Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely; lyrical, fresh and whimsical imagery: sneezes and tickles; rich in alliteration: nimble/nibble. Clever twist on the usual with wide AND narrow, as indeed describes a varied mountain path. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Lovely; lyrical, fresh and whimsical imagery: sneezes and tickles; rich in alliteration: nimble/nibble. Clever twist on the usual with wide AND narrow, as indeed describes a varied mountain path. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Liz, thank you very much!
Comment from lyenochka
I like your nicely rhyming couplets, JLR but this is not a monometric according to your notes. Each stanza is supposed to get longer by one line and monorhyme with a new rhyme each time. You start with a couplet, then write a tercet, then a quatrain etc.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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I like your nicely rhyming couplets, JLR but this is not a monometric according to your notes. Each stanza is supposed to get longer by one line and monorhyme with a new rhyme each time. You start with a couplet, then write a tercet, then a quatrain etc.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Oops, I certainly botched this one. I will work on this to correct this week, thank you for being so forthright with your honest comments.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, JLR.
-A well written poem that
paints a vivid picture of nature.
-Effective imagery, rhyme,
internal rhyme, and alliteration.
-You include many wonderful
animals, birds, and scenic wonders.
-My favorite is the eagle and the fawn.
-A very good concluding couplet, too.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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-Very nice image, JLR.
-A well written poem that
paints a vivid picture of nature.
-Effective imagery, rhyme,
internal rhyme, and alliteration.
-You include many wonderful
animals, birds, and scenic wonders.
-My favorite is the eagle and the fawn.
-A very good concluding couplet, too.
-Well done!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Pam, thank you, be well.
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You are welcome, and you do the same, JLR.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Jim. This is a very nicely composed poem in the appreciation of nature on a solitary walk. The monometric form as I understand it, though, requires starting off with two lines and each succeeding stanza adds one more line to the finish.
This does look like a fun form that I may try myself. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Hi Jim. This is a very nicely composed poem in the appreciation of nature on a solitary walk. The monometric form as I understand it, though, requires starting off with two lines and each succeeding stanza adds one more line to the finish.
This does look like a fun form that I may try myself. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Marilyn, thank you, I realize that I botched the intended meter so I will need to go back an refine this.
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Hi Jim. It's not the meter but the form. From what I understand it is adding one line to each stanza as the stanzas progress. It does look like a fun form. Marilyn
Comment from Reese Turner
I like it! I appreciate the solitude, as I find in morning golf. You nicely describe it from your point of view in nice rhyme and flow. Enjoyed it very much. Thanks
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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I like it! I appreciate the solitude, as I find in morning golf. You nicely describe it from your point of view in nice rhyme and flow. Enjoyed it very much. Thanks
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Reese, thanks it's not a perfect meter but then neither Mother Nature's rhythm are not always perfect :)
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a well written poem with a rhyme scheme that also works. You paint an engaging picture of nature's wonders and your personal experience of same.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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This is a well written poem with a rhyme scheme that also works. You paint an engaging picture of nature's wonders and your personal experience of same.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Susan, thank you! It's not a perfect metered poem, but then neither Mother Nature's rhythm are not always perfect :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Walking in Solitude
by JLR
Beautiful Monometric poem for the potlatch challenge. I like the imagery and simple presentation. The form is well done. Good job.
Gypsy ð???
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Walking in Solitude
by JLR
Beautiful Monometric poem for the potlatch challenge. I like the imagery and simple presentation. The form is well done. Good job.
Gypsy ð???
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Gypsy, thanks it's not a perfect meter but then neither Mother Nature's rhythm are not always perfect :)
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Now is an ideal time for solitary walks. I wish we were in or near the woods as you describe. This time is suffused with thought and reveries. I have a feeling this time is like "musical chairs" where the music plays on and suddenly stops.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Now is an ideal time for solitary walks. I wish we were in or near the woods as you describe. This time is suffused with thought and reveries. I have a feeling this time is like "musical chairs" where the music plays on and suddenly stops.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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I could not agree more fully, thank you, dear lady!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although this is not in strict meter, this write has a warm sentiment and an ambient glow about it, nature working its magic here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Although this is not in strict meter, this write has a warm sentiment and an ambient glow about it, nature working its magic here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Dolly, yes! Thanks! it's not a perfect meter but neither are Mother Nature's rhythm always perfect :)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello JLR,
I, too, take most of my inspiration from nature!
You have presented readers with keen visual imagery from your nature walk. Sacred, indeed.
One edit:
Blustery, billowing winds bend leaves
and shakes (shake) the very roots of trees.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Hello JLR,
I, too, take most of my inspiration from nature!
You have presented readers with keen visual imagery from your nature walk. Sacred, indeed.
One edit:
Blustery, billowing winds bend leaves
and shakes (shake) the very roots of trees.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Diane, I do very much appreciate your extra eyes on this club challenge, thank you!
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My pleasure!
diane
