Grandma's Love
A true love33 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Lancellot,
What a wonderful piece of Flash Fiction this is!
Lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology.
Captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and TRANSPARENTLY depicting its theme with crystal-clear words.
A True Love - Marvelous story, moreover, Flawless!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
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Hello Lancellot,
What a wonderful piece of Flash Fiction this is!
Lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology.
Captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and TRANSPARENTLY depicting its theme with crystal-clear words.
A True Love - Marvelous story, moreover, Flawless!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
Comment from nomi338
They say that the truth hurts. Believe me the only one hurt by the truth is a liar. It is also said that the proof is in the pudding, the doing or the undoing. If I have to prove my love for you, then you had better be ready to prove your love for me. If you are unwilling to do that, then you had best keep looking for a fool, because we will not be the two and I will not the one.
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They say that the truth hurts. Believe me the only one hurt by the truth is a liar. It is also said that the proof is in the pudding, the doing or the undoing. If I have to prove my love for you, then you had better be ready to prove your love for me. If you are unwilling to do that, then you had best keep looking for a fool, because we will not be the two and I will not the one.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Grandma is a wise woman and everyone needs someone like that to protect us and teach us. You did a great job and who knows, maybe, someone reading this needed to read this.
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Grandma is a wise woman and everyone needs someone like that to protect us and teach us. You did a great job and who knows, maybe, someone reading this needed to read this.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
Comment from oliver818
Haha this is quite funny and unfortunately very true. Some guys aren't like that of course but a lot are. This is a very good entry for this flash fiction competition, thanks for sharing this and have a great day
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Haha this is quite funny and unfortunately very true. Some guys aren't like that of course but a lot are. This is a very good entry for this flash fiction competition, thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
Comment from F. William Lester
Very well written. The play on words was great and the last sentence was perfect. Good old Grandma Rose. Best listen to her. Thanks for the read. Well done. Stay well.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Very well written. The play on words was great and the last sentence was perfect. Good old Grandma Rose. Best listen to her. Thanks for the read. Well done. Stay well.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much.
You be well also.
Comment from estory
Larger issues loom behind the brief dialogue here, and I think you did a great job raising them in a short space. What's raised here are big issues in the relationships of men and women, and in this little story of the condoms, we discover this particular man is interested only in himself, to the disappointment of the girl. But the experienced old lady emerges as the role model. Nice realistic dialogue and for getting to the point in a tight space. estory
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Larger issues loom behind the brief dialogue here, and I think you did a great job raising them in a short space. What's raised here are big issues in the relationships of men and women, and in this little story of the condoms, we discover this particular man is interested only in himself, to the disappointment of the girl. But the experienced old lady emerges as the role model. Nice realistic dialogue and for getting to the point in a tight space. estory
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-fifty-word flash fiction story, Grandma's Love, has the proper word count and is well worded to emphasize what did happen and what did not happen.
"What's gotten into her?" We can bet it wasn't Tony.
Neat story, told well.
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This one-hundred-fifty-word flash fiction story, Grandma's Love, has the proper word count and is well worded to emphasize what did happen and what did not happen.
"What's gotten into her?" We can bet it wasn't Tony.
Neat story, told well.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
Comment from Dena Brenner
Great job conveying a beautiful, funny and relatable story with the limitations of flash fiction. Aren't these valuable lessons we wish all young people could learn from a doting but wise grandmother? I loved it.
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Great job conveying a beautiful, funny and relatable story with the limitations of flash fiction. Aren't these valuable lessons we wish all young people could learn from a doting but wise grandmother? I loved it.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
Comment from robyn corum
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Oh, wow. That's a sad commentary on that fellow, huh? Though I find it hard to believe a guy would turn down an opportunity regardless of the requirements ahead of time. Oh - I need to love you first?
'BUT DARLING, I love you soooo much. More than the skies and seas! Now - can we get to business?'
*smile* Yep, the cynic in me. This was fun - good luck!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Oh, wow. That's a sad commentary on that fellow, huh? Though I find it hard to believe a guy would turn down an opportunity regardless of the requirements ahead of time. Oh - I need to love you first?
'BUT DARLING, I love you soooo much. More than the skies and seas! Now - can we get to business?'
*smile* Yep, the cynic in me. This was fun - good luck!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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lol, Well, they were Extra thick condoms. So, I kind of understand him. :)
Thank you very much.
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Oh. Well, I'm clueless on such things. ha
Comment from teols2016
It's a good story, if a bit predictable. Still, an important lesson and your main character comes through a conflict triumpht. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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It's a good story, if a bit predictable. Still, an important lesson and your main character comes through a conflict triumpht. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020