Drowning
Twenty Syllables18 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
Very nice piece that captures the essence of a deep, yet tender bond between two souls meant for each other. Rare and beautiful. Great entry for the contest.
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Very nice piece that captures the essence of a deep, yet tender bond between two souls meant for each other. Rare and beautiful. Great entry for the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you so very much June!! Really appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--your tribute is powerful and I hope its subject is exceedingly proud! I admired your rhymes in this sonnet and the matching, majestic mountain scene. Best wishes in the contest and enjoy the remains of Valentine's night- Joan
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Wow--your tribute is powerful and I hope its subject is exceedingly proud! I admired your rhymes in this sonnet and the matching, majestic mountain scene. Best wishes in the contest and enjoy the remains of Valentine's night- Joan
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Joan... thank you so much for these lovely and encouraging comments. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Very nice tribute to a very special someone.
Your poem was well written with well thought out thoughts and ended. In a double tribute.
Thanks for sharing.
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Very nice tribute to a very special someone.
Your poem was well written with well thought out thoughts and ended. In a double tribute.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you LMB!!
Melissa
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
How lovely to express such honest feeling and admiration for someone so special to you.
The imagery suggests he is your rock, your strength, your everything.
I especially like the power of the last two lines to convey such strong feelings.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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How lovely to express such honest feeling and admiration for someone so special to you.
The imagery suggests he is your rock, your strength, your everything.
I especially like the power of the last two lines to convey such strong feelings.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much Shirley!!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your sonnet is excellent in all respects. Your have used strong descriptive details to reveal his admirable character. Rhyming and metrical patterns are sustained throughout.
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Your sonnet is excellent in all respects. Your have used strong descriptive details to reveal his admirable character. Rhyming and metrical patterns are sustained throughout.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you Janice.
Melissa
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Nice example of a sonnet. I must admit I have not written poems with this rhyme scheme in the past, although I do enjoy reading them. I enjoyed yours as well, and found it refreshing that it was written from a woman's perspective about a man. Well done.
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Nice example of a sonnet. I must admit I have not written poems with this rhyme scheme in the past, although I do enjoy reading them. I enjoyed yours as well, and found it refreshing that it was written from a woman's perspective about a man. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a wonderful offering and so very unique: love that, instead of a declaration and such, you painted a heart-warming image with only those 15 syllables!! ;) Beautiful! Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
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Such a wonderful offering and so very unique: love that, instead of a declaration and such, you painted a heart-warming image with only those 15 syllables!! ;) Beautiful! Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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You are so right... I overlooked that... I will fix it.
Thanks so very much!!
Melissa
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Hey there, my lady!! I have updated my review-- have a wonderful weekend! ;)
Comment from lyenochka
This is a lovely Valentine's Day sonnet for your husband! I am sure he loved it!
But did you enter it in the wrong contest? Because I think this Valentine poem contest was for 20 syllables. Maybe you can switch it?
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This is a lovely Valentine's Day sonnet for your husband! I am sure he loved it!
But did you enter it in the wrong contest? Because I think this Valentine poem contest was for 20 syllables. Maybe you can switch it?
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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You are right Helen... thanks for pointing it out. I had overlooked it!!
Melissa