Donuts
free verse poem16 total reviews
Comment from Mimi Linny
This one made me want to visit the Donut Shop across the street! LOL! Love the very scrumptiously descriptive take on each and every donut! I'll take a dozen, please! Nicely done!
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This one made me want to visit the Donut Shop across the street! LOL! Love the very scrumptiously descriptive take on each and every donut! I'll take a dozen, please! Nicely done!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Mimi! You're a doll. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia
Have a great weekend :)
Comment from oliver818
I like this poem because it shows a very satisfying if not healthy attitude towards food and especially sweet things. It flows well and has great imagery. Thanks for sharing this
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I like this poem because it shows a very satisfying if not healthy attitude towards food and especially sweet things. It flows well and has great imagery. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Oliver! You're nice. Thank you
Have a great weekend :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great image, Alicia.
-I will have one of those!
-I like your poem, too.
-The imagery is vivid
and creates a good word
picture of all the choices
for a donut:
"A treasure of tasty flavors
to tempt me."
-Good description of
all the flavors.
-I like the ending, too!
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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-Great image, Alicia.
-I will have one of those!
-I like your poem, too.
-The imagery is vivid
and creates a good word
picture of all the choices
for a donut:
"A treasure of tasty flavors
to tempt me."
-Good description of
all the flavors.
-I like the ending, too!
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Pam! You're very kind. Thank you
Have a great weekend :)
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You are very welcome, Alicia. You have a great weekend, too!
Comment from __Lou__
This is a fun poem, easy to read and very rich in imagery. I question why you use alliteration in the third line but no other line, and why you rhyme the last two lines but not any other line (I can't tell if this was intentional or not). Also, squirt? Did you mean skirt? Squirt as is "I will squirt you with water" skirt as in "the skirt of a table" (skirting) or "a pink skirt". Not sure what your intention was here but either way I would suggest changing it to skirt. If it is a play on words then I might suggest it doesn't work. Other than those small things, I think this poem is very thoughtful and fun. Again, the imagery is very rich, I can picture them all so clearly (even though I don't eat doughnuts). Good job!
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This is a fun poem, easy to read and very rich in imagery. I question why you use alliteration in the third line but no other line, and why you rhyme the last two lines but not any other line (I can't tell if this was intentional or not). Also, squirt? Did you mean skirt? Squirt as is "I will squirt you with water" skirt as in "the skirt of a table" (skirting) or "a pink skirt". Not sure what your intention was here but either way I would suggest changing it to skirt. If it is a play on words then I might suggest it doesn't work. Other than those small things, I think this poem is very thoughtful and fun. Again, the imagery is very rich, I can picture them all so clearly (even though I don't eat doughnuts). Good job!
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Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Bite into a jelly donut and it squirts. It's a messy donut, but fun. I wrote free verse, which is anything that comes to mind just blurted into a poem. So it's like unconscious writing.
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Thank you. Have a great weekend :)
Comment from tfawcus
A tasty little poem, full of tantalising treats. As Oscar Wilde famously said, "I can resist everything but temptation". It rather looks as if the same goes for you!
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A tasty little poem, full of tantalising treats. As Oscar Wilde famously said, "I can resist everything but temptation". It rather looks as if the same goes for you!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Tony! I went Dunkin Donuts for breakfast and had eggs. Then, I went grocery shopping and saw donuts, which I bought. Thought I should write about them. Wish you were here to share. Thank you. Have a great weekend :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your poem has my mouth watering at the thought of doughnuts and I never allow myself to eat one because they have no nutritional value whatsoever! But they are delicious! I used to make them when my family were young. You have a variety of brightly coloured donuts here, a delicious presentation Alicia! Love Dolly x
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Your poem has my mouth watering at the thought of doughnuts and I never allow myself to eat one because they have no nutritional value whatsoever! But they are delicious! I used to make them when my family were young. You have a variety of brightly coloured donuts here, a delicious presentation Alicia! Love Dolly x
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Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Dolly! You're a very nice homemaker. Thank you. Have a great weekend :)
