Betrayal
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Vivid--I'm wincing at the sight of Tania's swollen face, and cringing at the sound to her sandpaper voice. Please let her have more water! Touching and intense interactions among the three, masterful incorporation of Grant's self-assessment. (hyphenate kick-boxing)
CONGRATS ON YOUR PRIZE SANDRA!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Vivid--I'm wincing at the sight of Tania's swollen face, and cringing at the sound to her sandpaper voice. Please let her have more water! Touching and intense interactions among the three, masterful incorporation of Grant's self-assessment. (hyphenate kick-boxing)
CONGRATS ON YOUR PRIZE SANDRA!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Liz, I'm so pleased you enjoyed the way I've written this part. And thanks a lot for the tip, I've made that correction now. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, that sweet wonderful Grant...
and you had second thoughts about him...that he might
be a bad guy...hmmmmmm...in on it with Colin...you have to be more trusting...
Grant stayed with her all the way...and even footed
for the bill...sigh...I have got to find a men like him...
but just in case...take good care of that muse of yours...
I may have to take him back...
I can't wait for this to be published my amazing friend...
you can't say enough about it...truly...another AWESOME chapter sweet girl...
should be a winner in Story of The Month....if there isn't any cheating going on...
like I said Sandra...this is a story you don't want it to stop...did you get the hint there???...it's like you get started reading...and before you know it...your looking at a list of Characters...like getting the wrong food when you go through...the drive through...not what your expecting...am I getting to you yet???...
always soooo very well written you....holds your readers attention beyond the chapter read...sending bunches of love to you...Linda xxoo
how is Ian????...say hi for me...xxoo love
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Hi Sandra, that sweet wonderful Grant...
and you had second thoughts about him...that he might
be a bad guy...hmmmmmm...in on it with Colin...you have to be more trusting...
Grant stayed with her all the way...and even footed
for the bill...sigh...I have got to find a men like him...
but just in case...take good care of that muse of yours...
I may have to take him back...
I can't wait for this to be published my amazing friend...
you can't say enough about it...truly...another AWESOME chapter sweet girl...
should be a winner in Story of The Month....if there isn't any cheating going on...
like I said Sandra...this is a story you don't want it to stop...did you get the hint there???...it's like you get started reading...and before you know it...your looking at a list of Characters...like getting the wrong food when you go through...the drive through...not what your expecting...am I getting to you yet???...
always soooo very well written you....holds your readers attention beyond the chapter read...sending bunches of love to you...Linda xxoo
how is Ian????...say hi for me...xxoo love
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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LOL, this muse is quite happy doing what he's doing, but he did say he'd pop over to have a holiday with you! :)) I wish I could!
Thank you so much for another pretty golden 6 stars and another of your wonderful reviews, that has me laughing my socks off! I needed that. My voice is cracking up, some think that is a good thing! lol.
I love that part about the drive through, that was soooo funny, lol.
As for the Story of the Month!!!!!!!! LOL! LOL! You have to be kidding me! I can only say that, it can't be that satisfying when you win by cheating.
Right, our Prime Minister is just starting to talk to let me know if I can go out to play! So I'm off to listen. Love you such a lot, my dear friend. Take care, keep safe and watch the slippery roads. :)) xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Sandra xxxx
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you can be the only one to say it....but you better believe...the ones asked to cheat...know it...and so do so many more...
it's a shame Sandra...when someone so talented thinks the only way he can win...is to cheat...shows he doesn't have much faith in his talent to write...and doesn't believe he can win without cheating...truth be told my amazing friend...the win looks great on paper...or net...but unless the cheater is completely knocked out cold...he knows in reality he lost...sigh...
so on to my holiday date with your muse...does that mean I should put out a couple of more bananas at dinner??...hmmmm...maybe banana cream pie
for desert...if you have any good banana recipes...let me know...
now...did that Prime Minister of yours...let his people go...????...OK!!! I'm off of here...I have to many things to do...later you...words spoken to the grandkids...love you sooooooooo big...higher than the sky... now picture me reaching to the sky...biggerest smiles back at you...Linda xxoo
Comment from aryr
That was a great continuation chapter, Sandra. It was wonderful that Tania was on the mend. After only two days she was awake enough to appreciate where she was, that Monica and Grant were there. However now she wanted to know where Colin was, she feared where he was. Grant was there to protect her and save her. Great job, I am truly enjoying it. Take care, hugs, smiles and blessings.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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That was a great continuation chapter, Sandra. It was wonderful that Tania was on the mend. After only two days she was awake enough to appreciate where she was, that Monica and Grant were there. However now she wanted to know where Colin was, she feared where he was. Grant was there to protect her and save her. Great job, I am truly enjoying it. Take care, hugs, smiles and blessings.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Alie, I do lovely your reviews, you always make me smile with how much you put into them. Sending you love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are so very welcome, Sandra, I really am enjoying the adventures of Grant and Tania. Smiles, hugs and blessings.
Comment from royowen
Poor girl, yes the physical injuries will heal, but the emotional trauma could be long lasting and much more long term damage, but do I smell romance in the offing, because Grant has a few issues of his own to deal with. Beautifully written again dear Sandra, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Poor girl, yes the physical injuries will heal, but the emotional trauma could be long lasting and much more long term damage, but do I smell romance in the offing, because Grant has a few issues of his own to deal with. Beautifully written again dear Sandra, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Grant and Tania are going to be a help to each other, even though they don't realise it. I do like a bit of love and romance! :)) Thank you so much my dear friend, for this lovely review. Sending my love and warm hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
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But the thing I like is you do it in the English way, not the American
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That is a lovely compliment, thank you. xxx
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You are a blessing Sandra
Comment from RetroStarfish
Great chapter. You've managed to keep the tension and the action alive even after the rescue. Well done. Also, the way Tania wakes up and remembers things a little at a time is very realistic. Well done.
One small thing. This sentence is a bit wonky:
"Due to her only relative, of sorts, was her foster-sister, the doctor had told him the full facts."
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Great chapter. You've managed to keep the tension and the action alive even after the rescue. Well done. Also, the way Tania wakes up and remembers things a little at a time is very realistic. Well done.
One small thing. This sentence is a bit wonky:
"Due to her only relative, of sorts, was her foster-sister, the doctor had told him the full facts."
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, my friend. I'm going to change that sentence completely now that you've pointed it out. Thanks for that! I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story. Sending you a warm hug. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Sandra:
That's the thing about this kind of trauma - that post-traumatic part creeps up on you when you absolutely expect it the least. Ironically, one would think it would only happen when you are tired or ill, but it can be triggered even when you are at the top of your game. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Sandra:
That's the thing about this kind of trauma - that post-traumatic part creeps up on you when you absolutely expect it the least. Ironically, one would think it would only happen when you are tired or ill, but it can be triggered even when you are at the top of your game. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, and yes, I agree with you about it creeping up on you. Tania has a lot to get through. Thanks my friend. Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with this chapter, Sandra. I'm so happy that Tania is going to be ok. I do believe Grant is falling in love with her. I believe he liked her from the start--the way she stood up to him that first day. I see more info forthcoming on Grant's mother. Hopefully, he will no let the past affect any relationship that may develop between himself and Tania. Your words are well-chosen, descriptive, and add to the story perfectly. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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You did a great job with this chapter, Sandra. I'm so happy that Tania is going to be ok. I do believe Grant is falling in love with her. I believe he liked her from the start--the way she stood up to him that first day. I see more info forthcoming on Grant's mother. Hopefully, he will no let the past affect any relationship that may develop between himself and Tania. Your words are well-chosen, descriptive, and add to the story perfectly. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Aw, thank you, Jan. Everyone can see a romance coming, and you might all be right! Lol. Both he and Tania have a lot of emotional baggage to sort out. We'll see how it goes. Thanks again, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from damommy
What an ordeal this poor girl has been through! It's amazing she's still alive. I hope they hang Colin. Of course, I've seen a romance in store for Tania and Grant from the very first. Refresh my memory, please. Exactly what did Grant's ex-wife and his mother do?
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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What an ordeal this poor girl has been through! It's amazing she's still alive. I hope they hang Colin. Of course, I've seen a romance in store for Tania and Grant from the very first. Refresh my memory, please. Exactly what did Grant's ex-wife and his mother do?
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so very much for your lovely review and the shiny sixth star, Yvonne. You will find out about the ex-wife shortly while Grant is still struggling to come to terms with his new-found feelings. His mother dumped him for another man when he was 18months old. That's when his grandfather became his legal guardian. Even though he tried to bring her back into his life after grandfather died, she didn't want to know. So, he's not happy with her.
Grant is now discovering feelings he hasn't had for a long time, and they are directed at Tania. What are her feelings, though?
Thank you again, my dear SATP, sending you lots of love and hugs. :)) Sandra xxxx
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Oh, yes, now I remember. Duh!
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LOL!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I am so happy to know she has been found and she will be okay. Colin would have killed her if she hadn't been so strong. It sounds as though Grant is in love with her and he will be sure she is well protected in the future but of course she will always fear just the thought of Colin. Well done, Sandra. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I am so happy to know she has been found and she will be okay. Colin would have killed her if she hadn't been so strong. It sounds as though Grant is in love with her and he will be sure she is well protected in the future but of course she will always fear just the thought of Colin. Well done, Sandra. Nancy:)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Nancy, for another of your fabulous reviews, and a humongous hug for the six stars! What with Grant's sudden realisation of his feelings for Tania, and Jeff's for Monica, it's going to get quite interesting soon! Sending you lots of love, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Sally Law
A other fine write, dear Sandra. I looks like,e healing may come in waves for Tatia. It's difficult to consider the consequences that may have come to her because of this awful beating. I certainly can understand Grant's anger. I hope he keeps his head about him.
One small typo:
"I tried Monica." Monica is misspelled. (It happens to all of us and easily fixable.) ;)
Sending you my best and blessings always,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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A other fine write, dear Sandra. I looks like,e healing may come in waves for Tatia. It's difficult to consider the consequences that may have come to her because of this awful beating. I certainly can understand Grant's anger. I hope he keeps his head about him.
One small typo:
"I tried Monica." Monica is misspelled. (It happens to all of us and easily fixable.) ;)
Sending you my best and blessings always,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Sal, for another really lovely review, and the golden sixth star! It's the mental side that will hamper Tania's recovery for a while. But perhaps Grant might be of some help!?! Thank you for picking up the typo, my friend! Warm hugs, :)) Sandra xxx