Driving Miss Vivian
Her new car and Vivian on full display31 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
I remember Vivian from a previous story, and commented that she reminded me of my beer-loving Aunt Helen. This story is humorous and tells a lot in a few words. I love the detail with which you described Eddie. (the long thin face and buck teeth) This is an excellent contest entry. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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I remember Vivian from a previous story, and commented that she reminded me of my beer-loving Aunt Helen. This story is humorous and tells a lot in a few words. I love the detail with which you described Eddie. (the long thin face and buck teeth) This is an excellent contest entry. Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your kind word and review.
It is appreciated.
Regards
Mary
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I like Vivian, I like her style. I don't know if you've seen a comedy about a lady whose name is Mrs Bucket, but she is another Vivian and pronounces her name, Mrs Buquet. So funny. This is a fun flash fiction with her and her 'Chaufa' Lol. Well done, this is a great little contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra x
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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I like Vivian, I like her style. I don't know if you've seen a comedy about a lady whose name is Mrs Bucket, but she is another Vivian and pronounces her name, Mrs Buquet. So funny. This is a fun flash fiction with her and her 'Chaufa' Lol. Well done, this is a great little contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra x
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Sandra.I appreciate your review.
This is my 3rd Vivian story and I am having fun with her.
Regards
Mary
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant slice of Vivian's life with a buck-toothed donkey-like sidekick. So vivid--I can see those (yellowed) donkey teeth and hear the braying. Charming piece.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Brilliant slice of Vivian's life with a buck-toothed donkey-like sidekick. So vivid--I can see those (yellowed) donkey teeth and hear the braying. Charming piece.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
It is very much appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from LisaMay
An amusing and detailed observation of the illusory pretense of social snobbishness - superficial vanity. The Cadillac is impressive, but its two occupants, while trying to put on a show of refinement, fall short of the standards.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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An amusing and detailed observation of the illusory pretense of social snobbishness - superficial vanity. The Cadillac is impressive, but its two occupants, while trying to put on a show of refinement, fall short of the standards.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your comments and review. It is much appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from DonandVicki
I can see this flash fiction, as humorous as it is, being expanded into a much bigger piece, maybe a novella. Kind of like the Beverly Hillbillies. An excellent start.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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I can see this flash fiction, as humorous as it is, being expanded into a much bigger piece, maybe a novella. Kind of like the Beverly Hillbillies. An excellent start.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your review and kind thoughts.
It is appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from muffinmama
This gentle poke at people who try too hard to be what they're not is very humorous. The descriptions are vivid, of the characters and of the car's interior, which totally destroys the image Vivian is trying to cultivate.
Just a couple of edits:
- waived should be waved
- Eddie was as she put it was her "chaufa." - remove the second 'was'; comma after the first 'was' and after 'it'
Very much enjoyed this funny glimpse into an all-too-common phenomenon.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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This gentle poke at people who try too hard to be what they're not is very humorous. The descriptions are vivid, of the characters and of the car's interior, which totally destroys the image Vivian is trying to cultivate.
Just a couple of edits:
- waived should be waved
- Eddie was as she put it was her "chaufa." - remove the second 'was'; comma after the first 'was' and after 'it'
Very much enjoyed this funny glimpse into an all-too-common phenomenon.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you first for you helping to make corrections.
Thank you for the review and kind comments, it is much appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from Raul1
This is an entertaining and interesting story. I have enjoyed reading it. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Thanks for sharing your story!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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This is an entertaining and interesting story. I have enjoyed reading it. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Thanks for sharing your story!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your kind words and review. It is appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
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You're welcome!
Comment from Mary Jane Y
It is not easy to write a story in 150 words. This tells a very down to earth story of 2 really good friends. I can see them as you speak 2 people that no-one would put to gather
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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It is not easy to write a story in 150 words. This tells a very down to earth story of 2 really good friends. I can see them as you speak 2 people that no-one would put to gather
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
It is appreciated.
Regards
Mary
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Thanks, for author notes, I was thinking Miss Vivian is the car:) Ha, ha, ha I wanna be rich, but that beer cooler cut the "champagne" she put it was her "chaufa."
Her imperial standing on display, however, did not extend to the interior of the car." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thanks, for author notes, I was thinking Miss Vivian is the car:) Ha, ha, ha I wanna be rich, but that beer cooler cut the "champagne" she put it was her "chaufa."
Her imperial standing on display, however, did not extend to the interior of the car." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the review. It is appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from prodigal
kind of a motley crew you have with Eddie and Vivian. The contrast of church clothes and mechanics garb is pretty stark and Vivian seems a bit unaware. Well done on your flash fiction
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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kind of a motley crew you have with Eddie and Vivian. The contrast of church clothes and mechanics garb is pretty stark and Vivian seems a bit unaware. Well done on your flash fiction
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
It is appreciated.
Regards,
Mary