If I Could
My brother died suddenly (2005) changing our lives forever.30 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm so sorry for your loss. The poem itself is beautiful. You wrote with emotion and love and that shines through the whole poem! Your rhyme and rhythm is fine because that's the way your heart wrote it. A wonderful tribute to your brother. God bless you and your mom!
Patty
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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I'm so sorry for your loss. The poem itself is beautiful. You wrote with emotion and love and that shines through the whole poem! Your rhyme and rhythm is fine because that's the way your heart wrote it. A wonderful tribute to your brother. God bless you and your mom!
Patty
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Patty, for your excellent and thoughtful review. I deeply appreciate your compassion and understanding. Thank you so much, God bless you, too! - Mary Kay
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You're welcome, sweetie!
Patty
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This poem touched me deeply. I was very moved reading about your brother and his music. Your words sincerely convey your love for him and tells how much you miss having him in your life. It is more than a poem, it is a love story. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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This poem touched me deeply. I was very moved reading about your brother and his music. Your words sincerely convey your love for him and tells how much you miss having him in your life. It is more than a poem, it is a love story. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for your beautiful and very thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate what you wrote and how you considered my loss with such empathy. May God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from Barbaraj1
Mary, it doesn't matter if the rhyming and meter are a little off. You created a beautiful tribute to your brother. I lost my sister 4 years ago.
I think of her every day.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Mary, it doesn't matter if the rhyming and meter are a little off. You created a beautiful tribute to your brother. I lost my sister 4 years ago.
I think of her every day.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Thank you Barbara, for your lovely and kind review. I appreciate everything you wrote. I'm so sorry you lost your sister. These losses are very hard to bear. Hugs, Mary Kay
Comment from Minglement
O, my heart aces for you. I read your still raw emotion in the lines you penned, here. It is so difficult when someone so young dies. I lost my son in 2005 at the age of 32. You are in my thoughts and prayers, my friend. Hugs.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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O, my heart aces for you. I read your still raw emotion in the lines you penned, here. It is so difficult when someone so young dies. I lost my son in 2005 at the age of 32. You are in my thoughts and prayers, my friend. Hugs.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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I am so very sorry, Marcia! To lose a son at so young an age is hard to imagine. I didn't have any children, but I wish we had -- getting married so late in life made it nearly impossible. And my Mom lost her only son, when we lost John. So I have seen what that does to a mother.
I wrote the poem when my grief was very raw indeed, but it has been 15 years now. I still miss him and wish to have him back in our lives, but have come to a stage of acceptance. I am convinced that our minds literally form new pathways, to bring a significant relationship from the present, to the past, understanding that further communication is no longer an option. I have lovingly dusted off our memories and arranged them neatly on the shelves of my mind. Well not quite so neatly -- new ones come along once in awhile, which for me is delightful. I'm rambling on now... I love him so much and still miss him, and I know you miss your boy. Thank you for your understanding. God bless you!
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You are so right, my friend. My writes on my the loss of my son became more positive as time went by. We will always love and miss them. You are on FB? Would you mind if I friend you there. I feel a kinship and connection with you, even though I'm much older than you :)
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Yes, the longing always remains for the ones we have lost, but it does get easier.
I would love to be your friend on Facebook! I will send you a private message here. xoxo
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Yay - thank you, my friend :) Will I get a notification here? I've never used P M. here. I don't think I shared with you that we also share our middle name lol.
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I sent you the message through the "Contact" button on our main menu. Do you mean your middle name is "Kay"? I will check to see if you received the message I sent you here. You would just reply to it, like you would to any other type of notification on FanStory.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt rhyming poem about a brother who loves to play guitar and acting like a rockstar it is the kind of brother we all wish to have as part of our lives.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt rhyming poem about a brother who loves to play guitar and acting like a rockstar it is the kind of brother we all wish to have as part of our lives.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Sandra. Your review is so sensitive and lovely. Yes, he's the kind of brother most of us would want to have as part of our lives! He could be challenging to deal with sometimes, but I wouldn't hesitate one second if I could have him back, problems and all. Sometimes I think God knew he had struggled enough with the problems he faced, and that he was just tired. He didn't fail, but his body did. I think God just said, "That's enough, kid, you're coming Home." The rest of us just had to pick up the pieces, and it wasn't easy. But he left me with indelible memories I will treasure forever. I appreciate what you wrote, may God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I know people are always saying the meter is off or the rhymes are forced, and I usually follow this for certain pieces, but when one creates with feeling, the rules go out the door and that is perfectly okay to create a wonderful tribute you have done
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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I know people are always saying the meter is off or the rhymes are forced, and I usually follow this for certain pieces, but when one creates with feeling, the rules go out the door and that is perfectly okay to create a wonderful tribute you have done
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your lovely and thoughtful review, Barb. Yes, I wrote from my heart and any structure really came from there as well!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Mary Kay, this poem is so sad and I feel your sadness in your words. It is unbearable when a loved one dies before their time. Your poem is well written and tells John's story. The final touch that moved me very much was the thoughtful way you repeat the last line - a sure way to tug at the heartstrings. I lost my brother last April so your poem resonates with me. I never thought I could take anything as badly as I did - but like you and John, my brother and I were close. A beautifully written poem to your brother. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Hello Mary Kay, this poem is so sad and I feel your sadness in your words. It is unbearable when a loved one dies before their time. Your poem is well written and tells John's story. The final touch that moved me very much was the thoughtful way you repeat the last line - a sure way to tug at the heartstrings. I lost my brother last April so your poem resonates with me. I never thought I could take anything as badly as I did - but like you and John, my brother and I were close. A beautifully written poem to your brother. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Dorothy, for your beautiful, kind and compassionate review, and for the exceptional rating of six stars. I deeply appreciate it all. I am sorry you lost your own brother also -- so very painful. Yes, an untimely loss is very hard to bear. God bless you, sending hugs your way. - Mary Kay
Comment from Sally Law
What a resemblance. He has your sweet smile and countenance. I am so deeply sorry for your loss. I know just how you feel. A loss of a sibling is hard and life seems to take on a new dynamic. I'm glad I got to say goodbye to my brother and two stepbrothers.
Your brother left you many good memories and a musical legacy. Thank you for sharing John with all of us today. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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What a resemblance. He has your sweet smile and countenance. I am so deeply sorry for your loss. I know just how you feel. A loss of a sibling is hard and life seems to take on a new dynamic. I'm glad I got to say goodbye to my brother and two stepbrothers.
Your brother left you many good memories and a musical legacy. Thank you for sharing John with all of us today. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your sweet and thoughtful review, and also for your expression of sympathy, empathy and compassion. Yes, it was hard not to be able to say goodbye to John. I appreciate all the wonderful things you said about him -- including our resemblance! If I post another poem about him at some point, I may include a photo from our childhood -- we were very cute together. God bless you, Sally. xoxo - Mary Kay
Comment from jenintorre
Oh Mary my heart goes out to you. It makes me so angry that this has happened to you as I can't begin to imagine the pain you've had to bare. I enjoyed your poem although it has made me very sad. Blessings. Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Oh Mary my heart goes out to you. It makes me so angry that this has happened to you as I can't begin to imagine the pain you've had to bare. I enjoyed your poem although it has made me very sad. Blessings. Jen.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Jen. I am touched that my poem has inspired such empathy on your part, and I thank you for your kindness and your thoughtful review. God bless you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
My condolences on your loss, Mary. I know how it feels even many years later. You did your brother proud with this heart-felt poem. I enjoyed reading it although it was poignant. You gave readers a snapshot of his life and of yours and his bond with each other. Thanks for sharing such a personal poem. Take care. Respectfully, Jan.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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My condolences on your loss, Mary. I know how it feels even many years later. You did your brother proud with this heart-felt poem. I enjoyed reading it although it was poignant. You gave readers a snapshot of his life and of yours and his bond with each other. Thanks for sharing such a personal poem. Take care. Respectfully, Jan.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your beautiful review, Jan. I appreciate your sympathy and kindness. Although I have adjusted to his absence, I still feel it. He was larger than life, in our family. Thank you so much. With love, Mary Kay