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Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "St. Louis Chapter 20 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from bhogg
Necking! Haven't seen that in a story in quite awhile. Barbara--I always enjoy your posts. Professionally edited and written in a style that can't help but zip you reader through. Well done. Bill
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Necking! Haven't seen that in a story in quite awhile. Barbara--I always enjoy your posts. Professionally edited and written in a style that can't help but zip you reader through. Well done. Bill
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Mistydawn
A lot of times a detective's gut instinct is right. I'm just glad no one was hurt. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting start to finish. Your characters seem realistic. Although I haven't been keeping up with the storyline, it was really easy to jump in understand what's going on.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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A lot of times a detective's gut instinct is right. I'm just glad no one was hurt. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting start to finish. Your characters seem realistic. Although I haven't been keeping up with the storyline, it was really easy to jump in understand what's going on.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an excellent part/chapter. The story is clear and well told. The characters are nicely portrayed and appear to be staying true.
I will be looking back to previous chapters to see where this started.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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I think this is an excellent part/chapter. The story is clear and well told. The characters are nicely portrayed and appear to be staying true.
I will be looking back to previous chapters to see where this started.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
A great chapter. I do believe people can have premonitions that something bad will happen, the way Logan did. Then they find out that Bill's car has exploded. They find that Mac's house has been bugged, too. Even with police protection, it seems that she isn't safe, and now her godfather was targeted. I've even started to suspect Mitch. Maybe he and Parks are working together. Certainly the police haven't been very effective. Lots of excitement building. Things have to be getting to Mac, all the attempts on the lives of Mac and those close to her. judi
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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A great chapter. I do believe people can have premonitions that something bad will happen, the way Logan did. Then they find out that Bill's car has exploded. They find that Mac's house has been bugged, too. Even with police protection, it seems that she isn't safe, and now her godfather was targeted. I've even started to suspect Mitch. Maybe he and Parks are working together. Certainly the police haven't been very effective. Lots of excitement building. Things have to be getting to Mac, all the attempts on the lives of Mac and those close to her. judi
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're very welcome. Any reason I should suspect Mitch? judi
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
You do quite well making your story exciting to read, and wonder what is going to take place; like Bill's car exploded.
I'm still wondering how and when will they will know the security actually does work.
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Hello Barb
You do quite well making your story exciting to read, and wonder what is going to take place; like Bill's car exploded.
I'm still wondering how and when will they will know the security actually does work.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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A lot more will happen. Thank you for the kind review.
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Barb You are welcome
Gert
Comment from susand3022
Hi Barbara, I'm so glad to be back on the train, so to speak... What in the name of explosions everywhere! I thought for sure that it would take longer than that for them to come for those bugs... in the glove compartment were they? (I'm hoping they were in his pocket!) ;)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Hi Barbara, I'm so glad to be back on the train, so to speak... What in the name of explosions everywhere! I thought for sure that it would take longer than that for them to come for those bugs... in the glove compartment were they? (I'm hoping they were in his pocket!) ;)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Nope, they weren't. DARN!! Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
What a great dramatic climax. Good reading again. Only one possible spag I let go in the last chapter as well. In the Intro with end of last chapter, I saw this before but did not offer a suggestion for change...of a bu[d](g?) detector?
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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What a great dramatic climax. Good reading again. Only one possible spag I let go in the last chapter as well. In the Intro with end of last chapter, I saw this before but did not offer a suggestion for change...of a bu[d](g?) detector?
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. I need to check on that detector.
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow! This is turning into a great mystery. I thought I had it but I am not sure. Keep it rolling. These two are super. Thanks Barb for another good episode. of who shot cock Robin. LOL.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Wow! This is turning into a great mystery. I thought I had it but I am not sure. Keep it rolling. These two are super. Thanks Barb for another good episode. of who shot cock Robin. LOL.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this is well written. I like the way it flows and continues to balance dialogue with action. Only found one little letter in a word that was off here: "Can you get a hold of a bud detector?
I think you mean 'bug' and not 'bud.' Unless, of course, at least one of the bugs was hidden in flowers somewhere.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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I think this is well written. I like the way it flows and continues to balance dialogue with action. Only found one little letter in a word that was off here: "Can you get a hold of a bud detector?
I think you mean 'bug' and not 'bud.' Unless, of course, at least one of the bugs was hidden in flowers somewhere.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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I will make that correction. Thank you.
Comment from country ranch writer
Wonder why they bomber Bills car? Maybe they figured he knew something? Everyone is in constant danger. Good thing Logan is with McKenzie.
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Wonder why they bomber Bills car? Maybe they figured he knew something? Everyone is in constant danger. Good thing Logan is with McKenzie.
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Yes, it is. Thank you for the kind review.
