Moving Moments
Free Verse18 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a lovely free verse that speaks of something so true. Events and circumstances move us. The scene is awesome. Best of luck in the contest with this nice entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This is a lovely free verse that speaks of something so true. Events and circumstances move us. The scene is awesome. Best of luck in the contest with this nice entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hello Marilyn. Thank you for your lovely words and wishes!
Melissa
Comment from Sallyo
What an interesting, and clever, and really pretty profound, way of looking at things. I also like the refrain you've used, which lends the free verse some more form and shape
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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What an interesting, and clever, and really pretty profound, way of looking at things. I also like the refrain you've used, which lends the free verse some more form and shape
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Sally. Thank you. I am unsure of myself when I write Free Verse. I hope to learn more in the upcoming FS class on FV. I am glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you deliver a well penned Free Verse filled with a plethora of poetic devices to delight and uplift the reader. The content is wonderfully elevating as the ocean has always inspired an overwhelming feeling of serenity. The use of a closing couplet to summarize the moment is a brilliant move as it so completes the image and brings a subtle closure to the overall tone of lingering peace. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you deliver a well penned Free Verse filled with a plethora of poetic devices to delight and uplift the reader. The content is wonderfully elevating as the ocean has always inspired an overwhelming feeling of serenity. The use of a closing couplet to summarize the moment is a brilliant move as it so completes the image and brings a subtle closure to the overall tone of lingering peace. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hello MA. I really was encouraged by your review. I do not write much FV because I am unsure of myself. I hope to learn more when I take the upcoming FV class that FS will give in January. Thanks so much.
Melissa
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I was much the same way when it came to Free Verse. Michael Cahill pushed me hard to keep practicing. You really have it, Melissa, and simply need to keep refining it. I'm rooting for you!
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is a winner in my book, Melissa. I am always so impressed with the depth of your writing talent. This one sends me thinking. Perhaps it is only people that we can move and change.
Thanks again for sharing your talents.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This is a winner in my book, Melissa. I am always so impressed with the depth of your writing talent. This one sends me thinking. Perhaps it is only people that we can move and change.
Thanks again for sharing your talents.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Debbie. Thank you for your lovely words and encouragement. They really mean a lot to me. I am glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great free verse that reminds how moving moments touched us in positive ways. God help us to remember those positive memories much more than the negative ones. Thanks for sharing! Bill
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Great free verse that reminds how moving moments touched us in positive ways. God help us to remember those positive memories much more than the negative ones. Thanks for sharing! Bill
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Bill. Thanks so very much for your encouraging comments. :)
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Thank your for this, dear Melissa. It is true, I think God made these beautiful things to inspire is and move is to praise. It is in these lovely moments I sense His closeness.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank your for this, dear Melissa. It is true, I think God made these beautiful things to inspire is and move is to praise. It is in these lovely moments I sense His closeness.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Sally, good morning. I agree that these times do move me to a greater awareness of our Awesome God. Thanks for the comments. Glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Melissa.
-I like your poem very much,
and all of the thought and
observation you put into it.
-I like how you encourage us
to think about a particular
place or piece of music, and
then show us how these
memories stay a part of us,
and may have even changed us.
-A good conclusion, too, and
a good entry; good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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-Very nice image, Melissa.
-I like your poem very much,
and all of the thought and
observation you put into it.
-I like how you encourage us
to think about a particular
place or piece of music, and
then show us how these
memories stay a part of us,
and may have even changed us.
-A good conclusion, too, and
a good entry; good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Pam... thank you for your great comments. I appreciate your good wishes. I am going to take the class that Pantygynt is offering on Free Verse (in January) and will hopefully write better poetry. I hardly every write FV because I feel unsure of myself. Thanks again.
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa. I don't write much Free Verse. I guess I am partial to syllables:) You seem to enjoy the classes. It is a nice feature on the site.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is an interesting free verse poem reflecting on natural scenery. I wonder if a smaller font would have been a better choice so that the line breaks occur where you as the poet intended and not merely because you had run out of space.
Layout can play a major part in free verse.
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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This is an interesting free verse poem reflecting on natural scenery. I wonder if a smaller font would have been a better choice so that the line breaks occur where you as the poet intended and not merely because you had run out of space.
Layout can play a major part in free verse.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you!! I was just telling Pam (respa) that I plan to take your FV course in January so that I can learn to write it and stop feeling so unsure of myself. I hardly ever write that form because when I do, it comes across as a story, not FV. Hopefully, I will learn more about this form then. :). I will double check the layout.
Melissa