroundings while healing. She does deserve this.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Sandra this chapter's descriptive narrative is top-notch. Your well-described scenes are very vivid with imagery and the introduction to Grant's estate is very eloquent. Tania should be able to luxuriate into these posh surroundings while healing. She does deserve this.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Ralf, for this wonderful review, and that golden sixth star! I'm so pleased you enjoyed my descriptions. I wish I could go somewhere like that. One can dream. Have a lovely week my friend, warm hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello sandramitchell
It looks I must start reading your novel. From what I read is so well explained and your chacters are well described. I loved the beautiful scenes of the surroundings of the villa. And of knowing that Tania is going to be a mother.
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Hello sandramitchell
It looks I must start reading your novel. From what I read is so well explained and your chacters are well described. I loved the beautiful scenes of the surroundings of the villa. And of knowing that Tania is going to be a mother.
Gert
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Aw, Gert, thank you so very much for this lovely review, and the lovely sixth star. You have made my day. Thank you, my friend. Warm hugs! Sandra xxx
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You are welcome Sandra
Comment from RGstar
I wanted to come and support here Sandra. Like I said, I just wished I had been with this from the beginning. Because of the genre or thread, not action packed, which is easier to judge single chapters. Having said that, Well under control...good use of the periphery, good dialogues.
Well done.
I hope to be from the beginning with your new work.
I enjoyed the read, despite not knowing much...a good sign.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I wanted to come and support here Sandra. Like I said, I just wished I had been with this from the beginning. Because of the genre or thread, not action packed, which is easier to judge single chapters. Having said that, Well under control...good use of the periphery, good dialogues.
Well done.
I hope to be from the beginning with your new work.
I enjoyed the read, despite not knowing much...a good sign.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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That is so nice of you, RG, it's not easy coming in at this point, but the action is over for a while. Now it's healing time, and getting to know each other. Your comments were most appreciated. I'm glad you enjoyed what you read in this part. Thank you, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Sandra, as usual. It was super to read this chapter without having to worry about the 'bad guys.' Your descriptions of Grant's home were awesome--of course with his money, he has only the best. I would be like Tania on the helicopter. The part about Grant's dogs was well thought out--you know much about guard dogs' behavior.
May I suggest ~
I would keep all of the descriptions of the characters in the same form. (You referred to Black/White/Mexican etc.)
Tania Russell - [Anglo] etc . . .
Monica Fox - [African-American]
Grant Blake - [Anglo]
Colin Harding -[Anglo}
Lorna Main - {Anglo]
Marilyn Harding - {Anglo]
Jeff (Jefferson) Horner -{African-British (not sure about this)]
Reg Fielding -{Anglo}
Carl Young - [Anglo]
Shadow - [African-British (see note on Jeff]
Peter Shore - [Anglo???]
Latifah Shore - [Black-Caribbean ( not sure]
Isobella Sanchez - [Hispanic]
Of course add the other characteristics. I believe labeling Black/White is too limiting. What about Brown????
This is just my opinion.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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You did a great job, Sandra, as usual. It was super to read this chapter without having to worry about the 'bad guys.' Your descriptions of Grant's home were awesome--of course with his money, he has only the best. I would be like Tania on the helicopter. The part about Grant's dogs was well thought out--you know much about guard dogs' behavior.
May I suggest ~
I would keep all of the descriptions of the characters in the same form. (You referred to Black/White/Mexican etc.)
Tania Russell - [Anglo] etc . . .
Monica Fox - [African-American]
Grant Blake - [Anglo]
Colin Harding -[Anglo}
Lorna Main - {Anglo]
Marilyn Harding - {Anglo]
Jeff (Jefferson) Horner -{African-British (not sure about this)]
Reg Fielding -{Anglo}
Carl Young - [Anglo]
Shadow - [African-British (see note on Jeff]
Peter Shore - [Anglo???]
Latifah Shore - [Black-Caribbean ( not sure]
Isobella Sanchez - [Hispanic]
Of course add the other characteristics. I believe labeling Black/White is too limiting. What about Brown????
This is just my opinion.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so very much, Jan, for the lovely golden star! You made my week!! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. And thank you for the help with my character list. I've not done one as detailed as this before, but I was looking into publishers for this genre and most wanted a synopsis with a clear description of the characters. So, thank you for your excellent help in that, I truly appreciated it. And thank you, my friend, for your continued support. It really means a lot to me. Warm hugs! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ulla
So here you are, Sandra, A big six for a lovely chapter. This story is just taking on another angle and showing another side to Grant. A side, I really like. Now we'll see what will happen. A hug. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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So here you are, Sandra, A big six for a lovely chapter. This story is just taking on another angle and showing another side to Grant. A side, I really like. Now we'll see what will happen. A hug. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Bless your heart, Ulla, thank you so very much for that golden star. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part. Grant is showing is true side now, but he has to get rid of his past unhappiness. Tania is helping although she doesn't know that yet. Sending you a humongous hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, we are being politically correct now:) but is okay I guess this is the new norm. I quite enjoy this chapter and sign me up for that exotic trip I will let Colin gladly break my arm for such an exotic end. In other words I love it.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Wow, we are being politically correct now:) but is okay I guess this is the new norm. I quite enjoy this chapter and sign me up for that exotic trip I will let Colin gladly break my arm for such an exotic end. In other words I love it.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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These days we have to; sad isn't it. That is only for the character descriptions in the synopsis.
Thank you so very much, Iza, for that lovely gold star, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed the trip. I had to laugh when you said you'd gladly have Colin break your arm for that holiday! Lol, so would I! Warm hugs, my friend, have a lovely week. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from RetroStarfish
It's wonderful to feel the surprise and delight of Tania as she see's Grant's home and meets his friends. You've done a great job of capturing her delight - and (like a good friend/sister) thoughts of Monica.
My only caution is to avoid 'head hopping.' Most of the chapter is told through Tania's point of view, but a couple of times we see what Grant is thinking - and Tania couldn't know that.
Otherwise great.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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It's wonderful to feel the surprise and delight of Tania as she see's Grant's home and meets his friends. You've done a great job of capturing her delight - and (like a good friend/sister) thoughts of Monica.
My only caution is to avoid 'head hopping.' Most of the chapter is told through Tania's point of view, but a couple of times we see what Grant is thinking - and Tania couldn't know that.
Otherwise great.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, my friend, for this lovely review. I'll go back and sort that 'head hopping' part. I missed that. I'm really pleased you are enjoying my story. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from blondie560
Oh Sandra I loved the descriptions of your characters! I was wondering if I hadn't noticed them before, but then I read your author notes.
I loved this chapter so much. Your descriptions of the beach and sea and villa grounds makes me want to go! I like that Grant is so friendly, as if they're family, with Peter and his wife. And the dogs? Love!! My only question is: do the dogs always live there? That would mean that Grant doesn't get to see them too often. I'm so glad I read this this afternoon. My day started out with a leaky sink and then some water puddled on the floor by the fridge! My husband figured the water filter wasn't tight enough in the fridge (or at least that's what he hopes it is!) The sink is having a new faucet put in by my husband and son, so I get to sit here and chill. Have a lovely week. I can't wait to read more about Grant and Tania's Caribbean vacation! Sally
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Oh Sandra I loved the descriptions of your characters! I was wondering if I hadn't noticed them before, but then I read your author notes.
I loved this chapter so much. Your descriptions of the beach and sea and villa grounds makes me want to go! I like that Grant is so friendly, as if they're family, with Peter and his wife. And the dogs? Love!! My only question is: do the dogs always live there? That would mean that Grant doesn't get to see them too often. I'm so glad I read this this afternoon. My day started out with a leaky sink and then some water puddled on the floor by the fridge! My husband figured the water filter wasn't tight enough in the fridge (or at least that's what he hopes it is!) The sink is having a new faucet put in by my husband and son, so I get to sit here and chill. Have a lovely week. I can't wait to read more about Grant and Tania's Caribbean vacation! Sally
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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You make my day every time you review me. Thank you so much. I'm glad you like my character descriptions. I'm going to send this book, when it's ready, to a couple of publishers. I just want to see what they say. If they don't like it, I'll self-publish.
You gave me a nudge regarding the dogs, I'll have to introduce them earlier in the book. Then have them flown over before Grant goes. I'll work on that.
Sounds like your Sunday didn't start off too good. I hope your son and husband have it sorted now. It did give you a bit of leisure time though, didn't it?? Lol.
Thank you again, my friend, for another lovely review and all those lovely stars. I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this part. Sending you a warm hug. Have a lovely week. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from royowen
I wouldn't worry about the description of the skin colour, their environment would suggest, unless they were a redhead like myself, although it turned gold when I left England, although it's decidedly white now, but the island is a divine place to live, and a grand place to spend the loose change one has, well done Sandra, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I wouldn't worry about the description of the skin colour, their environment would suggest, unless they were a redhead like myself, although it turned gold when I left England, although it's decidedly white now, but the island is a divine place to live, and a grand place to spend the loose change one has, well done Sandra, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Oh, I bet you suffer in the sun! Your hair was like Joseph's coat of many colours with the red, gold and white! Lol. I bet you suited them all. Thank you so much, Roy, for your encouraging review. I really appreciated it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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I?ve got typical Aussie skin now, not the delicate one I left England with. Heh heh. I played cricket for 30 years too.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Excellent chapter, Sandra, and
very good character descriptions.
-It is nice to see Tania having
a positive experience and enjoying herself.
-I felt like I was on the helicopter and then
in the Bahamas with her.
-Good descriptive detail of the area
as she looks out the window.
-We have gone to Bermuda so it
brings back memories of all of the
beauty of the water, sand, and sun.
-I like the character of Peter and how
Grant had him act in an official
capacity when they got in the car.
-More excellent description of the villa,
esp. when Tania saw the suite she would
be staying in.
-You also did a good job with the dogs, and
I liked the part where they were like twins,
each with their head cocked to one side, but
it seems they and Tania will be good friends.
-It sounds like it will be a wonderful time
for both Grant and Tania; it will also be nice
for her to have some female companionship
since Monica can't be there.
-Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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-Excellent chapter, Sandra, and
very good character descriptions.
-It is nice to see Tania having
a positive experience and enjoying herself.
-I felt like I was on the helicopter and then
in the Bahamas with her.
-Good descriptive detail of the area
as she looks out the window.
-We have gone to Bermuda so it
brings back memories of all of the
beauty of the water, sand, and sun.
-I like the character of Peter and how
Grant had him act in an official
capacity when they got in the car.
-More excellent description of the villa,
esp. when Tania saw the suite she would
be staying in.
-You also did a good job with the dogs, and
I liked the part where they were like twins,
each with their head cocked to one side, but
it seems they and Tania will be good friends.
-It sounds like it will be a wonderful time
for both Grant and Tania; it will also be nice
for her to have some female companionship
since Monica can't be there.
-Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Wow, that is a brilliant review, Pam! Thank you so much! I brought back some memories of when we flew to Jamaica for our honeymoon, years ago, and the heat when we got off the plane. I was wearing a jumper and warm tousers that were fine for England, it was November! Lol. Honestly, the heat did hit me hard. I'm so glad you enjoyed this part, my friend. Thank you for all the stars and all the wonderful comments. Lots of love and warm hugs. :)) Sandra xx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. When we were in Bermuda, it was the year for record heat, and it was also very hot in Bermuda, but the water was great.
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I can imagine. We could do with a bit of that warm sunshine here. xx
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We are finally getting to 60 degrees and sunny days, but the nights are cold.