Evening Stroll
The wonders of discovery on a evening walk47 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Evening Stroll", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to reading your next post.
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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"Evening Stroll", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to reading your next post.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
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Bless you dear friend~
JLR,
my friend,
you're more than welcome.
God bless, take care and keep smiling!
the Duchess
Comment from Patty Palmer
Such descriptive wording used, it made me feel the excitement of the landscape, feel the warmth of the wind, and comforted as the sun goes down. Great job!
Patty
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Such descriptive wording used, it made me feel the excitement of the landscape, feel the warmth of the wind, and comforted as the sun goes down. Great job!
Patty
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thank you so much!
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You're welcome!
Patty
Comment from Gloria ....
I've read a few of the Trimeric poems and this is a beauty. Romance for sure, delineated with such grace in the first stanzas alluding to the slender grace of maiden that arrives in the final stanza.
I very much liked how you segued into her arrival.
Another fine poem from your quill, J.
Gloria
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I've read a few of the Trimeric poems and this is a beauty. Romance for sure, delineated with such grace in the first stanzas alluding to the slender grace of maiden that arrives in the final stanza.
I very much liked how you segued into her arrival.
Another fine poem from your quill, J.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Gloria, your reply makes me smile, thank you.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Very nice! I like the form of this poem especially. I think you might want to use a capital letter at the start, the last golden rays ... The last
The rhyme is good! I think your punctuation could improve, but other than that, it is very good!
Drew
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Very nice! I like the form of this poem especially. I think you might want to use a capital letter at the start, the last golden rays ... The last
The rhyme is good! I think your punctuation could improve, but other than that, it is very good!
Drew
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Thanks Drew a work in progress
Comment from Louise Michelle
'squeezed my eyes for every last ray' - what a marvelous phrase. This is an interesting poetry form and I must say you did a top notch job. The entire presentation was pleasing and a joy to read. Hugs, Lou
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'squeezed my eyes for every last ray' - what a marvelous phrase. This is an interesting poetry form and I must say you did a top notch job. The entire presentation was pleasing and a joy to read. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Lou, thank you I like this line also!
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
Very interesting piece. I loved the image and presentation. You met the requirements of the Potlatch poetry very well. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. Blessings. ~Brenda
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Very interesting piece. I loved the image and presentation. You met the requirements of the Potlatch poetry very well. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. Blessings. ~Brenda
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Brenda, thank you, Be blest in all things.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Beautiful read! Very wonderful and lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading this. In the first line, you may want to change your first character into uppercase. My very best wishes!
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Beautiful read! Very wonderful and lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading this. In the first line, you may want to change your first character into uppercase. My very best wishes!
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Precious, it was intended as a stream of thought breaking into the passge.
Comment from victor 66
I find it most amazing that there are those that can go out for that evening walk and be so touched by nature that can't help but be assure of a higher power. The other side of the coin, no matter how magnificent nature is, people can be depressed, angered and hateful. Both were created but my question is, why? Best wishes.
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I find it most amazing that there are those that can go out for that evening walk and be so touched by nature that can't help but be assure of a higher power. The other side of the coin, no matter how magnificent nature is, people can be depressed, angered and hateful. Both were created but my question is, why? Best wishes.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Victor, people....we are all a bit fickle.
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True.
Comment from Bill Schott
This trimeric, An Evening Stroll, has the proper formatting and brings the reader along on a sensory walk through the mountain air and up to a glimmering vision within the flora. A tantalizing spectacle for the sojourner.
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This trimeric, An Evening Stroll, has the proper formatting and brings the reader along on a sensory walk through the mountain air and up to a glimmering vision within the flora. A tantalizing spectacle for the sojourner.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Smiling back!
Comment from Ogden
Was she real, or did you just imagine her?
Twilight time often distorts reality. In either case you surely were smitten. Love works in mysterious ways, doesn't it?
Ogden (Don)
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Was she real, or did you just imagine her?
Twilight time often distorts reality. In either case you surely were smitten. Love works in mysterious ways, doesn't it?
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 26-May-2020
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Don, my friend, smitten or not, at this age any thrill is invaluable.