Evening Storm
A thunderstorm on the mountain15 total reviews
Comment from DeboraDyess
Well, damn, sis. YOu beat me in this one, too! A LITTLE sibling ribalry is fine, but COME ON! lol
Man, this is so beautiful. It gave me chills as I read. I don't now where you got your inspiration, but that's what you need to bottle and sell!
If I were the contest committee, you'd have it. Best I've read so far, including mine. lol
later,
Deb
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Well, damn, sis. YOu beat me in this one, too! A LITTLE sibling ribalry is fine, but COME ON! lol
Man, this is so beautiful. It gave me chills as I read. I don't now where you got your inspiration, but that's what you need to bottle and sell!
If I were the contest committee, you'd have it. Best I've read so far, including mine. lol
later,
Deb
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the read and review. I don't think it is
quite as good as you seem to think, but thank you all the same.
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "Dark clouds roll across the night sky
All the birds fly
Silence crumbles
Thunder rumbles
Eagles soar then head for their nests
on highest crests.
Safe in God's palm
waiting the calm.", because of the imagery you used I could envision all this in my mind!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Matthew 6:26
New International Version
26 Look at the birds of the air; they do not sow or reap or store away in barns, and yet your heavenly Father feeds them. Are you not much more valuable than they?
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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My favorite part was, "Dark clouds roll across the night sky
All the birds fly
Silence crumbles
Thunder rumbles
Eagles soar then head for their nests
on highest crests.
Safe in God's palm
waiting the calm.", because of the imagery you used I could envision all this in my mind!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Matthew 6:26
New International Version
26 Look at the birds of the air; they do not sow or reap or store away in barns, and yet your heavenly Father feeds them. Are you not much more valuable than they?
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review! And I'm glad I could paint the picture so clearly for you. Thank you for sharing the Bible verse with me this evening as well. I am struggling in my life right now, so maybe you were meant not only to read my work, but share the verse. Again - thank you.
Comment from oliver818
You used some very nice imagery in this poem, I enjoyed reading it. I particularly like the beginning and ending paragraphs, they are very poignant. I don't have any suggestions to make it better, it's very good as is. Thanks for sharing this
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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You used some very nice imagery in this poem, I enjoyed reading it. I particularly like the beginning and ending paragraphs, they are very poignant. I don't have any suggestions to make it better, it's very good as is. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your kind words and am glad you enjoyed it. Have a nice week.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow wonderful poem, I wish you the best in this contest, for sure you got a winner. I like how yo are transforming the angry storm into a beautiful - Rain slowing down
then rainbow crown.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Wow wonderful poem, I wish you the best in this contest, for sure you got a winner. I like how yo are transforming the angry storm into a beautiful - Rain slowing down
then rainbow crown.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Wow, Iza! Thank you for the 6 stars. Those 2 lines actually came to me before the middle stanza did and I built the piece to go with them. Again - THANK YOU so much!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
The rainbow crown earns your stars in itself as does silence crumbles thunder rumbles--this is elegant and lovely--fine rhyme--good luck in the contest. Cheers. LIZ
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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The rainbow crown earns your stars in itself as does silence crumbles thunder rumbles--this is elegant and lovely--fine rhyme--good luck in the contest. Cheers. LIZ
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem, Liz. Glad you enjoyed it.