Friends on the Lop-side
Go-to guy gets got good!22 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Thanks for reviving something I haven't read yet!
I love your one act, two character plays...you have such skill portraying two sides to every story.
Loved your wit throughout.
"I hit the bulls-eye and all surrounding circles at Target:"
Laughed out loud!
Not so funny is this Queen Linda. I think we've likely all known someone who thinks they are the center of the universe...
Dan got pulled into her orbit...er, black hole.
I felt real sympathy for Dan. His backstory hooked me. Nice job with that...
He didn't come off as bitter. He's a giver.
Sadly I believe he'd come running like a needy puppy if Linda called.
The walls may change colors.
She never will!
A six star write on my five star budget.
Bravo!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thanks for reviving something I haven't read yet!
I love your one act, two character plays...you have such skill portraying two sides to every story.
Loved your wit throughout.
"I hit the bulls-eye and all surrounding circles at Target:"
Laughed out loud!
Not so funny is this Queen Linda. I think we've likely all known someone who thinks they are the center of the universe...
Dan got pulled into her orbit...er, black hole.
I felt real sympathy for Dan. His backstory hooked me. Nice job with that...
He didn't come off as bitter. He's a giver.
Sadly I believe he'd come running like a needy puppy if Linda called.
The walls may change colors.
She never will!
A six star write on my five star budget.
Bravo!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Delighted that you caught this! The real-life Dan --based on Scott!-- didn't get a dime either; Linda remains an unrepentant user. Much worse was when she wormed her way into his house for "a few days" that turned out to be 2-plus months--she caused havoc.
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I wondered if this was based on Scott!
Comment from Jay Squires
Hey, Liz. How goes it?
I like the story, but the play format puzzles me. Why bother when only the ACT I and ACT II plus a few sentence description of the couch the narrator is sitting on in each act is the only thing that separates it from a chapter from a novel, or a short story?
The story itself was sumptuous, personal, and entertaining, like all your writing. I'm thinking of swinging over my latest writing, entitled, "The Cat", a too-long, think piece, to Medium. I'm just having trouble finding a picture for it. It's about a dead cat. Try finding that in Unsplash or pixabay!
Anyway, it's good reading you again here.
Jay
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Hey, Liz. How goes it?
I like the story, but the play format puzzles me. Why bother when only the ACT I and ACT II plus a few sentence description of the couch the narrator is sitting on in each act is the only thing that separates it from a chapter from a novel, or a short story?
The story itself was sumptuous, personal, and entertaining, like all your writing. I'm thinking of swinging over my latest writing, entitled, "The Cat", a too-long, think piece, to Medium. I'm just having trouble finding a picture for it. It's about a dead cat. Try finding that in Unsplash or pixabay!
Anyway, it's good reading you again here.
Jay
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Delighted that you caught this.
As to the play format--true--it can be more simply construed as a dual-POV story--my purpose in presenting it as a dual-monologue script is to create an opportunity for bare-bones staging for an acting class or an open mic event.
The real-life Dan --based on Scott!-- didn't get a dime either; Linda remains an unrepentant user. Much worse was when she wormed her way into his house for "a few days" that turned out to be 2-plus months--she caused havoc.
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Oh, Gawd! I remember Linda and her using ways--and Scott! Poor Scott!
Comment from Sanku
Oh God PoorDan .Got fooled by Linda.. She just wanted a free labourer and any other services free.. And Dan in His loneliness have all .I am sure Linda would call again Dan would go..Dans of the world are like that ..
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Oh God PoorDan .Got fooled by Linda.. She just wanted a free labourer and any other services free.. And Dan in His loneliness have all .I am sure Linda would call again Dan would go..Dans of the world are like that ..
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. The real-life Dan didn't get a dime either; Linda remains an unrepentant user. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from BethShelby
I'm pretty sure I worked with Linda or maybe her twin sister. I'll be mentioning her in a episode coming up. She used every man she me. This is a great story. I understand now what to look for when I get a message with nothing on it.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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I'm pretty sure I worked with Linda or maybe her twin sister. I'll be mentioning her in a episode coming up. She used every man she me. This is a great story. I understand now what to look for when I get a message with nothing on it.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thanks Beth--I look forward to swapping Linda stories! Evil twins toasting male marshmallows. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from lyenochka
Poor Dan. He sounds like he's allowed himself to be a doormat. Did he ever get paid for his labor? It's one thing if they were already friends and it was clear he was doing it as a friend. Seems like Linda is quite oblivious. Hope Dan speaks up!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Poor Dan. He sounds like he's allowed himself to be a doormat. Did he ever get paid for his labor? It's one thing if they were already friends and it was clear he was doing it as a friend. Seems like Linda is quite oblivious. Hope Dan speaks up!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. The real-life Dan didn't get a dime either; Linda remains an unrepentant user. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Spitfire
LOL Whipped Marshmallow-- that describes Dan who let himself be a doormat. Linda took advantage of his kind nature and was oblivious about his feelings toward her. At least, he got some money from the work. An interesting piece for discussion.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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LOL Whipped Marshmallow-- that describes Dan who let himself be a doormat. Linda took advantage of his kind nature and was oblivious about his feelings toward her. At least, he got some money from the work. An interesting piece for discussion.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thank Shari--Glad you got the joke! Alas, Dan didn't get a dime. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Ogden
You did an excellent character development in your depiction of handyman Dan as the classic chump, the perennial loser.
Not as successful is your rendering of Linda, the opportunistic sponger, whose distinctive speech pattern and vocabulary makes her imagery a carbon copy of Dan (except she might wear dresses). Dan - whoever his character represents - was outfoxed by his alter ego.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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You did an excellent character development in your depiction of handyman Dan as the classic chump, the perennial loser.
Not as successful is your rendering of Linda, the opportunistic sponger, whose distinctive speech pattern and vocabulary makes her imagery a carbon copy of Dan (except she might wear dresses). Dan - whoever his character represents - was outfoxed by his alter ego.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thanks Don for your thoughtful remarks--just to clarify by.... her distinctive...makes her a carbon copy--do you mean to say that I used the same speech pattern and vocabulary for both? I wasn't aware of that--I'll check it out. Cheers. LIZ (Perhaps they BOTH wear dresses!)
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I definitely did not picture Dan as a guy who wore dresses. And yes, you borrowed Dan's brain to think for Linda. She needs a voice of her own.
:o)
Don
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Ultimately you had to pick out a richer, creamier shade - whipped marshmallow, so you could not wait to give Dan a call; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Ultimately you had to pick out a richer, creamier shade - whipped marshmallow, so you could not wait to give Dan a call; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thanks--by the way: I conjured the paint shade Whipped Marshmallow as a dig at Dan for being a softie i.e. "whipped" by Linda. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Elizabeth, a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your story, this unfortunately happens too often to men and women. As the old saying goes, you lay down like a rug, you will get stepped on and it looks like Linda needs to wipe her feet again. Good job and have a good day.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Hello Elizabeth, a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your story, this unfortunately happens too often to men and women. As the old saying goes, you lay down like a rug, you will get stepped on and it looks like Linda needs to wipe her feet again. Good job and have a good day.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you! Looks like Linda needs to wipe her feet again--clever. Did you make that up! Alas, the real Linda is a frequent wiper. This tale doesn't tell the half of it! If you care for the grim details of her latest, check out my response to the prior review. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from rhymelord
Dear LIZ,
Great write, my dear. Reminds of a very old joke.
"A lady looking for some help found an an in the paper - Handyman - rates etc, phone number. She calls and he comes around. She points him at the sink and asks him to fix the faucet. "Can't do that he says"
"OK" says she, "fix the loose door hinge."
"No can do"
"But I thought you said you were a handy man"
"Well, I am", he replied, "I live just round the corner".
Yeah, I know. Pretty corny, but I do try.
Reg
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Dear LIZ,
Great write, my dear. Reminds of a very old joke.
"A lady looking for some help found an an in the paper - Handyman - rates etc, phone number. She calls and he comes around. She points him at the sink and asks him to fix the faucet. "Can't do that he says"
"OK" says she, "fix the loose door hinge."
"No can do"
"But I thought you said you were a handy man"
"Well, I am", he replied, "I live just round the corner".
Yeah, I know. Pretty corny, but I do try.
Reg
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Yes, this woman is a USER. This tale ain't got nothin' on what happened in real life. She moved out of state then came to visit and asked to stay in his guest house; she moved in and stayed for three months, used all his stuff, left the place a mess, lights on all night, and left without so much as a thank you. She came back the next spring while he was away and let herself in!