The Naked Truth
Sometimes it's safer not to reveal too much.15 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed reading this poem. It's very clever and I love the way you connected everything together in such a short space. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
I enjoyed reading this poem. It's very clever and I love the way you connected everything together in such a short space. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you - I'm pleased my poem appealed to you.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I like the idea of a clothed mind, it brings out so many ideas as to what it could mean. The rest of your poem frames it as clothed being not so good in this instance, maybe they have the wrong clothes on. What should we clothe our minds in though...? kindness, love? I can imagine this being part of a few little poems about the subject using this metaphor
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
I like the idea of a clothed mind, it brings out so many ideas as to what it could mean. The rest of your poem frames it as clothed being not so good in this instance, maybe they have the wrong clothes on. What should we clothe our minds in though...? kindness, love? I can imagine this being part of a few little poems about the subject using this metaphor
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. I'm pleased my poem triggered some possibilities with you to think about.
'Clothed mind' is also a play on words for a closed mind, i.e. prejudice, so your idea of clothing a mind in kindness and love would counteract that nicely.
Comment from phill doran
I know who wrote this.
As soon as I read it I checked your portfolio - your style stands out. My, my. This is witty, and exact and in form "hang-ups" / "closet" / "clothed (closed) mind" - three puns in three lines.
Oh, and correctly punctuated.
A winner.
cheers
phill
*twice in one week - either you're getting better or I'm lowering my standards
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
I know who wrote this.
As soon as I read it I checked your portfolio - your style stands out. My, my. This is witty, and exact and in form "hang-ups" / "closet" / "clothed (closed) mind" - three puns in three lines.
Oh, and correctly punctuated.
A winner.
cheers
phill
*twice in one week - either you're getting better or I'm lowering my standards
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Aaah... so, you are on to me! I rather like thinking I have developed a recognisable style. The wordplay would give it away. You are not one to lower your standards, so I must be getting better. I appreciate your 6s very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a poignant write and we cannot take on another person's angst as only we can attend to our own attitude and defend ourselves against negativity, a poignant write, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 19-May-2020
This is a poignant write and we cannot take on another person's angst as only we can attend to our own attitude and defend ourselves against negativity, a poignant write, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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There's always those who want to being others down by being judgmental. Sensitive people suffer.
Comment from humpwhistle
Nice play on words, enhanced by your choice of image. Rather sad, though, that parts of people must remain in the closet just to placate others with 'clothed' minds.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 19-May-2020
Nice play on words, enhanced by your choice of image. Rather sad, though, that parts of people must remain in the closet just to placate others with 'clothed' minds.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thanks for your positive review.
There are always those who like to judge others; sensitive types won't stick their heads above the parapet.