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Comment from flylikeaneagle
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Chip: great awarenss of jumping from the famous bridge. We need to reach out and help others with love. You have a winner!!! Stay well.
flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Thank you for the generous rating and kind review!
Comment from Patty Palmer
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This is a pretty good poem. Not much with only six words to use but your picture enhances your poem deeply. One could just sit down and write an entire story from your poem and picture. Great job!
Patty

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Thank you, Patty.
reply by Patty Palmer on 14-Nov-2020
    You're very welcome.
Comment from QC Poet
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I guess that's why gravity keeps us grounded. Remember going across the SF bridge on the way back from Santa Rosa,California it's an odd feeling crossing at night. Thanks for Sharing this poem offering.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Four Seconds
by Chip Kuzborski

Hello, Chip,

A great entry for the 6 Word Poetry contest. You say a lot with just six words. Gravity is not a good friend as we get older... everything goes down. LoL I love the presentation. The bridge made me think of the people that commit suicide on a bridge.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Very true...thanks, Gypsy!
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
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I found your photo to be very interesting , it captured my attention from the first word to the last
it is such a beautiful bridge yet so many people take their life from it, why?
thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Thank you, Cookie.
reply by Miss Cookie Atkinson on 29-Nov-2020
    i have not answered sooner due to illness
    have a blessed day
    your very welcome ,sorry
    Have a blessed day
Comment from Neonewman
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Oh,Lord! Isn't this the truth lol. This is an awesome addition to this particular little six word writing prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
God bless
Steve

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Thanks, Steve.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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This is a great entry in the six word contest. You packed volumes in these lines and thank you for your author note. I didn't realize it only takes 4 seconds for a person jumping of the Golden Gate Bridge to reach the water. Unfathomable! I wonder if any human can survive that jump.

Beautiful presentation and artwork. I wish you luck in that contest, this should do very well.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Thank you, Muse.
Comment from closetpoetjester
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Wow, this packed a punch Chip! Four seconds is certainly not long for your life to flash before your eyes. I think you've shared something that leaves the reader pondering long after the words are read. Thoughtful, minimal but created a vivid picture that impacted the reader. Well done.
Cheers P

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Many thanks, P!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hello Chip, this is an excellent one line poem. These short forms are not easy but you have done a good job here. Great, appropriate picture. Well done and good luck - warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Thank you, Dorothy!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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It sounds like it is a long way down and I doubt anyone survives such a jump and your words are indeed filled with horror here. Six words of terror Chip, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Many thanks, Dolly! (sorry for the late response, I haven't been around here often as of late)