Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello Melissa!
I so love and appreciate the tone and message of your well-crafted Minute poem!
The phrase, "within my nest" resonates deeply with me: the springtime plaque I hang beside our front door is of a bird's nest with the inscription: "Welcome to Our Nest," and I had a floral business entitled, "The Robin's Nest!"
Just an observation, and I surely hope it is not offensive, but a Minute Poem must be written in strict iambic meter. I do not sense iambic meter in the following lines:
old troubador and
vague lullabies

Now I could be way off! So, please accept my apologies if I am!

Regardless, a lovely rendering!
Much enjoyed!

Take Care!
diane

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Hey sweet Diane. Thanks so much. I am glad you like the nest reference in this one. I am personally gaga over watercolor art that includes nests. I double checked the stresses in the two words and according to Merriam Webster.com. It reads like this:

trouˇ​baˇ​dour | ˈtrü-bə-ˌdȯr
lulˇ​laˇ​by | ˈlə-lə-ˌbī.

Stresses are marked on the first syllable. I appreciate you making a comment about it ~ keeping me straight for the contests. :). Hugs!

Melissa

reply by Mrs. KT on 03-Jan-2021

Oh, Melissa!
My comment was regarding:
"old" and "vague" when paired with
old troubador
vague lullabies.

In my fuzzy brain I scanthe line old troubador as this: long, long short long
and vague lullabies as: long, long, short, long.

So I was thinking that old and vague are both long.

Does that make sense?

I love this type of discussion, but please know that I mean no offense!

diane

reply by Mrs. KT on 03-Jan-2021

Oh, Melissa!
My comment was regarding:
"old" and "vague" when paired with
old troubador
vague lullabies.

In my fuzzy brain I scanthe line old troubador as this: long, long short long
and vague lullabies as: long, long, short, long.

So I was thinking that old and vague are both long.

Does that make sense?

I love this type of discussion, but please know that I mean no offense!

diane

reply by Mrs. KT on 03-Jan-2021

Oh, Melissa!
My comment was regarding:
"old" and "vague" when paired with
old troubador
vague lullabies.

In my fuzzy brain I scanthe line old troubador as this: long, long short long
and vague lullabies as: long, long, short, long.

So I was thinking that old and vague are both long.

Does that make sense?

I love this type of discussion, but please know that I mean no offense!

diane

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

No offense taken, Diane. I thought you were focusing on the three syllable words. I always thought that a stand alone word could be used as both short and long depending on its usage.

reply by Mrs. KT on 03-Jan-2021

Good Lord!
I must be incredibly nervous: Four replies of the same thing? Gremlins!
Yikes!

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Yessss, gremlins in our conversations... we must be doing something right to get their attention. Haha.. LOL

reply by Mrs. KT on 03-Jan-2021

Oh!
That's interesting, and now I've learned something new.
I recall writing/posting a Minute poem last year and Julia St. James
pointed out that two lines of mine needed to be edited as they were not in line with the strict iambic meter as the both first words we stand-alone stressed words.
I was thinking "soft lullabies," but I have no suggestions for "old troubador!" (And it is a wonderful image!)

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

I see what you are saying. Let me put my mind to it and see if I can come up with words with a soft vowel sound. Thank you!!!!!

reply by Mrs. KT on 03-Jan-2021

Oh, Melissa!
Wouldn't it be fun if you lived closer, and we could parce out discussions like this face to face? I would so enjoy that!
I'm heading upstairs to clean from our Christmas visitors! And as I do, I'll keep thinking about "old troubador!" :)

diane

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

This is a good entry for the Minute Contest.
You did a wonderful job and the picture was
just the right one.
Good luck. Nancy

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Thanks so much, Nancy, for your review and comments... so glad you liked it.

Melissa

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Melissa,

I adore that artwork - wow! But your poem was so peaceful and reflective and sweet - it made the perfect accompaniment. Thanks so much and good luck in the voting!

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Hi Robyn. Thanks for the kind review. I love the artwork too and think the whimsy kinda matches the mood. Wish I were an artist too! Hugs!

Melissa

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Certainly a very soothing lullaby in words. The moon is always comforting to see. Love the picture and the strange little creature on the bed. What is that? Good luck in the contest.

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Hi Yvonne. You remarked on the strange creatures and I do not have any idea what they could be. LOL. Thanks so much.

Melissa

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

Beautifully expressed, and I love the artwork. This reads like a lullaby. The effect of the moon in bringing sleep to the narrator with its silent song. The words are well chosen to bring a musical quality--troubadour, lullabies. The rhyme and flow are perfection. Best of luck in the contest with this delight. judi

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Thank you so much Judi. I really appreciate your comments and detailed review. Thanks so much.

Melissa

reply by judiverse on 03-Jan-2021

You're very welcome. judi

Comment from Mistydawn

Exceptional

This is a great poem. It's well-written your great word choice, descriptions paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. It puts them in a peaceful, serene mood. So much so that I've been yawning since I've read it.

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Hello Misty. I hope this poem didn?t cause to much sleepiness, or perhaps, you were able to take a nap... LOL. Thanks so very much, my friend.

Melissa

reply by Mistydawn on 03-Jan-2021

I took a nap, lol.

Comment from Edward Escobar

Excellent

I most certainly enjoyed the rhythm of your poem. Deep and spiritually elevating, enough to make one find instant peace from within, as I did after done reading. Again. much enjoyed. Thank you for sharing.

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much Edward!

Melissa

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a well written poem for the minute poem contest and it very nicely rhymes without the rhymes being forced. Happy New Year and God bless.
Patricia

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Thanks so much, sweet Patricia. :)

Melissa

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

Love this beautiful poem about lullaby and.moon. You, instead of seeing the moon, hear it and it puts you to sleep. I really think you will win in this contest

Wel done.

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Hello there Lisa. Thanks so very much!! Hugs!!

Melissa

Comment from Pantygynt

Exceptional

This is special, mainly for its use of metaphor. Now I know you have understood me when I said that, in poetry, metaphor is usually more powerful than simile. Of course I have not yet seen the competition but this has to be a hot tip for the prize.

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much, Jim. I am so delighted that you liked it and recognize my use of the lessons you have taught me. Much appreciated, my friend.

Melissa