Bees, Please!
The bees have a purpose to fulfill.21 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great poem showing us that they do not want to harm us if we will leave them alone. They have their work to do, and it is to our best interest to let them get on with it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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This is a great poem showing us that they do not want to harm us if we will leave them alone. They have their work to do, and it is to our best interest to let them get on with it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you Rebecca, I appreciate you review and comments.
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My pleasure.
Comment from smileycloud
a really good strong and powerful piece of poetry telling a story which is the message which must be heard as this kind of devastation does not seem to live in the hearts and minds of most people on a daily basis and your line/words about adding that to the list of fears seems to go over most peoples heads when we for the most part get all our priorities wrong and only be concerned about the things that are right in our face this is a good poem well done have a smiley day good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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a really good strong and powerful piece of poetry telling a story which is the message which must be heard as this kind of devastation does not seem to live in the hearts and minds of most people on a daily basis and your line/words about adding that to the list of fears seems to go over most peoples heads when we for the most part get all our priorities wrong and only be concerned about the things that are right in our face this is a good poem well done have a smiley day good luck in the contest
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Than you, Smiley, I appreciate the review and you excellent comments.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
It is amazing how much we rely upon the hardworking little bees to keep our gardens and our lives healthy. Nicely described in free verse, cheers
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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It is amazing how much we rely upon the hardworking little bees to keep our gardens and our lives healthy. Nicely described in free verse, cheers
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review and the commetns.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the bees that play a very important role in our echo system that ensure the pollination if food sources for animals and humans. Without bees our survival cannot be guaranteed.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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A very well-written poem about the bees that play a very important role in our echo system that ensure the pollination if food sources for animals and humans. Without bees our survival cannot be guaranteed.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your reivew. I appreciate you nice comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Bees, Please!
Hello my friend
I didn't know that without bees we would not survive. Your poem is an excellent entry for the The Bee writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Bees, Please!
Hello my friend
I didn't know that without bees we would not survive. Your poem is an excellent entry for the The Bee writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I didn't know that until recently either.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. You have certainly hit upon a topic I have considered for some time. The neighbor behind me has 2 hives in his yard. The sentiment of your poem is appreciated. They truly are essential to life on the planet.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Hello mystery writer. You have certainly hit upon a topic I have considered for some time. The neighbor behind me has 2 hives in his yard. The sentiment of your poem is appreciated. They truly are essential to life on the planet.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. I'm glad you appreciated what I wrote. I guess their extinction is just one of many thingsthat could do us in.
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
This is a good rhythmic informational poem, fun to read and with a good beat, with lots of flair. A wonderful close up picture says it all! Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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This is a good rhythmic informational poem, fun to read and with a good beat, with lots of flair. A wonderful close up picture says it all! Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank ;you so much for the review and comments. I'm glad you liked the picture because I photographed that bee and I was very proud of the fact he turned out so sharp.
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Well, He most certainly did! y/w giovanni
Comment from RodG
What a fine tribute to bees! It is both well-crafted and informative. I think it will appeal to all-aged readers since it describes so clearly WHY we need to be bees' stewards. However, I am not sure the last stanza is needed. Rod
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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What a fine tribute to bees! It is both well-crafted and informative. I think it will appeal to all-aged readers since it describes so clearly WHY we need to be bees' stewards. However, I am not sure the last stanza is needed. Rod
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you Rod. I do appreciate the comments and the review. The last one is a little off but the one before didn't feel like an ending. Maybe I'll delete it.
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Another option is compressing it into a couplet, emphasizing your theme.
Comment from Richard J
Sheer mind candy!
Your title, splendid picture choice, neat/balanced presentation, unique 9/7/9/7 count free-flowing lines, a-b-c-b rhyme-scheme, and envy-worthy syntax all serve to create a masterful poetic work of vivid imagery and interest that grips and holds onto even the most accomplished poetess' and poet's attention and imagination in such ways that sighs succeed virtually every line and verse ... ummm!
Such a beautiful, deeply caring message, too. : )
If this doesn't win, the judges need a brain transplant ... LOL!
Do I love it? Whatta ya think(?) ... wink* ~ Richard
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Sheer mind candy!
Your title, splendid picture choice, neat/balanced presentation, unique 9/7/9/7 count free-flowing lines, a-b-c-b rhyme-scheme, and envy-worthy syntax all serve to create a masterful poetic work of vivid imagery and interest that grips and holds onto even the most accomplished poetess' and poet's attention and imagination in such ways that sighs succeed virtually every line and verse ... ummm!
Such a beautiful, deeply caring message, too. : )
If this doesn't win, the judges need a brain transplant ... LOL!
Do I love it? Whatta ya think(?) ... wink* ~ Richard
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Wow! I'd like to engrave your comments on something to hang on my wall. Those fine words make my day and I really appreciate the six stars Thanks so much.
Such is the pleasure You have made, that I simply could not help myself! ~ RJ ; )
Comment from Bill Schott
This bee poem, Bees Please, has a nice rhyme and points out the value of bees to our existence here on Earth. They are a link in the chain we must preserve.
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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This bee poem, Bees Please, has a nice rhyme and points out the value of bees to our existence here on Earth. They are a link in the chain we must preserve.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you for you comments and for the review.
