Understudy
Chance of a Lifetime27 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is very well written and leaves your readers (at least me) unsure just what really happened, or didn't. I like it, because it's different, but I will have to ponder it some more. Addendum: I just read this again, and I understand it completely this time. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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This is very well written and leaves your readers (at least me) unsure just what really happened, or didn't. I like it, because it's different, but I will have to ponder it some more. Addendum: I just read this again, and I understand it completely this time. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Check the footnote for context. Let me know if you want me to explain. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Liz.
That's a well written, creative story. Len is a very unhappy guy that has a plan to make himself happy. Then there is that catch of the unintended consequences.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Hi Liz.
That's a well written, creative story. Len is a very unhappy guy that has a plan to make himself happy. Then there is that catch of the unintended consequences.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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What a nice ssssssurprise! Stop by anytime. Thanks for joining me in my walk on the dark side.
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You are welcome. I'll be back...
Comment from royowen
I like the dark thoughts going on in the mind of the murderer, and probably they have a good motive, in their mind, that it's perfectly justifiable...of course. I must admit, I couldn't actually kill, although when young, I did conceive some great conclusions to bullying sorts. Well done Liz, an excellent plot, and great descriptive imagery of a dying man. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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I like the dark thoughts going on in the mind of the murderer, and probably they have a good motive, in their mind, that it's perfectly justifiable...of course. I must admit, I couldn't actually kill, although when young, I did conceive some great conclusions to bullying sorts. Well done Liz, an excellent plot, and great descriptive imagery of a dying man. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Hello again! It was disturbing to find that I'd conjured such an evil character who so coldly committed this monstrous act. Fortunately, I was able to conjure a pair of cops to catch him. Cheers. LIZ
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That?s good Liz
Comment from Ric Myworld
Now we finally glimpse your devious side, regularly hidden amongst the whirling wheels and cogs of such an active brain. LOL. Your a trip! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Now we finally glimpse your devious side, regularly hidden amongst the whirling wheels and cogs of such an active brain. LOL. Your a trip! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Ric--What a delightful ssssssurprise! Thanks for joining me in my walk on the dark side.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Sometimes we are in this position when we wish the death of the main character that sits between us and the prixe: "The understudy. That's me, poor ol' Lenny-never-gets-a-chance. Consigned, for sixteen months, to a bit part. One line, six words: "Do you have anything to say?" After which I string the bastard up." Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Sometimes we are in this position when we wish the death of the main character that sits between us and the prixe: "The understudy. That's me, poor ol' Lenny-never-gets-a-chance. Consigned, for sixteen months, to a bit part. One line, six words: "Do you have anything to say?" After which I string the bastard up." Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Hello again! It was disturbing to find that I'd conjured such an evil character who so coldly committed this monstrous act. Fortunately, I was able to conjure a pair of cops to catch him. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Spitfire
Well done. A monologue should start with the situation at hand. We can empathize with the speaker as jealousy is familiar to all of us. Explanation of opportunity. Realization by the victim. Ironic ending as he won't get a chance to play the lead.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Well done. A monologue should start with the situation at hand. We can empathize with the speaker as jealousy is familiar to all of us. Explanation of opportunity. Realization by the victim. Ironic ending as he won't get a chance to play the lead.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Delighted to see you Shari. I am honored that you stopped by--and with a lovely ssssssurprise to boot! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from estory
This becomes all the more sinister told from the murderer's viewpoint. The narrative is just seething with animosity, you really created a monster, a jealous monster in this understudy who never gets a chance, watching the star get all the accolades from backstage. There's this powerful moment when he jerks the safety belt tight, and hauls up his victim and watches him writhing to death, the oblivious audience out in the theatre. estory
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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This becomes all the more sinister told from the murderer's viewpoint. The narrative is just seething with animosity, you really created a monster, a jealous monster in this understudy who never gets a chance, watching the star get all the accolades from backstage. There's this powerful moment when he jerks the safety belt tight, and hauls up his victim and watches him writhing to death, the oblivious audience out in the theatre. estory
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Hello again, and thanks for the delightful ssssssurprise! It was disturbing to find that I'd conjured such an evil character who so coldly committed this monstrous act. Fortunately, I was able to conjure a pair of cops to catch him. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from lyenochka
Yikes! I didn't know you did "horror" - maybe that's why I didn't review this back in June. You did great character study in this script. I don't think he got what he wanted - I don't know what theatre they have in prisons.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Yikes! I didn't know you did "horror" - maybe that's why I didn't review this back in June. You did great character study in this script. I don't think he got what he wanted - I don't know what theatre they have in prisons.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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I normally don't do horror--I took this challenge for the contest. Thanks for ferreting out one of the few you haven't read.
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It was easy to find. It was top in your profile!
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I know-- I'm jusr pleased that you bother to scroll, given that you've already read nearly all my repromotions!
Comment from kmoss
Oh Len, what a lovable psycho! Ha. I do not read a lot of scripts, but I came to your portfolio looking for something I read a few days ago, and this one popped up first. It's fascinating and scary!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Oh Len, what a lovable psycho! Ha. I do not read a lot of scripts, but I came to your portfolio looking for something I read a few days ago, and this one popped up first. It's fascinating and scary!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thanks again for your interest in my work! What was the one you read a few days ago? The ones most recently promoted (just expired) are THE WHITE STUFF, SPOUTINGS, and TAKING A STAND?--currently up for $$ are ROOKIE MISTAKE and MAKING MERRY
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It was ?When Harold Called.? Making Merry sounds interesting, will try to read more today!
Comment from Carmen Ducharme
HOLY SMOKES .OH MY GOSH , Wow what a story .How awful that someone could be so cold and EVIL !! Some times people are so selfish and self centered that they no longer have a care in the world other than themselves ! I Pray for Any one who has that disease !
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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HOLY SMOKES .OH MY GOSH , Wow what a story .How awful that someone could be so cold and EVIL !! Some times people are so selfish and self centered that they no longer have a care in the world other than themselves ! I Pray for Any one who has that disease !
Comment Written 14-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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Hello again, Carmen! Indeed, it was disturbing to find that I'd conjured such an evil character who so coldly committed this monstrous act. Fortunately, I was able to conjure a pair of cops to catch him. Cheers. LIZ
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Amen to Men and Woman in Uniform God Bless them !!!! And Keep them Safe !!!