Girl With The Gray Beret
A Fantasy of my Youth32 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
This is very romantic and nostalgic poem about yourself. Strong memories. It flows well, and is enjoyable to read. I wish you every success in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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This is very romantic and nostalgic poem about yourself. Strong memories. It flows well, and is enjoyable to read. I wish you every success in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you Wendy for your great review.
Comment from Reese Turner
Very interesting to me. I can see how you would find fascination. I am among many who never thought of Chile as an advanced place - until life and work took me there often. It is among the 4 countries of the world I would like to live in some if I won the lottery and could afford it.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Very interesting to me. I can see how you would find fascination. I am among many who never thought of Chile as an advanced place - until life and work took me there often. It is among the 4 countries of the world I would like to live in some if I won the lottery and could afford it.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your great lines to the place where I was born; a couple of decades ago. Contact me later on, may I am incognito...
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Oh, I love to talk Chile! One evening, in a bar in Antofagasta, I was talking to a Chilean gentleman about my first trip across the Atacama. I told him it was like watching the old moon landings on TV - it looked just like the moon's surface. He told me that was not surprising because NaSA tested the moon rover in the Atacama near Calama. I knew it! We never landed on the moon! They just filmed it in Chile!
One more: I sold industrial plastic used in mining. One night in my favorite Mexican restaurant in Texas, I told my friend the owner and his guys that the next day I was leaving for Chile. They said, "Do you really do business in Chile?" I replied, "Of course, much business. Why do you doubt it?" He said, "Because your Spanish is very bad." I replied, "Yo se los quatro palabras mas importante por el vendadore." He, "Que este?"
'LA QUINTA POR FAVOR". Hasta mas tarde. Buena suarte! (I was known as "El Gringo Viejo" y "bandito", but that is another story...
Comment from Ann Market
After reading the notes, your beautiful poem came to life. It was written flawlessly with lovely "language" that was descriptive and poetic. Wonderful poem!!!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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After reading the notes, your beautiful poem came to life. It was written flawlessly with lovely "language" that was descriptive and poetic. Wonderful poem!!!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Hi Ann, i thank you for your time and interest in the birth of this poem. It means a lot to me.
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written poem, there are very few who can turn a phrase well, although many will try, and occasionally succeed, but passion is written in the heart ofbthe poet. This is beautifully written, I appreciate who has evoked this great work, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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A beautifully written poem, there are very few who can turn a phrase well, although many will try, and occasionally succeed, but passion is written in the heart ofbthe poet. This is beautifully written, I appreciate who has evoked this great work, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you Roy for your touching comments.
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Well done
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very good. Your work grasps the feelings of unrequited love, the ending is haunting, "still image of what it was not". Technically sound, good story line, solid ending. Great job, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Very good. Your work grasps the feelings of unrequited love, the ending is haunting, "still image of what it was not". Technically sound, good story line, solid ending. Great job, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you for stopping by and reading my work.
Comment from nomi338
As someone, (Writers mostly), who observes people and are often inspired by what we see. What we see when we observe people and things is often transferred to paper in poetic form. This poem is a prime example of same.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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As someone, (Writers mostly), who observes people and are often inspired by what we see. What we see when we observe people and things is often transferred to paper in poetic form. This poem is a prime example of same.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviwing this poem, dear wroter/
Comment from Rx kingpen
Right on. Very romantic stylings you sketched here. Softly. The tone of this, the descriptions of memories, longing,mood, background, had that feeling Pablo. I had forgotten all about him.This was refreshing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Right on. Very romantic stylings you sketched here. Softly. The tone of this, the descriptions of memories, longing,mood, background, had that feeling Pablo. I had forgotten all about him.This was refreshing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you for stopping by and reading this poem about a time in my youth.
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem uses metaphors and imagery well. It seems to describe a memory of a girl you wished to be in love with you
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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This poem uses metaphors and imagery well. It seems to describe a memory of a girl you wished to be in love with you
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your very well felt comments, dragonpoet.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
I know of Pablo Neruda and some of his soul-reaching, very celebrated poetry...though not as much as you know.
This is a wonderul tribute to him, and in writing it the way you have, also a wonderful tribute to you.
The photo is amazing.
My favorite line in your poem is:
A gray beret fenced a curl of your hair but not your soul.
Really nice job and thank you for making me think of him again.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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I know of Pablo Neruda and some of his soul-reaching, very celebrated poetry...though not as much as you know.
This is a wonderul tribute to him, and in writing it the way you have, also a wonderful tribute to you.
The photo is amazing.
My favorite line in your poem is:
A gray beret fenced a curl of your hair but not your soul.
Really nice job and thank you for making me think of him again.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Hi Cynthia, I am thrilled that you are acquainted with this great poet. He was my inspiration, or "he is still my inspiration..." Thank you for your review.
Comment from greyson ernst
good job its really good soon you will be recognized i have no suggestions i hope i see righting from you soon. keep righting stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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good job its really good soon you will be recognized i have no suggestions i hope i see righting from you soon. keep righting stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you for stopping by and rfeading this poem.
